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I have posted a rewritten version of the beginning of my new story Centennial Park. There were some changes made and some additions, including a prologue, to make it flow a bit faster and to let the reader know a bit sooner what to expect.

 

http://nifty.nisusnet.com/nifty/gay/encoun...ial-park-1.html

 

This replaces the earlier version posted on GayAuthors. I have received no confirmation back from Nifty yet about the story and just stumbled on it by chance in the Encounters section. I'm not quite certain why its there, but maybe because of the prologue. Anyway.....

 

Please read it and let me know what you think! You can PM me at GayAuthors, or email at FreeThinkerCG "at" yahoo.com. This is not the address in the story, but Netscape webmail is effing up again and I am sick of their unreliability.

 

Doh Zvidanye. B)

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Chapter 3 is up and, in answer to several email questions, yes there is sex in the story,,, blah blah blah,,, and... HERE IT IS! :P

 

Maybe not wild and crazy, hot and sweaty monkey sex, but... well, I'm 46 and without Viagra this is the best I can do! So get over it! :P:P

 

Actually, thank you to everyone who has emailed. I appreciate the encouragement. :boy:

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Chapters 4 and 5 have been posted and I just emailed chapter 6 tonight. I have gotten a wonderful response to my story, but I have heard from only two people on GA. I value the opinions and advice of my fellow authors and would greatly appreciate some feedback, whether negative or positive.

 

Thanks!!

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I'm not an author, so I can't comment :P

As a proofreader I have to say you've done a good job. :2thumbs:

 

OK, since I never know when to shut up B) , here it goes:

 

I've read all the posted chapters, and must say I'm impressed. Not so much by the story line - it's too early in the plot for that, actually I am weary of recommending a story until it's finished as a matter of principle - but the care in describing the background, or setting if you prefer, the details that constitute small town USA has impressed me.

 

That is the kind of effort I like to see put into a story, and makes it enjoyable to :read: for me.

 

Please carry on.

 

007

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Thank you, James!

 

I have just sent in Chapter 7 and received my confirmation from Nifty.

 

I must warn you that Chapter 7 is difficult. This is where the crux of the story becomes obvious and it is ugly. I ask you to let me know what you think.

 

Thank you!

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Hi FT -

As an avid reader of most of your stories, I do feel that this is the best and continues to show your talents off well. You know, from e-mails, my enthusiasm but for you other story lovers out there, I highly recommend anything written by FT ... :worship:

 

Except maybe his poetry and limericks :P

 

Just bustin' 'em my friend. :wub:

 

John

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Chapter 11, the next to the last chapter has been sent in and David has emailed the confirmation.

 

We are at the climax. This part of the story has been very difficult for me as I drew on some of my own experience in writing it.

 

I find it interesting that of the more than 100 emails I have received regarding the story, only two have seen a similarity between Centennial Park and To Kill a Mockingbird and both of those were German! I am surprised no one else saw the similarity: a murder trial in small-town America told through the eyes of the child of one of the participating attorneys and how the trial affects that child's view of life.

 

I admit it was shameless theft but I was inspired after the passing of Gregory Peck. I re-read Mockingbird, which I had first read at 13 in 1971, (about the time this story takes place) and decided that there are similarities between the black experience of the first half of the 20th Century and the gay experience of the second half.

 

Please let me know what you think. I hope I haven't been pretentious. I admit that I have deliberately "toned down" the story from the original manuscript written last fall, not out of disrespect to the readers on Nifty, but because I was trying to be cognizant of the market. What are your thoughts?

 

Thank you for reading my story!

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