Sorry to say this, but there is no emotion in this story.
The story in words may/could be interesting, but i could not feel the characters.
After chapter 3 i lost interest and the reading of the story took longer and longer.
The story could be better .... it is not a "must read".
Der Abgrund
Du stehst am Abgrund,
weisst nicht wie weiter.
Eine Brücke gibt es nicht,
auch keine Leiter.
Du siehst hinab ins tiefe schwarz,
hörst deinen Namen zugerufen.
Wendest dich ab,
gehst 2 Schritt,
doch kannst nicht anders.
Springst ins Schwarze Loch
und fällst.
Fällst und fällst und fällst,
kommst doch nie an am Boden.
Denkst: Was hab ich nur getan?
Willkommen im Leben.
The abyss
You stand on the brink,
dont know as farther.
A bridge dont exi
Yes ... i give you that, but it was the most depressing chapter i have read to today.
I liked this character ... and it was not necessary that he died.
"Anyway, it seems like I've read too many stories where someone dies meaninglessly and I'm brought down instead of up, even if the character finds a reason to smile at the end. It's disappointing."
It is like Your story: In a fishbowl.
You have done it yourself.
My Favorite Sandwich: 2 hot studs and me in the middle .... and to eat toast ham, grilled bacon, egg, salad, tomato, pickles, salad, ham, bacon and toast.
Lord of the flys shows the true nature of mankind, such as most other books named and therefor they tried to ban them.
Most people dont want to be shown there inner self in such a direkt and entertaining way, because they want to be better than others and have false ethiks and moralism.