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The New Relationship Gets Complicated
andy cannon commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in The New Relationship Gets Complicated
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Another great installment!
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Ain't that the truth!
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A beautifully written chapter!
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This is exactly the sort of elevated literary discussion I come here for.
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Sure seems to be heading that way!
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I love the non-linear time line!
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From my perspective I had to lean heavily on what Coleridge called 'the willing suspension of disbelief', unable to completely suppress my 21st century tastes and expectations, but wanting to remain true to the period as much as possible. Diary excerpts are a handy tool, but the diary doesn't respond. A confidant on board the ship would be problematic, and almost anyone on shore presents their own issues. As the story goes on, it gets worse. Every time Jamie and William see each other they are practically humping the masts like dogs while the rest of the crew are equal parts suspicious and oblivious, often in the same conversation. It's a bumpy ride for sure.
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Great points! Allowing for hanging the letter up may be hyperbole, Thomas is 18 at this point and perfectly capable of foolish behavior such as publically displaying the letter and then saying he kept it secret from their mother. You are certainly correct that young brothers of that era, or any other for that matter, would not share so intimately, but I wanted Jamie to have an outlet for this thoughts, and I thought Thomas a likely candidate. Maybe the village vicar would have worked better?
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The Shoals The Waterfront at English Harbour, Antigua--- Morning The sun had only just lifted past the hills, casting long blue shadows across the yard behind the sail loft. The air still held a trace of last night’s rain, warm, earthy, damp. Tar bubbled in the seams of the boards, and lines hung drying in careful loops from pegs driven into the outer wall. Blake sat on a low barrel, tugging at the frayed seam of his glove. His coat was open at the throat, hair damp from
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Let the games begin! Great cast of characters.
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A charming, whimsical story told with great imagination and skill.
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The Three Amazing Vampires
andy cannon commented on BendtedWreath's story chapter in The Three Amazing Vampires
Lovely little nugget. I enjoyed it a lot. -
A really wonderful chapter, very honest convo.
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Very nice! Just enough left open that if you want to return to these characters later you have a lot to work with.
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So I had to Google him because I'm older than dirt, and as best as I can figure out he makes his rep by trying different hairstyles and posting them on his socials. Do I have that right? Kids today!
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That chapter really has the juices flowing! Wow!
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Mom's little talk is a gem of fine writing!
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I didn't take any computer classes back in the day, but I watched a lot of friends sweating through reviewing two or three hundred cards that constituted a program to perform some simple function, trying to find the ONE comma out of place that caused a crash. I have contact PTSD from reading this!
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That cough of Peter's is quite the 'Chekhov's gun in the first act'. I look forward to seeing where this leads!
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A charming, funny story about revenge gone right and a binder of plans is no match for real emotions.
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When Your Exes Marry, Don't Kiss Your Fake Date
andy cannon commented on Rafy's story chapter in When Your Exes Marry, Don't Kiss Your Fake Date
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When release finally is achieved, I suspect it will look like an all-guns broadside from a man-of-war. Prepare to duck.
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Drydock It was like being pulled against your will by something you half hoped would break. The longboats strained at their lines, sailors rowing in steady rhythm, sweat gleaming on their backs beneath the heat. Belle Thérèse drifted forward inch by inch, too grand and ungainly to maneuver under her own power in such narrow waters. The tide offered little assistance, just enough to tempt belief that she moved under her own command, though anyone who knew better could see the truth o
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That would be interesting! I fear that Pitt would rather gouge his eyes out than commit the indiscretion of a ménage à trois. At this point in the story, Jamie has eyes only for Pitt, but earlier if someone proposed, "How about a three..." he would have been stripping off his uniform before the "...some?"
