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The Puppet and the Puppet Master
andy cannon commented on E K Stokes's story chapter in The Puppet and the Puppet Master
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That took a turn! You did warn us in the synopsis,
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A story with a lot of disappointment for the narrator as he learns some bitter lessons about the people around him, but none for the readers who can savor this well-written piece. Highly recommended.
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You made great choices here! Wonderful chapter.
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Yeah, I don't see Granger as susceptible to the same repression and caution that plague Pitt. He might have had both Pitt and Blake by now!
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Chapter Seven: Texts After Dark
andy cannon commented on Twisted_Dreemz's story chapter in Chapter Seven: Texts After Dark
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Don't hold back! Be as blood thirsty as you want.
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The Line Holds, Just Officers’ Wardroom, Early Evening The lamps in the officers’ wardroom cast an amber glow across the polished wood and brass. The table had been cleared of charts and cups. What remained was silence, broken only by the occasional groan of the timbers and the faint creak of a distant block swinging in the breeze. Captain Huxley sat at the head of the table. He had not changed his coat. He had not removed his gloves. His expression like a man weig
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Hmmmm... making a Fairy Prince angry just doesn't sound like it will contribute to a Life Plan of tranquility and calm!
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Chapter 8 - Second Home
andy cannon commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 8 - Second Home
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Very good chapter!
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That is a naughty chapter, and I love it!
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Chapter 26 - Out!
andy cannon commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 26 - Out!
I was today years old when I learned that a club called the Phallus Phactory was the place to go to see naked women. The Mermaid's Throne on the other hand.... -
That couldn't have gone much worse for Jimmy. I'm glad he got through it.
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Gaah! Feelings! I'm not crying, you're crying!
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Shorter chapter this time, next one is going to be much longer. You packed a lot into a small package!
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A really engrossing chapter.
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Very tender scene in the secluded clearing. I look forward to seeing what transpires in Chicago.
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If the Wedding Industrial Complex gets wind of you portraying a ceremony that costs less than 10 months of income, you can expect an assassin to be headed your way!
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Oh, most assuredly!
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The Moment They Knew Quarterdeck, Dusk The sun sank, gilding the horizon and stretching shadows across the deck of HMS Absolute, softening the day's grime. The wind had slackened, the sails hung loose in their sheets, and the ship rocked gently. Lieutenant William Pitt stood near the rail, posture exact, hands clasped behind his back. His coat was buttoned high despite the humid air, his collar sharp. He stared east, where Saint Lucia lay just beyond the haze, and his jaw set and
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I dip my standard and doff my hat to you, sir!
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Excellent question, and one that I didn't resolve explicitly in the story. Based on actions and roles, I think it works out to Pitt as First, followed by Vane, Avery, Morris and then some minor characters who just have an appearance or two. The mids are Gordon as senior, followed by O'Brien, then Blake and Douglas before the less-used characters.
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Those law and order, by the book types always seem to scream about the downfall of society and then deliberately engineer the very chaos they warned about.
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You nailed it! I only now realized that his comment, "the wind has shifted... stay out of the rigging" has a metaphorical meaning as well, a warning about the campaign Vane is waging against them, but then Pitt's prescience about the fall from the rigging has to be accounted for, ad I would have no answer to that.
