Renee Stevens

Thanks for the review! I'm glad that you enjoyed this chapter and though there is still quite a bit of emotional stuff to come, hopefully it doesn't get to be too much!

Okay, I have been a bad beta reader, not commenting on the chapters! *smacks hand* anyways.. Love this chapter... I really love how you are able to show Bashta's dedication to healing the clan. Especially him staying with Merilyn while Cavel returns to the clan with the serum. I know it can't be easy to be away from each other, especially since they haven't been apart for any length of time since being bound together and honestly, since meeting. You capture this very well with the ending, with Cavel's orders to bring Bashta back as quickly as possible! Great Job!

Thank you so much for your review! In answer to your question, I read through that section to see if I could tell where you were coming from on that. I can see how it could be difficult to understand and I am considering a rewrite of this story which will make it clearer. The bad guys waited for a time for Trace to come back, when he didn't, they realized they needed to draw him out somehow. From what I know, police partners are very close (many of them anyways), and the bad guys simply figured that using his partner was the best way to draw him out. Even with Trace gone, it was unlikely that he wouldn't be in contact with his partner and the station. They found out when Mitch would be least likely to be missed (basically his days off) and moved in. I can't remember for sure if I had there being a mole in the station, but if there was, then that mole could have even informed the bad guys of when Trace checked in. I will definitely have to look more at the possibilities if I do a rewrite! Thank you again for your review and your question!

81 words per minute with 100% accuracy, but that was with the site... www.typingtest.com With your website, I got the following: Your speed was: 83wpm. Congratulations! You made no mistakes, practice does make perfect.

I agree with both Nephy and Maria. The way the story is told in kind of a detached way is a bit chilling. We know the basic things the character is feeling, but really not how it is changing who he was. I really liked the bit in here about "boy" telling himself his name and his parents name's every night. It gives us the slightest insight that he has not yet forgotten who he is.

Though this story is fiction, I think this chapter captures the need we all have for human interaction in one form or another. As unhappy as he was with his situation, he felt better, more wanted after he was no longer ignored. Good job in capturing this facet of human behavior.

Ok, well, I decided not to listen to you and read this one anyways, so !!! Anyways, the first chapter is good, very dark and leaves the reader wondering what is going to happen as the story progresses.

I really enjoyed reading this story. It was both entertaining and yet serious at the same time, which is a hard line to walk. You did a great job and I agree that adopted kids should have access to anything that could affect them later in life. Medical records especially, since as you pointed out in your story, some diseases are genetic. It's an issue that probably doesn't get the notice that it should, but you're story put it out there. Thank you!

I really liked this short story, especially how Matthew was determined to pay his own way rather than burden his mother with his expenses. I think this story is a good example of doing what you have to do to get where you want to be. Thanks for the great read!

I love this poem and how the emotions just leap off the page. Emotions are a hard thing to write about and I think that you did a beautiful job with this piece. You truly have a gift, being able to bring such strong emotions to your work. I look forward to reading many more works by you! Keep up the great work.

I love all the emotion that you were able to weave into this poem. It really makes one stop and think. Both poems separate are a wonderful read, but read together it is that much more poignant. Thank you for sharing it!

Really enjoyed this poem! The pictures that you paint with your words, whether in poetry or in your stories, are wonderful! Thanks hon for an enjoyable read!

I loved it! Really don't know what to say other than this poem is so poignant and yet shrouded in mystery up until the end! Thank you for sharing hon!

Thank you so much for your kind words. I like to have some sort of structure, even if it's not immediately apparent what that might be. I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

Thank you so much for reviewing! Yes, that's the end for these guys... I think I've put them through enough hell that it's time that they get their happy ending. Though they may appear in a later story, but won't necessarily be the focus of it. I try to watch the name thing, but occasionally it slips by me, and when I wrote this, I didn't have the totally awesome beta's that i have now! Thanks again for taking the time to review every chapter, it was great to see and read your thoughts as the story progressed!!!

What can I say, I have to put my characters through hell for some reason.... so yeah, you're right, it's not over yet, but close! Thanks hon!

Dang! First a damn you, now total bitch... lol... I'm glad that you are enjoying the story and that it is suspenseful enough to hold your attention! Thanks for the wonderful review!

Woohoo! Not only did I get a "Ah HELL" but I got a "Damn you" too!!!! I love these scenes where Levi shows that he has a backbone! Thanks hon!

They are pretty likeable, ain't they Thanks hon!

Originally, when I started this story, I didn't plan on bringing the agents into it, but as the story evolved, it just seemed to be a nice twist to add... Glad it's working! Thanks for the review hon!

Thanks Nephy! I felt the need for something a bit more lighthearted after the scene with Christian... I think bastard is too nice a word when it comes to describing Christian, lol... Glad you are enjoying the story!!

My opinion on Christian is... PSYCHO!!!!! but that's just me! Thanks for the review!!

Thanks Nephy! I really did not like that woman, but she was a necessary evil in the story!

Thanks Nephy! Right now I think they both have it pretty bad... Blaine for thinking he has to leave, and Levi for being the one who was left... Not to mention everything else going on... Levi really doesn't seem the type to just give up on something he wants, lol...

I hope that is interesting in a good way... I wanted to show how sometimes we are focused so many on one thing that we ignore everything around us. Thanks for the review!