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  1. Hamen Cheese
    Hehe. No worries. The "realization" is coming very soon. I'm glad you liked the kid. Other than to serve as a means for me to show a different side of Derek (and his relationship with Charlie), he is a character of another story I'm hoping to write eventually. The plot of that story is already in my head but unfortunately, I do not have the time to write too many stories at the same time. While writing Charlie, I'm also working on another one so other stories will have to wait.
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    CHAPTER 12: Cockblocked “Charlie! Why aren’t you ready yet?” Charlie looked up from the physics book he was reading, a book that wasn’t even part of our reading list. He was seated on his crowded study desk and was giving me a perplexed look. We had gone to our separate houses after his first day of work so that each of us could prepare. Mr. Maloney was nice enough to let Charlie off early with full pay given we had to prepare for our dates tonight. The fact that we had actually organized
  3. Hamen Cheese
    Wait a minute, you mean Derek ISN'T nice? The answer to your question will get answered in the next chapter.
  4. Hamen Cheese
    A lot of the details in the story come from Derek's point of view so we don't get an omnipotent narrator who can convey exactly what is happening and what the characters are thinking or feeling. Derek does, on occasion, express what he thinks others feel though often quite inaccurately. Sometimes what you're reading to be fact may actually just be perception. I agree that Charlie's character is a bit "subdued". Let's see if a little more of his depth comes out in the succeeding Chapters. In the meantime, thanks for reading and leaving reviews.
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    Haha thanks. I rather like visiting those doors but I'm hoping to open some new, unfamiliar ones as well. Hehe. More will be coming though I wonder if it's what everyone is expecting.
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    Charlie

    Hamen Cheese commented on Hamen Cheese's story in Fiction

    Haha. Maybe, maybe not. We'll see in the next chapter.
  7. Hamen Cheese
    Thanks for reading kjoel!
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    CHAPTER 11: Charlie Gets a Job “You’re awfully quiet.” “Sorry, what?” I asked. I must have zoned out because Charlie was looking worriedly at me. “Does it bother you that I got a job? You don’t have to come with me you know.” It took me a moment to realize what we were talking about. “Oh. No, no of course not. It doesn’t bother me at all. Heck, I think it’s a great thing even if all you’re doing is stacking stuff.” “I am not just stacking stuff,” Charlie rolled his eyes. “I’m a ca
  9. Hamen Cheese

    Cobey Hodson

    Hamen Cheese commented on akisar61's story in Fiction

    The story kept me hooked until the end. Unfortunately, the ending and how you reached it was a bit abrupt. I was expecting a little more. Thank you though for the story.
  10. Hamen Cheese
    You're welcome and I sure do hope too.
  11. Hamen Cheese
    Aww, I shudder to think what would happen if I ever brought a "Derek" to a GA meet or something. Haha.
  12. Hamen Cheese
    Thanks! I might just write in more detail regarding that. We'll see. Hehe.
  13. Hamen Cheese
    Thanks! Hehe. Well... things won't be pretty when that time comes. He wouldn't be "Derek" if it was.
  14. Hamen Cheese
    Thank you, Lisa. Hehe. Things are definitely going to get spicy soon. In my last story, I was told I was sometimes too ambiguous. Maybe now I'm being too obvious lol. Oh well, we'll see.
  15. Hamen Cheese
    Derek isn't stupid, trust me on that. Unfortunately, I can't answer your question regarding Travis and Charlie. But... you'll never know till the end.
  16. Hamen Cheese
    Thank you and I hope you hang on long enough to find out how it will all end. It's difficult to write a main character that not everyone will easily like but can easily hate. Cheers.
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    That was expected hehe and I constantly worry about the balance between the making readers love or hate my characters. I've never written from the point of view of the kind of character readers would just love to hate. I hope that they'll always hang on long enough to find that maybe, just maybe, he wasn't so bad after all. And no, he's certainly not a waste of space but sometimes situations... change people. Sometimes, in worse ways.
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    Ch 10: Karate Kid

    Hamen Cheese posted new chapter in Charlie

    CHAPTER 10: Karate Kit “Chaaarlie… What are we doing here?” I asked for the nth time. We had front row seats on the stands of the Southmore gym, a few feet away from the matted section where the martial arts sports tournament was being held. I rarely ever sat in the stands (ironic how they named that really). Usually, I was out on the court being cheered by my many fans. However, that particular Wednesday did not have any interschool games for the Basketball team. The only sports having a tourn
  19. Hamen Cheese
    Loved it. Thanks for the read. I'd put plus points but C James ate my quote for the day.
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    For the Love

    Hamen Cheese commented on C James's story in Fiction

    Loved it. Thanks for the read. ++ points for you.
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    Brotherly Love

    Hamen Cheese commented on Circle's story in Fiction

    I so regret reading this. Haha. Not that it was bad. I think it was well written. It's just that the ending was so sad and it just wasn't my thing. Hehe. Thanks though for the read.
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    If only I could write that fast haha. No promises on who ends up together though. It will be roller coaster ride for quite awhile. As usual, thanks for reading.
  23. Hamen Cheese
    Haha. Well I'm glad somebody likes him (and not only because of his perfect personality hehe). Knowing what will happen, I also like him though I imagine it would be difficult to have a friend like him - which in a less exaggerated way I really do have in real life.
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    Haha. Well that's Derek for you. We'll see what happens next week.
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    Maybe... Hehe. Thanks for reading!
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