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So I thought I'd post my first story... work in progress I guess. Summary: Jack is a young adult who recently graduated from college, jobless. Focusing on his previous failures in his lifetime, he begins to reevaluate his choices in life, desperately hoping for a better future. I'm not writing a very over-the-top sci/fi story this time with to change destiny, but the main character will find that changing past actions may not have the outcomes he had expected while looking back in hindsight. What would he change, how would he cope? I'd like to thank Frostina for editing and beta reading for me. She's amazing. https://www.gayauthors.org/story/fmd/fixingmydestiny

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The scent of caked-on bubble gum on the sidewalk was barely registering in his nostrils as he walked along the foggy streets of San Francisco. Jack Chan was taking the Muni trolley downtown to find a job. At 23 he had finally finished his undergraduate program, a bit later than his peers, but finished with a respectable degree nonetheless. The sounds of trolleys changing tracks and rushing past moderate rush hour traffic pleased Jack as he got to West Portal Station a bit early to beat the morni

As Jack continued his ride back to West Portal Station, he counted down the three stops remaining before he could hop off the trolley and get away from the odd looks from the few who were near him and saw those tears. Those unmistakable drops that betrayed him, breaking his usual state of hardened exterior, had left him so vulnerable, he just wanted to run. But he was in an underground street car with nowhere to run. It was futile to even try to escape. ‘Just three stops, get through Castro,

Jack is a young adult who recently graduated from college, jobless. Focusing on his previous failures in his lifetime, he begins to reevaluate his choices in life, desperately hoping for a better future.

>.< really? try searching for the closed thread from not even a week ago. ; we're not opening that can of worms again. EDIT: Here I'll even link it for ya https://www.gayauthors.org/forums/topic/31205-concerned-reader/

I stopped doing that around 4th grade... I think my "creative writing" stuff ended abruptly after that. You know now that I think of it...4th grade was when I stopped going to the public library and wait for my mom to get off work and pick me up back in the day... that might explain a few things. Sara, you've just answered yet another question that's been bugging me for years. Thanks

You meant Conner right? Jared's dad is gone...

Okay... so compared to Veronica... Melissa is a bit more innocently manipulative. I can't put my finger on it, but if she was really that good of a sister she wouldn't have taken the $20 bribe. This probably hints towards a future argument where if she doesn't get what she wants in front of her parents, out of raging hormones or just classic bitchiness she'll "accidentally" out Conner and then touch his arm... "oOo I'm so sorry I didn't mean to do it... can I get $20 for the movies again so I don't out you to the rest of the town?" Good chappy, but I'm thoroughly pissed. Need to find something to calm myself before I unleash some anger. Conner needs to strike back damn it!!! The continuing helplessness of Conner is consistent, but it makes me just so damn mad when everyone around him decides to use him and abuse him for what Conner can do for them instead of the other way around. (Sorry for the JFK bit there lol)

woot!!!! Reading now...

Nope, apparently you live in Belmont according to your profile. There's a pretty big difference there As much as you want to quote its diverse and rich culture in collaboration in the arts as well as social justice, I would hope that with your vast experience that you would first take in what we have to offer and then soak in what this free website provides before mounting a humorous, yet futile attempt to provoke a very hardworking admin and support group who operate this community. I am glad that the mere misunderstanding as you have stated in your post that you may truly understand this community for what it truly is. The team surely appreciates feedback, but knowing the limitations of which they may operate may perhaps ensure that another one of these misunderstandings do not occur by any member in the future. The ID 10T Strategic Response Team position is still available if you still want it

Thanks Cia for another great story. I must not know much about mythical creatures, because for the longest time I couldn't tell who or what each of the characters were or how much of a conflict is between each of the various clans/races. It seemed like it took until about the 3rd to last chapter before I finally started meshing the character dynamics perfectly. I know I'm going to end up rereading this story now that I finally understand who and what clan each character belongs to and what personality traits I should expect. I think a bit more time could be spent describing the main characters a bit more in the beginning chapters to help set the stage for those unfamiliar with mythical creatures, but that's really just my reaction to being uneducated in the genre. Great story!

As much of a nice guy that I am, I'm filing this thread's so-called "complaints" into the ID 10T error pile. It's an ever growing list. Perhaps instead of helping Lugh... Daffy can man the ID 10T Strategic Response Unit of GA.

The story was amazing, as it brought an abrupt, but soothing closure to the novel - and I really liked it.A couple of things I would have really liked to find explained more in detail in the story, like how the evidence was impounded for so long and they couldn't determine the cause of the crash for such a long period of time. I also wanted to finally find out just how Dane was positioned to call Tap "just in time" if he was coerced into being in the driver's seat, parked in neutral, over a hill... I would understand how blunt force trauma to the head would block memories, so it's not a significant oversight by any means. However, it would have been nice to be able to get a fuller picture of what happened.Like Andy, I don't see Charlie as Eickel's grandson, the fact that the character was introduced not as someone Eichels brought in, but someone that social services brought in for in-home care. The apartment gunfight was unexpected to say the least. Well, the build-up of tension kind of hinted to someone getting shot, but the mystery of Charlie being also a bodyguard and someone conveniently misses the fact that Dane and Tap were returning home early, not scoping out the apartment beforehand, and other very important traits that any bodyguard or security officer would have done as a basic duty were overlooked. Even if Charlie was only applying to be in the academy, which would explain the blatant oversight, you'd think that Charlie would be a bit more focused on his grandfather's strict assignment of protecting the couple.Cia, you realize you can start a saga just with novel right? You still have Dane's grandmother who can dish out senile evil You have the wonders of college, the changing of interpersonal relationships as more adult independence becomes a part of Neri, Dave, Dane, and Tap's lives, along with changing family dynamics of the Leerans. You've got yourself a gold mine. If you feel like writing another one - go for it, you know you've got yourself quite a few fans who won't stop badgering you for more chappys. :PThanks Cia!

woot!

Yeah I definitely read DK's stories out of order... I'm going to have to read The Beard over again to catch those details.

The story was just the right length, yet I felt empty as I finished - not because the story was lacking, but because I wished the story would go on. The plot painted a beautiful picture of the beginning of a great relationship and I was sad that the storyline wasn't taken further. But amazing story nonetheless. Great job!

Great story I hope I see more of your stories in the "Complete" section Please keep up your great work!

So Frosty sent me a review of my first chapter of my new story I'm writing. I have to say in some respects I'm a bit garbled with what I want to present, when I want to present it, and how I should do it - well. I'm not trying to put down any of the authors I've had immense pleasure of reading through their works. However, I believe I like to keep my stories a bit more grounded, a little less extraordinary, with a bit more real-life scenarios - where not only lives are at stake, but money, family, and "common" tragedies creep up at the worst moments and sneak up on you when you least expect or want it. At the same time, I'm not trying to write a pure sob story that's just completely emo. This will be interesting as the main character, who will have a name very similar to a Hollywood Star and would never grow up without not hearing the same jokes about his name day in and day out... interact with his own growth process, will take a toll on himself as he begins a long introspection and reevaluation of his life decisions. Not to give anything away because... well... let's face it I'm writing Chapter 2 at the moment... lol... I'm going to bet that the self-realization will begin a new genre of stories I hope to be writing in the future. Fixing My Destiny. ~Jay To my wonderful Editor + Beta Reader Frosty: zomfg you're the best <3

Use the Schwartz!!!!

Just read Ch. 8. So... a) lol at the comeback... Good for Conner DAMN YOU VERONICA...GTFO!!!! c) Awesome chapter... Keep them coming <33

hehe thanks for your response. I'll say this though: Take your time and write it "right". I'd rather savor the story in the long run and gladly admitting that the wait was worth it. Keep up your awesome work!

omg now I wanna read more... who linked this to me in chat yesterday?!!??? I'm hooked and the story is not complete... nooooooooo...

Ended up reading The Hostage last night. But no matter, I'm writing the story finally.

I need to stop lying to myself. I think I started to enjoy Carl DaVinci's short stories that I decided to give it another go. Instead of writing I read The Script between last night and this morning, and I loved the story. I think it is wonderful how people can meet in all sorts of circumstances, however unlikely, and come together despite their respective hardships and impasses. Carl DaVinci's The Script is a Hollywood-based drama when a teen star takes a starring role in an upcoming Hollywood film as a gay man, when to his knowledge at the time, is straight. He meets his co-star and develops an deeper relationship which flourished into something the two of them could no longer deny was something more than just rehearsals and retakes. The parental influences, media influences, and other external conflicts that Marcus, the main character faced, only dug deep within himself to find answers he was not prepared to find, and when he dug himself out of the hole after a realization of how much he missed David, his co-star and eventual lover, transformed into a new individual - something that none of the characters foresaw. It is always fascinating how I find new ways of how authors are able to convey the same, if not a deeper implied intensity and details in short stories. It always gives me perspective on what sort of style I want to write. In a way I want to dive into details of the surroundings, I want to immerse the reader into every detail of every step the character takes, yet something as simple with one sentence can sometimes portray more than what a paragraph can at times. One contemplates Again, thank you Frosty for the recommendation to read Carl's work, and thank you Carl for writing another amazing series! I look forward to spending my writing time away by reading your stories instead Carl DaVinci ~ The Script: https://www.gayauthors.org/story/carl-davinci/thescript