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You're such a tease...

okay...good thing i read this thread...because i just finished ch.15 and it didn't seem anywhere being 'complete'... Hm... Any chance this can be fixed or link th rest of the chapters off site until this is fixed?? Thx

Great story. I sometime enjoy the fact that the readers have to fill in the blanks when they're reading short stories. It allows them to paint the rest of the picture whilethe plot continues on. I liked the overall plot and the ending was something I looked forwarded to. While unlike St-st-stuffed, the way this story allowed the thought of James and Benny being a couple be an external though made by Gina - it wasn't necessarily forced, but a progressive nudge to take the plot to the other side. I think the most likable fact is that how the main characters actually wanted to pursue and embraced the idea of being in a relationship and with their deep friendship, it wasn't hard to find out that subconsciously they've been pursuing each other. Great job! Look forward to reading more of your short stories.

Shane.

Chapter 2's been published: https://www.gayauthors.org/story/fmd/fixingmydestiny/2

Guitar Hero Metallica was pointless yet amazing... but I still love GH3 and GH:WT. I don't like Rock Band's interface

The drive to the doctor’s office was uneventful, not like Jack wanted it to be full of close-calls. It was mid-morning after the rush of traffic as he drove, the fog seemingly rolled by his windshield as the morning chill in San Francisco continued to make even daylight seem ominous. Looking for a parking spot, reminded him he should have just taken the bus instead, but he knew he didn’t need to be on public transportation again after what happened on the street car earlier. His mind flashe

The latter... which brings me back to my previous post of post faster

Blah... face it... you just like screwing with our minds You won't write it until after you're done with the whole story... or when we you. It's alright... the who wants to be naughty can be just as useful as plot development as the . We're not asking you to get all nasty and raunchy... blah ... but still... some would be nice if it's sprinkled in a bit here and there.

Okay... I'm at the first asterisk of Ch. 11. And for the record, I am strangling my computer monitor (like an angry abusive dad shaking a baby) because you skipped another sex scene. Write it... don't gloss over it. It's important to show exactly how far each time went and the progression of their physical and emotional relationship each time they are together. It's not just a dirty thing for you to skip over - in a way it describes a lot about how much or little they enjoy each other! More commentary to come later I'm expecting... Maybe I'll just edit this post to add on. Okay, the rest of the chapter was nice... but seems like karma's coming back to bite Connor in the ass with Beth. Admitting that he was dating would compromise Jared. Pushing Beth away would be cold. Lying to Rebecca would lead to more lies and eventually the end of their friendship with the only people he was accepted (somewhat) by when he first got to college, especially Rebecca. Gah, okay... Sara... This isn't the Disney Channel... You rated the story as Mature for a reason. I hope in the near future you'll finally write about how intimate Connor and Jared's physical relationship gets instead of pressing the Fast Forward button every time a sex scene queues up. Will Connor shake off Beth, will Jared get jealous? Will "accidents" happen between Beth and Connor where Jared just happens to be there and ruin the trust and delicate nature of their relationship? I <3 my computer monitor. Please don't make me shake it again. It's a really nice 1080p 24" Samsung I bought from Black Friday and I really enjoy having it in operational order. However, your writing continues to amaze me. While I would have picked a more direct story path, you provide context and backstory to your minor characters and other associated interactions while keeping it relevant to social skills and while still keeping the point of view focused on Connor. Keep up with your great work, and as one of your many avid fans, post faster

good... post faster

The way Jack stops breathing actually came to me while I was taking a shower. It actually blends quite well with how I want to write Chapter 3 and on, so I really hope you enjoy Chapter 2 when it comes out to tie what I have here to the direction I want to take this novel very soon! Thank you for your review!

Thanks! I wanted to paint a picture to start the character off, how low of a place he was in, and how he felt about his personal dilemmas before I began the story. I'm sorry if it came on too strong to make you want to hand him "an easy way out", but then I wouldn't have a novel to write Thank you for your interest! Chapter 2 is in editing mode now, I hope to post some time later this week.

I saw Cia's review on Chapter 23... she needs to read more to understand...

Thanks! Chapter 2 is pending Frostina's wonderful editing skills, and hope to publish some time this week.

This is how badass AnytaSunday is... In exactly 50 minutes she read 124k words and posted in this forum thread...

Am I the only guy here who listens to "harder" rock? Nevermind, Jesse_James has a couple I like... It's rare to find people actually liking Disturbed nowadays... ;

ditto

I love Canada... to blame! (eyes at previous post) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LAYMJnO9LBQ

Hey Cia, It looks like I read this story after The Price of Honor, so in a way I got a differing perspective, as this provided a wonderful back story to The Price of Honor. While this history was further discussed via Bel'lel's personal log entry, I am glad this provided a deeper understanding of how the "three-headed Lords" came to be. You should write something that explains Michael Sealer. Great Job once again! Fmd

I would... except my character doesn't have a love interest... why are we talking about /my/ story? If you wanna suggest it go to my forum thread for that ... You opened the door for some 15-minute action without explaining any of it... don't just and whisk something that special away... You've got a quota to fill in Part 2, Sara.

Now you're speaking my language!

You still have my interest... so... as long as you give me something shiny to go "oOo something shiny!!!" I'll be just fine.

Noooo! I refuse!!! Details... all of it!!! NAO!!!

I have been cited. <3 Chapter 10 was great, although there are 15 minutes missing from the last chapter that I demand to know the details of *ahem* The plot wrap-up is a nice way of ending Part 1, and I'm glad you ended it on a high note. While I still don't like Connor's mother, at least she's not seen as just using and abusing Connor day-in and day-out. There's still a sort of motherly value to her actions, and while I can't agree with her "overbearing" or helicopter attitude towards parenting, I think I somewhat sympathize with Mrs. Owens a little bit more. Perhaps she just never got out of the "I shall instill a sense of motivation to my children in everything they do" phase and didn't know how to back off, thinking the moment she did that her children might completely let go of their futures. I like the story developments in Chapter 9 and 10, and I finally understood why you decided to split the chapters. By doing so you effectively removed a bit of doubt from the reader who would have grown a bit skeptical if both Jared, Connor, Mrs. Owens, and everyone else in the plot suddenly got a character developments within one single chapter. Spacing out the timeline to fast forward the gap in Jared and Connor's winter break also allowed the seeming growth of Connor such that not every thought of insecurity lingered in every other sentence that flowed in his brain, which also helped make Connor seem like he's mentally growing out of his shell a bit. Realistically how much he's actually grown this way may only be answered when the two are together again in school and hopefully in more social situations where Connor may demonstrate that growth... or the lack of it. I'm sure with Veronica around there will always be times where Connor may pull back. I'm interested to see where this takes the couple. Great job on Part 1! I can't wait to read what's next.