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HAPPY BIRTHDAY BOB!!! Have some fun, have some family, make some memories. {Psst - I suggest running down the street naked yelling "It's my birthday!" But that's just me }
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Welcome and enjoy. And if you liked Shane and Trey, you'll her other stuff even more. You picked a good author to start with
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The longer story will not include this, the characters will be different. The idea behind the MC of the longer story grew from these two. I have a lot of fight scene left in me - once i get the new stuff edited, reworked and re-written Thanks for the review Sara
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[Andrew_Q_Gordon] Not For Hire
Andrew Q Gordon replied to Andrew Q Gordon's topic in Promoted Author Discussion Forum
It seems that unless I am offering to give away prizes - well not just me, but most everyone not named, Dom or Mark - it is near impossible to get a real thriving discussion going on a personalized forum. BUT the effort is always appreciated. I had - note the past tense usage - no intention of creating 'side' stories but I really like the idea. Things that don't move the plot line ahead and what not. Wonderful Idea, I'm outta points at the moment but rest assured you are #1 on my list when I get them back. So nice to pick your brain, so many good ideas come out. -
Egads that was a wild chapter - I was all set to whine and complain that Allen couldn't be the baddie because in the prior chapters you had Michael not knowing who they were until WHAM. So he's blackmailing Allen eh?. Then, rather than be double crossed, the decides to kill the lot of them by shooting out the copter. Nice twist. What made it better was that Derek didn't know that Allen only JUST became a mole - he probably thought he was a long time informant. So with out that piece of info, he couldn't properly plan for what would happen next and ... well I am explaining it to you and you wrote
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Well that was a fine lesson in how NOT to protect your people IDK, Levi's reaction seemed a tad off - yeah I know I'm a tool for saying it, but it did - but that is probably just me. For a smart guy, he seems to totally ignore how truly dangerous this is - this might be my law enforcement background coming through - you know the side that says do what they say cause they know better than me? Clearly something is off here, I mean Michael has SOME Set of connection to infiltrate this. Nice tension however, I kept wanting to skip forward to see what happens.
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Why do I have this image of super agent Jason Bourne when we are talking about Derek - just an image. Michael is interesting, where does he get this money from? And how does a wanted killer have such connections in Law Enforcement?? Question you will not doubt explain in your own good time
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Duck?? um yeah monsieur Kenard who has the brain of a duck you know - That was a paraphrase from Monty Python's and The Holy Grail. Stealing the master wizard's apprentice might have been a good thing had he the time - but that might be for another story :PThanks for the review
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Hey Cailen, Well if we do make it to Mass to get married and you make it, you two will be the only two there besides mike and me, that is sort of the plan it seems. But still would be grand Thanks for the info and for being willing to help.
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Thanks Nephy, the 'expanded' version isn't entirely connected but it should be easy to see the relation to the characters once you see it. yes, folks WILL see it, just a matter of when, lolthanks for reading
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Really?? I got fined $25 last week for leaving mine on accidentally when I was in court. That isn't a quirk for me, it's a necessity
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Whew - caught up to what I read on the train - just in time to go read more today. LOL Well that does clear up a ton about Christian. Okay here is a for you. How perfectly you capture gay men - death looms around the corner from a psycho ex-bf who is really a serial killer and the 'boys' are oogling pictures of agents who are going to be guarding them and wondering what they can and can't do. Typical. I once went to a funeral of a gay friend of mine and my friends who went with me were cruising the church. I was SO pissed [i was newly out at the time so I guess I was naive] but the point is nothing is too serious for us gay to cruise.
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I've got a few comments - 1) You're mean - first you give us the horrible ominous sense of doom that Christian has an inside man in the police department, then you give us the boys going rock wild doing the mattress mambo. We can't even enjoy that because we're waiting for Christian to show up an knife them or something. 2) The first scene shouldn't have been shown. For a suspense story, it would have been better NOT to know what Christian is thinking, then just have it happen and explained later. This, IMHO, gave away too much. Of course the flip side is it has us on edge but we know too much about HOW Christian is doing it. Just my thought. But it is good too see the boys having so much fun
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Nice, in the last chapter I was wondering how the hell Levi got away. Okay, I have to laugh at this - bleach blonde goatee that's black - I see that dopey guy from TV in my head although he is kinda chunky. Anyway, it is NOT a good look so it's perfect for the evil Christian. I still wonder what more there is to Christian for him to do this. it seems like Blaine knows there is more to him but has never said why or how he knows.
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Thanks Simon - I am working on the longer longer story, it is not really a continuation or anything of this one, more like these two characters gave me the idea for the longer story that borrows a few of the details from this but doesn't follow Marcus and Kenard, though again, I have borrow some names, details etc. That's because there needed to be a real conflict for a longer story and I had to tweak quite a few details to get that to work - or to where I thought/think it works, readers will have to decide if it does. Thanks for the review, I'll let you know when the other comes out. I think I'm about 1/4 through revising the other. So going as it was started so long ago. --- Andy
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You didn't miss anything Renee, the 'twists' were planned in this. I wanted everyone to think Kenard was himself, though I worried the lack of sword would be a give away. The kiss at the end was designed to be something a shock - again, I was hoping I didn't give too much away in the beginning but wanted to hint at their relationship - 'you of all people' 'hang around me enough' So no you read it exactly how I wanted it, which means you were spot on not, dense. -- Thanks Andy
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I tried with the staff to say at one point Kenard released the second of the spells woven into the staff - the first one he released by slamming one end onto the ground, the second by using both ends - that was as close to 'lying' as I wanted to get, to give the idea that it was something Marcus put into the staff for Kenard to use. I avoided 'Kenard' using other types of magic to avoid giving away that it was really Marcus. I might just go back and make that minor tweak. Never thought about how 'the' denoted only one, but it makes total sense. -- Thanks for the review Cia.
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It is definitely a saga in the making. I have been editing/re-writing for a bit but you'd be amazed at how little I knew when I started the long story - things like perspective, emotion, conflict - all I cared about before was telling the story. it's a bit of a slog. This was short so it was MUCH easier to rework. Soon hopefully. Thanks for the review. Andy
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[Andrew_Q_Gordon] Not For Hire
Andrew Q Gordon replied to Andrew Q Gordon's topic in Promoted Author Discussion Forum
Really?? I thought for sure YOU would recognize this world - Wizard and Warrior lovers Wizard with black staff who fights with it Warrior - greatest swordsman Seven Kingdoms Any of this ringing a bell? The names are changed and most things about that story is different from this, but germ of the story I let you read came from this. -
Me serious? Surely you're joking 1 - Cereal and Trash bags 2 - Does buying pastry for Mike today on the way home count? If not, I brought the support staff at work Bagels and Cream Cheese on Friday when I was acting supervisor. 3. None that I know of - or better said, I probably have too many so I have no idea which ONE annoys them the most.
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Posted this under the old eFiction as "Merchant's Gold." Didn't much care for the title so I never transferred it. This was the germ of an idea that led to a much much longer story that I am editing and maybe will get around to posting one day soon. Here's a link. Not For Hire Andy
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This short story was posted under the old eFiction and never transferred over. There it was titled 'Merchant's Gold', but I never really liked the title. So with a few tweaks, I am reposting it now. It was/is the very basic idea for a much long story I hope to one day post.
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“Once more I tell you, I am not for hire, Geldin.” Marcus wiped the sweat from his face with his sleeve. Cradling his staff without relaxing his grip, he stared at the balding, fat merchant standing in the archway. Was he serious? “Now leave, so I may resume my weapons practice.” “How can you refuse me when you have not heard my offer?” Geldin stepped into the courtyard behind the modest stone villa. Four well-armed guards followed close behind. Marcus, poised for deception, whipped
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Blaine's a better man then I, I'd be in jail for APO - Assault on a Police Officer - after Ofc Redding spoke to me like that. One wonders why Harris let her lead the investigation at all, her skills are so lacking. Why do I hear ominous music playing when I read this chapter? Why would Christian leave Levi like that? Is it a set up? Is he letting Levi go so he can make a statement that he can get to them at any time? Does leaving put the dogs at risk - sorry, I'm a dog person - well lucky me, I have a metro ride ahead of me in which to read more See there you go, leaving us dangling over the precipice again. Geez how come no one nominated YOU for Queen of cliffs. Hmm might need to start my 2011 campaign now
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Blaine's a bttm? Who knew? Just kidding, it's always interesting to see what authors do with their characters. I could state the obvious, but instead I'll ask about Christian. It seemed at first Blaine never saw this side of him He thought he loved him etc. Then when he outs him, at least at first, Blaine was baffled because he never thought he was so vindictive. Now, well now he is convinced of how evil Christian is and how dangerous - why? Where does this believe come from aside from kicking the dog and breaking windows? That's a far cry from him hurting Levi. So I guess I just want to know if Blaine knows something we haven't been told yet?
