Andrew Q Gordon

Haha, yeah a real pain in the err . . . NVM

Falling action? I am not sure what you mean. If you could, post on the forum so I can understand what you mean. And sorry that it is disappointing you, hopefully it won't by the end.

Jason slowly pushed the door open, careful not to spill on the carpet. Between two coffee cups and two muffins, he didn't have a free hand to wave back to the older women he worked with. He was surprised they were even here, it was New Year's Eve after all, didn't they get the day off? Weaving between the empty desks, he made his way to the one he shared with Wendy. Figures she wouldn't be early the day he decided to surprise her with breakfast. A quick check of the clock told him s

Hmm, me thinks this is a ploy for the fair Nephylim to get a personalized copy she can hang on her wall and throw sharp barbed objects at. But I have sent you your very own copy via your private email. If I start to feel sharp sudden pains, I'll know who is stick pins in my effigy.

James, Clearly this is a topic you have given some thought to. it was both sad yet hopeful. Through Chris' death Peter might grow into more than just someone to spout back chapter and verse by rote. You pick out one of the most difficult passage for those who 'speak for God' to reconcile. If you do these two things, the kingdom of God will be yours, yet men say it is not so. I hope, this story wasn't based on someone you knew. Sadly it is all to common. Maybe your story will help someone who is struggling find a measure of peace that does lead them to Chris' fate. Andy

okay Frank I got good and no so good comments. First the not so good - [momma always said end on something positive so I will get the negative out of the way first.] While the main thrust of the story is the inner angst Blake suffers, there were points where it was a bit too much. That's not to say there were any particular points I would cut entirely but there were some where I just skipped a bit. Two point in particular - the one where he works his way through his attack on the boat, and then when he is trying to explain it all to Haze. I absolutely understood why you put them there, I just thought they were a bit too much - but that might just be me - I am told I have a very short - almost child like attention span SO take my comments with a grain of salt. Okay, so wow - real Haze is a pisser isn't he? Destroyed momma Christmas Social did he? Tut Tut, momma's gonna be PISSED hehe. So now I am left to wonder, why did he ask Blake to go hang out? Was it interest? or just he was the only one in town who didn't think he was crazy? And geez oh man, what is it with EVERYONE leaving us on a cliff this week? I have to say, most times I can 'guess' the plot, but this? No really - so that is good stuff, keep it up. Andy

**Gets vote in early for king of cliffhangers for 2011** Okay so I asked about a dragon fight - boring -- Okay, just kidding You're imagination doth runneth over Mr. T., and that is a very good thing. Lessons from chapter 25 - The Empresses is a terrible enemy, Mikal is a bad ass, and Tiger thinks about Sax err sex too much Okay and this isn't me being a prude, I am going to complain a tiny bit - the sex seems almost obligatory and trite - early on when he and Fabian and he and Konstantine were having sex it at least had passion, and we cared. This chapter it just seemed meh, let me throw in some sex for the hell of it. Oh yeah let's make it an orgy and have Mikal just talk about it in passing - that to me is the definition of sex for the sake of having a sex scene. Just my two cents. Fortunately there was a ton of other stuff that makes it easy to skim that. Last, the dynamic between the twins was well done - they were each a character in their own, and by the time we meet Johan, Aderic is already established as a fastidious, straight laced but honorable guy, so the contrast was easy to see.

Thanks Kevin Well I was called Scary Blood Gang Member Frog with no fashion sense in Chat last night so I suppose Little Red Riding Hood is tame enough. Thanks Marc, Frosty, Tiger, Maria

Peter's issues with money are part of a bigger issue - control, as in who's in control and who's not. Not that Jason is using it to control things. I promise you I have NOT killed peter off - just yet, if at all but you can read chapter 25 and know Peter is not dead. Tanks for reading. Andy

While I am glad it made you feel good, genius is not a word I would associate with me or my writing. BUT don't give up on mom yet - things can change

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Actually it is very likely yo pass - so let's keep hoping

Bloods? Well you did have a Crip Ball in your picture Now this is a blood!

Fine Sky- here you go. this is how I walked home from work today - happy now???

More than a few people emailed me saying they thought it was the cars, though the extra funds were not on anyone's list. But it's easy to say 'stop being like you are' unless it's you who is a certain way. But you're right there is more to life than money. Hopefully they both work it out. Thanks Tim

Thanks for the comments, I guess maybe there is a bit of wishful thinking - or projecting on my part - as in I wish someone left me the cars and money. But, this was what Pop and Jason shared, it was something his grandfather loved and knowing he passed it on to Jason made it easy to decide he would leave them to the one family member who would appreciate it. Hopefully the rest of the chapters will keep folks happy too

Be a shame if he didn't get to drive the cars once they become Jason's don't you think?? But no promises on the Jason come's around thingy. I mean five more chapters of sappy times, just isn't my shtick.

Not that I know much about what is coming next BUTTT - does anyone really think I wrote five more chapters of good times??? Just sayin Thanks for reading and I hope I don't disappoint you too much by the end.

Perhaps it is, or perhaps I haven't written about anything else that is rearing it's . . . well nevermind - only a few chapters left

Your reviews are soooo much kinder than your in line comments . Okay, just kidding. Thanks for everything and for the review [bet you're glad I'm done with this as well.]

Frosty come, lovers come and go but a A 1933 Duesenberg SJ is forever. Look Pop's been rich his whole life and he's always been happy. He is just doing what he does. Peter needs to adjust accordingly.

Walking down the hall together, Jason reached out for Peter's hand. Fingers entwined, they slowed when they reached Peter's room. Peter twisted, so Jason had his back to the wall. "That was really nice. You never told me your Grandfather played violin. He's really good." "Pop used to play for us when we were younger. None of us were very good at music so we never got to the point we could play with him at holidays. KJ playing with him is the highlight of his day, I think." "KJ was

I am posting here and not the soapbox because I am not trying to get into a debate about the pros and cons of gay marriage, but for those who don't know, Maryland is trying to pass a gay marriage bill. It was thought the toughest hurdle would be the State Senate as that was where it was blocked the last few years. But last week it passed the Senate and is in the Md House now. Opponents of the bill have organized a massive anti gay marriage drive that is said to be threatening the bill. IF you live in Maryland or have friends and family there, pass along the link below and ask them to write their State Reps telling them they support the measure. The Governor has already said several times he will sign the bill once it passes. Thanks Equality Maryland

Thanks - I - er - well I'm stunned by how much work you put into each review - it is greatly appreciated. Some of the things you pulled out, were some of my more favorite moments - I find it much easier to write the good, and I struggle writing conflict - so it is good to see not all my best stuff was wasted Thanks again, this was really nice. Andy

OMG - you didn't just kill Brian. Though I guess for him this was better. If Adam died, he wouldn't want to live with the pain, so at least this way his pain ended. still - very sad. Magister A is proving to be much much more than he seemed, though he always did seem a bit more than he let on. Really good chapter. Sad, but good.