Andrew Q Gordon

Finally we get to see Kynan interact with Alan - now we gotta get them together if for no other reason that to save Kynan. Again, as I said last chapter, you characters are distinctive - that's a bit tricky when dealing with different species - and it is good to finally see a bit more of Kynan's true self. Sadly, next chapter doesn't seem like it's going to go well for him Well at least Alan has a few friends he can count on already to help, so hopefully he will be able to help Kynan before he is turned into a demon kebab.

Well that got things moving again, seems we have our cast of characters fleshed out and now we are moving into getting Kynan and Alan together - [hey I can hope right?] I give you high marks for developing distinct personalities for each of your characters - the only one I don't get too clear a sense of is Kynan but mostly because he is locked up and he isn't showing his true self - I hope that changes soon. Andy

How cool - sure I'll go there I want to thank Anyta Sunday for being the bestus [no editing Frosty] Beta there is. Frosty for Editing Jian Sierra for his help and suggestions. Thanks gals and guy for helping with the way too long Second Shot and the current and future stories. I would also like to thank Cia for - well everything and Lugh for supporting me when I was ready to cash in and go home. Andy

Happy Birthday Lugh!!! Do something fun - but if decide to dance naked, warn us first please? no comment on the day - but really??? Are you just playin with us?

A few new concepts/themes introduced here. I can't say I have total understanding just yet, but it was well written and I understand enough to keep up. I assume things will get clearer - and by that I mean, given how things have gone so far, you plan to flesh them out in future chapters - so it's all good. Things do seem to be coalescing around our main characters. Aure seems to be not quite so neutral as Elementals are reported to be. But then again neither is that Earth Elemental who is in the employ of Xeran. But he does seem to be drawing people together to stop Xeran from winning. So we can put him in the good guy category and like him I suppose. Andy

Hey Maria, Thanks for the note - yeah I have the itch to post sooner than later - I mean I was posting twice a week for 10 weeks and then nothing. So I feel your lack of will power. BUT sometimes getting it all down first helps. Then you can go back and edit as you post which still makes it feel like you are posting as you go. Or at least that is what I keep telling myself Yes, Bee, this is AndyLand, not BeeTown As for writing before you post, well while you are posting this story you can be hard at work on a new one, right?? Signed, Your loving Master and Commander :king:

Hey John, Well I hope you read the rules of the forum - and pay strict attention to Rule 3. here's a link to that just in case you missed them Qtopolis Forum Rules I think you answered the question pretty much how I feel - as a writer, I like doing it on a chapter by chapter basis as it gives me feed back and insight into how the readers feel. But as a reader, I kind of like it all done first. As Benji said a few posts before you, there are a few too many stories that were started that seem to be abandoned and never finished. That kinda blows - in a bad way too. Some of the authors are gone - gone in the sense they don't post or haven't in ages, and some are here but not working on the story - not so cool. SO I get the 'I prefer finished stories' preference. As for what I am writing - well I seem to recall bouncing an idea off a certain friend about some Purpose and power. So I am starting to give that life. Not as far along as I might like, but hopefully that will change soon. Thanks for stopping by and feel free to post whenever or heck, start your own topic - just adhere to Rule 3. Andy

Not sure how I missed this - I mean it's only the third review for the short story right? Anyway, I wrote this a bit ago, with the intention of trying to do something different. Not sci fi, not teen/college drama etc. Oh yeah and no sex. It worked okay, though I don't see a longer story out of this that some suggested. I also don't think it ever pays to lower yourself to the standards of others especially not for revenge. So you are right, it would have come back to haunt him. Thanks again trevor. Andy

Well I am not quite up to the latest chapter but I did manage to get through chapter 7. I left a review but I figured questions were better left on the forum so I can argue with you when I don't like your answer. Seven had me a tad confused, probably nothing reading more carefully and not on the Metro wouldn't cure but on the chance it won't let me ask - how old is Kynan - you said once he was still young, is he 18? That was my take from the chapter. Are he and Alan romantically involved at this point - i.e. chapter 7? My take was Alan had a thing for Kynan, but they had never done or expressed any feeling for each other - but clearly Kynan like's him some Alan and Alan like's him some Kynan - especially after he told dad to F' off when told he couldn't see Kynan again. Now, all I'm asking is from what we know at the end of Chapter 7 if nothing is revealed until later, just leave it go. Last - am I correct that Kynan is the Queen's bastard? Or has that only been hinted at not revealed? I mean if he were it's no wonder he doesn't want the Dark Prince. Okay, nuff bugging you, back to work for me. Andy

Since there is no definitive plan to write a sequel when you post the epilogue will you at least answer question??? Please?

Not sure Kynan is going to be holding out much longer -seems the Dark Prince will eventually get the information from him he wants. But at what cost? I suspect Kynan doesn't trust the prince as far as he can kick him so it is doubtful he will succumb and be his 'loyal' servant Great chapter, I thought it captured his emotions quite well. Definitely feel sorry for him after reading that.

Alan is a nice kid - a part of me feels bad, but honestly, he was more than a bit disrespectful to his dad - "F-you?" I mean he knew he shouldn't have been out that night so he had to know his dad was gonna be mad. BUT being 18 what can you do right? He and Kynan - the dog - would be an interesting couple. Any picture/drawing of what he looks like?

SO one more chapter and an epilogue and you begin working furiously on the next installment, right??? This is one of these chapters that you love and hate at once. It was quite brilliant, but I hated Jacob leaving us. I won't say I didn't expect this since he drugged Adam, but I always hoped it wouldn't happen. As always there are hundred and one questions, but since you won't answer them anyway, why ask. Oh you were my 450th review. Good place to notch that milestone.

So now that Lover's Blind is finished, is Indiana Summer next ???

I'm guessing reverse psychology won't work either - eh? Like if we all said - oh well we didn't like it much anyway, he might be tricked into start posting again? It was actually one of the first stories I read - not the first but one of the first. At least he's going to finish it at some point, right??

Not that I have anything to base this on, but I always felt kids did better with siblings. I know my sister and I were always there for each other and even to this day she and I are close - my brother - well I like him but I can't say we are tight, so who knows. But I still wished I had the option - still might but this might be the nail that seals that coffin.

God I so wanted to give you a negative rep for that. Poor Jacob, although I would totally be crushing on Brian, Jacob wasn't the bad one - he didn't deserve to die. BUT then again, I suppose he at least understood things better than Adam. If one died, they both died and since Adam was 'dead' set on save Avantia, he was going to kill Jacob in the process. Jacob's way at least let one of them live. Though me personally, I don't think I would want to be the one to survive the other, so he didn't really do Jacob any favors. Not sure how you can end this on a happy note, not even Brian and Adam shacking up will do that, but I'll give you a chance. Oh yeah - write the damn sequel

Hey This is Andyland, not HamenCheeseville. If there's any promoting going on I better be the subject of it. Just kidding, HC, I wish more people would read ATSW - then maybe it will convince you to hurry up and write a sequel Well, bout the only true thing in that was the part about a totally awesome Beta -

NO dear, definitely NOT annoyed - just teasing you cause I figured you'd see this. If I were annoyed, I'd ignore you.

Between me and my current beta - so you won't have to share. feed back yes, another beta ? no lol.

I almost gave you a negative rep point for even suggesting that - I see how you are - you're trying to drive a wedge between us so you can swoop in and be top dog. Nice try, but I'm not that sleepy. [you know I'm kidding about the neg rep and top dog thingy, but I am not sure the 'more beta' suggestion would be a good idea.]

This is sort of how I feel as a reader now. I've followed a couple stories - Adamagika is one - as you likely know from my comments, where they've stretched out for many months. sometimes months between updates so that requires I re read stuff to figure it out. I have started to come to the conclusion I am better off waiting for the completion before reading. On the other side, EVERYONE on here posts chapter by chapter, even if it is two a week. That still makes for several months, if not many for a story to be completed, yet people still read. It is why I am so confused. But I think Sara's point is a good one -so let me skip down to hers to finish this thought. With so few chapters ready, I suppose you are correct, It is not episodic so no, it wouldn't be 'okay' to be done with a chapter and be satisfied. Once a month was not really my idea, it was suggested to me so that I don't raise expectations. I figured every two weeks as that gives me 6 weeks to get more chapters ready. by then I might even have finished it, who knows. So I think I will another chapter or two before I start. If I get inspired, I might be ready to post next weekend [haha - that's wishful thinking, now isn't it. ] The one and only reason to start posting sooner, if to get feed back, this is definitely a change for me, it is neither a Coming out story, nor is it a fantasy/magic kinda of thingy. SO the comment for this might actually shape the story - IDK. Too much to ponder before bed. But thanks to you both. Andy

Maria, Arl, Thanks for the encouragement. Thinks will work out, it's just a matter of cost at this point. There will be some kinda insurance - paid by use, there will be a pre birth order terminating her rights before the birth, and we will have our baby in 6 months. Sadly this will end up costing us 75% of the money we planned to use for the second child - which in reality wouldn't likely be enough given how much more things cost then we were told. We are by no means rich, we both for the government, but we saved diligently for this so we will be able to make it work. But I am still angry. Our expectations of a friendship with the surrogate have largely went out the window. Mike - who has always been the more social of the two of us, always took the lead in keeping contact with her - now he has said several times, this is an arms length business deal. Show her the baby, says thanks, send the final check and we're done. At least that is how he feels now. Not sure how far behind him I am anymore. BUT in six months, I won't care about her, her tax issues, the shady lawyer, nothing. I'll have better things to worry about. So that is what I keep telling myself.

Okay, well basically this didn't answer the question I really had, but mostly because I didn't pose it properly. I am working on something, bout 4 chapters into it. Definitely not done yet, but it's been sketched out and has all the elements worked out before I set to writing it. That said I have three other somethings in the work. One is a major re-write of something I wrote a while ago, another story I might want to submit for the Novella and then a rewrite of second shot which if it works out might get submitted for publication [not here on GA but in the paper book world] So the new Story would not be posted very quickly - Once a month for sure, maybe two a month if I am getting it written faster. I am trying to decide if I should post it now, or just wait til it is further along. It WILL get finished, just not in then next couple months is all. Comments? Oh yeah Bee you don't count, you never read Second Shot so I doubt you will read this either

It does seem a bit unfair, Bashta has no real idea what's happening to him while Cavel has most of it under control - most as in he knows whats what but how to get it is the issue. And for that he has clansmen who can and are giving him advice. Seems like Bashta is getting it however, he recognizes Cavel is a good man and he is slowly giving up his solitude, sleep near Cavel was a good start.