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Chapter 2 - Freshman Year, Second Semester
intune commented on Damond's story chapter in Chapter 2 - Freshman Year, Second Semester
I really love the format of this story I think things are going to get super interesting as the semesters go by. -
I haven't done any long backpacking trips yet, but it seems like it'd be fun to go for a long while with only what you could carry
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In some ways this story is so hopelessly romantic- Percy and Max dating without knowing anything about each other's real lives. In other ways it also makes me sad, I hope someday Percy doesn't have to live his life in such fear- vacations, online dating, I feel bad for the guy.
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Chapter 15 The Negotiator...
intune commented on Naptowngirl's story chapter in Chapter 15 The Negotiator...
Uh oh, Kaleb will be upset if they have to give Lilly up. Good Chapter! I can't wait to see what happens to the baby. -
I love Kaleb, I hope nothing too serious happened to him. I can't wait to see what Kaleb is like when he gets his own child. He's gonna be a great parent someday. This chapter had a lot of different emotions in it. First relief, because Kaleb's mom and Chase finally reached some sort of agreement, then it got cute with the whole love sense, and funny with the part with Carter and Kaleb. Then at the end there was the huge shocker. You really do a great job with making the reader feel something
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Great closing argument by the prosecution. I like to think that the defense doesn't have a chance in this one, but I guess I'll have to wait and see
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So, Mr. Anonymous eh? I'm beginning to think that's more Percy and less Max. It seems like Max is much more open to continuing with their relationship. Another good chapter- I'm looking forward to hearing more about Mr. stands way too close, will he be showing up again?
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Mich doesn't seem like the type to just disappear. I'm sure he'll be back at least to see how Cooper is doing at least. I'm not sure why, but I thought this was the last chapter, but now I realize I have to wait to find out the result lol, it's a great story though so keep going
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What! No, he can't die! Mich said so lol.
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You know just how to leave the reader wanting more lol. Great chapter
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What? noooo you can't kill Cooper off, thats just wrong. I'm glad they're finally together as a family though, and its cute to see how much they both treasure the cat.
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I hope that Cooper treats Mich good from now on, I feel like he broke his heart before. There's gotta be a lot of making up for that.
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So cute! I can't believe Mich bought him a cat I'm worried about Grandpa though, that message about 'be there when I'm gone' seemed like a warning that he's gonna die soon. I can't wait until Mich and Coop work things out.
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The carnival scene was amazing. So romantic.
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There are so many things I like about this story, but I really like how your sense of humor comes across, so that's probably my favorite. When Cooper said they had been studying anatomy I cracked up lol. I can't wait to see what Mich ends up getting for his birthday. I'm sure it will be heart felt.
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haha I like the fact that Mich actually chased Cooper down after five minutes. Getting impatient in his underwear all alone
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ahh I just wanted to yell at Cooper, I thought he was reading the atmosphere about how uncomfortable the topic of Mich's parents made him.
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I can't wait to find out more about what Mich is thinking. I'm glad they'll be going out on a date though.
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Ouch, I'm sure the last thing Cooper wanted to hear was that Mich felt like they were brothers. And, what is going through Vern's mind? Hopefully she doesn't mind how close their getting.
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The other comment said pretty much what I was thinking lol so I'll just say: this chapter left me wanting more
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The part where Vern was answering Cooper's thoughts made me laugh.
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Poor Cooper, that situation sounds awkward all-around for him. But the characters all have a definite personality, which I really like
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Interesting start, I'm not sure I've ever read another story where a character had another break up with someone for them. I'm looking forward to seeing how that plays out in later chapters between Mich and Cooper
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Connecticut is really bad during the winter months, it gets dark at like 4:45. My doctor told me to take extra vitamin D and I think it helps
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Chapter 8: Truth and Trouble
intune commented on intune's story chapter in Chapter 8: Truth and Trouble
I don't think I could rush the chapters even if I wanted to, the characters seem to have a mind of their own when I'm writing. Thanks for the review and for reading
