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I have only just learned about "clear format". I'll fix it. I am so glad you returned finish my story. To have you say such nice things about me efforts is flattering.
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I figured that, you know change the setting, characters that are of a different background, different perspective. Posting this here has helped me realize that there are core elements that I will turn to in my writing, but hte stories are different. I was not sure before (with my first story) now I am. When writers here started given advice it helped me realize I had done the things that make one story different from anohter. The only real common element was me. I have created very diverse characters and my stories are character driven. Thanks for the post, that helped me a lot. What you said about the "first story".
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Thanks for the sentiment.
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Chapter 2 High Priestess of Psi
sojourn commented on Dan Umbero's story chapter in Chapter 2 High Priestess of Psi
I like where this is going. So Garin recruits another homosexual.though his psi powers. I like it. The chapter started off very differently Once Garin was there I felt better. Good story... more please. I must have been recuited as such a young age I don't remember it.... Maybe you should send Garin to help me "re-up". -
When I arrived at the clinic David was already there. I found him checking on the Irish Setter, Tammy. I had spayed her yesterday. When I walked into the kennel, David looked up and smiled. He didn’t just smile. It was like his smile reached out and grabbed me. He broke eye contact and let his smile lose its enthusiasm but was still warm. David's smile slipped into an evil grin, “Morning T.R., how did you two sleep last night?” I was immediately embarrassed. How could he have known about Bil
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Slowly but surely, I am making every mistake possible in posting on GA. No, it is not complete. Thanks for the sentiment. I have other stories that are complete.... hint, hint.
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I still find it hard to accept Cooper. I keep waiting for him to grow up. Instead It seems he is ever more whiney and self centered with each new chapter. Do I need to justify that percetion? Still, I hope. It is great writing and a good story.
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Ok, I am properly abashed that there has been no "brand" recognition. It appears our boy George has opened a new room in his heart. As to Francis, it can be a jolt when one finds an old love with a new love... even if the flame has long since smouldered. I wonder how it could be that George was rowed to the pier without seeing Francis' ship? I check so often for updates it is a wonder the link is not worn. more please
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LOL! I had to read this review three times before it made sense. Old age is Hell!Thanks.
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I am pleased that you had stong feelings about this story. Wylie did become an almost secondary character to Gordy, but then that is a role he chose for himself. It is not a story with a happy ending. Wasn't intended to be. good guys don't die and yet Gordy did. So many people have different takes on the ending. I think it tells a lot about the individual... you my friend are a thinking man.
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Polish, yeah I know. I hate it when I am reading a story I enjoy and come across syntax errors. Like a bump in a smooth road. I can see those so readily in reading works by others yet fail to see my own glaring errors. Ah well, human frailties.
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I understood the chapters were long. I am not sure why I didn't cut them. This whole story was an atempt to relay my first same sex experience. By the time it was finished none of that experience fit. The story and characters took on a life of their own. I had a great time with it. I think I will cut an paste the word "brilliant" and post it on my desktop. Thanks
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Thanks for the kind words.
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thanks, I know it needs some editing.
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“Well boys, is this Texas or some California fairy land? Looks like these queers can’t wait to get in a room. Hey faggots! Get a room afore we kick your asses and make you wished you had.” I had closed my eyes once the kiss began when I heard the voice I could see Bill was already sizing up the situation. He released his hold on me and I moved to stand near the front of the bike facing three rednecks. They reeked of beer. These three had obviously taken full advantage of happy hour somewhere
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It was comforting to see the same features that were hallmarks to my hometown right here. In some regards this town was just typical small town Texas. It was easy to be with David. I noticed his wedding ring, not for the first time. I asked if he had family here. His answer was slow in coming, as if he had to think about the question. “No. Not anymore. Anne has gone back to Nebraska. She got a promotion a few months ago and it required her to work in the home office. I couldn’t leave Doc in a
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Chapter 1 Halon and Dirt Balls
sojourn commented on Dan Umbero's story chapter in Chapter 1 Halon and Dirt Balls
I am a big fan of sci fi when it's good. This is good. I could envisione the action and the technical aspects seem real. I was surprised only by the use of "known" elements Halo, etc. to produce a futuristic faster than light speed. I really will follow this story and hope you don't take too long to post more chapters. more please. -
There is a theory, maybe just mine, that rape involves control, anger, and dominance issues.... Sex is such an intimate act that it takes the raper and victim beyond a physical assualt. Wylie has challenges just adapting to John's "lifestyle" not to mention the new emotional conncetion and now Mary Anne. He has undergone a lot of significant changes. Just when he was accepting himself... life is the experience. lol, but then again, it is John's story. Thanks
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Yeah, I know guys who have had a side thing going or years. Silence can sometimes be more damaging than the harshest words. Thanks
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Love and understanding don't always lead to honest communication. There were things that could have and should have been said, by both. Yet they are "there" for each other. Thanks
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I take what you say to heart. I felt that what Wylie was feeling and planning was critical to the events of the next chapter. I hope you will agree. If not, please let me know. Thanks again.
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I feel that there are certain elements to the story that the reader must decide. All that you have said is possible or even perhaps probable... you may decide. Unless I write more about them... then this is John and Wylie's story. Thanks for the review.
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Ah, the vageries of youth and the male ego. Thanks
