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ghrays

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  1. Congratulations for your Reader's Choice Award, In Safe Hands was really well-done, and one of my favorite stories.
  2. Yes, I got the notification that the story was updated. By the way, I LOVE this story, I can hardly wait to see what happens to Luke.
  3. Dr Baker is brilliantly drawn... this story just keeps getting better and better
  4. Because it illustrates the depth of feeling between Kyle and Ryan: Ryan loves Kyle so much that Kyle doesn't need any luck to work things out, despite seemingly insurmountable obstacles thrown in their path.
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    Saying goodbye

    This has been a nice story and I will be sorry to see it end... By the way, I believe there are laws in all 50 states that prohibit disinheriting a (minor) child.
  6. I found Dare ending more quickly than I wanted; I think this means I liked it.
  7. I agree. It's been an awesome story with a great ending.
  8. It's been awhile since I finished this story but it's still one of my all-time favorites. There is one line of dialog between Jeremy and Kyle in chapter 26 that is so powerful, it is burned in my memory: "Wish me luck." "You won't need it."
  9. This has been a wonderful story; the author should be proud of an achievement such as this. I loved both the main characters. Well done!
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    Chapter 4

    I really liked this one. Very tenderly drawn relationship between Billy and Jake.
  11. I would love to see part 2.
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    Indiana Summer

    Interesting story with excellent character development. I like where the story is going: you can't help but root for Billy and David. The rotating POV adds interest to the story as a whole. Now for a little criticism: There are more than a few spelling, grammar and syntax errors. These should not be difficult to clean up.
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    From Behind Those Eyes

    Interesting story; the beginning is really well done and captures the reader's attention right away. I felt some parts dragged a bit and as a whole the story would be tighter and more effective if edited to be about a third shorter. Specifically, the digressions about Stephen's (missing) mother could be dropped; I found myself skipping those sections. Overall, I liked this story and thanks for posting.
  14. I have friends who have the nook and iPad but I don't like them for reading books. You can't beat the Kindle 3 for ease of use and ergonomics. It just feels right in your hands. I don't like reading on my laptop either. I may not have the most efficient way of downloading from GA to my Kindle, but here is how I do it: 1. Open story to download by clicking the "print" icon (all chapters, not each individual chapter). 2. Select all text of the document 3. Copy all of the (selected) text 4. Paste all of the copied text into a new word document 5. Save word document as "web page, filtered (.html)" document 6. Open Calibre and "add book" document saved in #5 7. Select imported document in Calibre and click "convert books" to convert the document to .mobi file (this is the default format for e-readers). 8. Send converted (now .mobi) file to kindle. The whole thing takes about a minute and if the story is complete, obviously only has to be done once.
  15. Although the story is listed as "complete", the end of chapter 23 doesn't seem a logical ending point. I like the story, some interesting themes presented, but there are many technical problems with the writing that need editing.
  16. This is an intriguing story, well-written. The romantic angst is perfectly realized. The ending is so powerful I re-read it several times.
  17. OK first, I am not a writer. I wish I had the creative talent to write a story, but I don't. I am an avid reader, and I think I have some ability as an editor, as spelling, grammar and punctuation errors jump out at me whenever I read a text. I hope I also have an appreciation for the style of writing, for to be truly eloquent requires fewer words, not more. So, to my comments on Second Shot. First off, I would say I had a small problem with the character Peter's issues over money: In my own experience, very few people have money disagreements when there is too much of it around. When reading the early chapters, I had the feeling that Peter's frequent issues over Jason's money were purposely inserted into the story to "set up" a problem later, and this is how I read Peter's control issues in the last few chapters. It just didn't seem realistic to me. A number of other possible conflicts could have been created that might have been more believable, such as Peter having difficulty coping with his trauma (both physical and psychological), temptation from another guy, etc. Finally, I thought the interactions between Jason and his grandfather were touching. Adding the classic car connection really solidified their relationship in an authentic way for me, I have always loved Austin-Healeys.
  18. This story was recommended to me by Trevor, and I just finished the last page this morning. What a ride! It was an interesting story, I especially liked how Jason friends and family were well-described and believable. The characters Dean, Daryl and Wendy were really well done and fully realized. If I had to make a couple of tiny criticisms, it would be that the middle of the story was perhaps a bit overlong, and Thanks for writing and I look forward to more.
  19. Well done short story. I liked the dynamic of the two boy's interactions; it felt authentic. As Zane and Andrew slowly peel away their defenses, it makes for a very powerful connection.
  20. Some difficult issues presented in this story, but overall I'm glad I read it.
  21. I liked this story. You really know how to cut to the chase and show two disparate people, taking enormous risk to find a common bond.
  22. Excellent short story. Interesting characters in unusual situations. A story like this could be developed into a novel.
  23. Great (short) story. The ending is: Ambiguous. Thought provoking. Awesome.
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    Starcrossed

    I liked this story. I cried a little bit. Okay, a lot.
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