Al Norris
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I can't give out answers, @RainbowPhoenixWI. @Justin4Fun is not just in revision, he is in rewriting. There is a difference! 😁
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Wonderful ending to this part of the story! Jake not only can see, since he sat up in bed, looks like all the nerve damage is now fixed!!! I'm not sure if I can wait for you to rework the chapters... I have several questions but I cannot ask them here, without alerting those who haven't read this story to what may be coming (assuming some things were not changed)! Dilemma, dilemma, dilemma... 🥴
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OK, I'll grudgingly agree with the others (see my avatar)... On to the next book!
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There are witches and there are witches. Not all witches are fully evil.
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Brohm has it.
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But I got you to react! LOL!!!
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And our illustrious Author is sitting back and laughing at us! I can't be the only one who has noticed his absence in certain chapters...
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I wish we knew what the amulet did...
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I noticed that unmarked "thingy" when I first started looking at your map. Now we know what it is! What we don't know is the scale of the map. You first said that it was a league from Remich to the turn-off to Helmsley Keep. If we use that as a constant (something tells me it isn't), then it is about 5 leagues (as the crow flies) to Tornel Keep. Not a long way away but enough, since it is through heavy forest.
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Yeah, Brohm's old buddies are looking for a good payout! There isn't going to be a soft bed for a few nights, it seems!
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Yes, it was hinted at, many chapters ago.
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I hope Nathan retrieved his arrows! If those wolves were that hungry, they would feast on their own dead.
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Hmm... Chapter 33 of The Kandric Saga was 199,253 words. A bit under 1 megabyte in size... Was that too large?
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Given the comments of the trader (“With that, ye could take th’ whole lot.”), they bought a substantial amount of food. That alone is suspicious and is something the trader will remember. Especially when questioned. Too many patrols to go to Remich or Summerton, which leaves only the north road...
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I'm pretty sure that @mcarss mentioned that the ring had left some sort of imprint on Nathan. Yup.
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Sure it does. I'm not saying what you write is wrong. Just that I can see how it might have advanced the story. 1) It provides a certain closure to Lord Helmsley's rage. 2) Provide the reason why Nathan did what he did and 3) Reveals who wanted the Heir dead. (That's 3 things that further the story.) 3a) Nathan could send the guys head to Helmsley as a peace offering? 4) This now could give Nathan the impetus to inquire about the who and why in future endeavors. (but that would turn him into a sort of good guy!) What's done is done, however. So far, I'm enjoying the story, so please, don't take this as criticism. It's just a difference of opinion.
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Interesting observation. A portent of things to come?
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So, the only thing we know about Brohm is that he is claustrophobic. That's about it. Going to be interesting to see what shakes out...
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Hemsley had to meet Nathan. Satisfied his ego to capture his son's murderer. I do agree that that Nathan did not render due diligence. If this is a habit, it will come back to bite him over and over.
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Luckily, I get to read ahead to Chapter 4 to find out if Nathan gets hung (pun intended). This is what happens when you are an assassin and you let your guard down... This is also why you need to be paranoid enough that crap like this rarely, if ever, happens.
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It's so good to see that things are moving ahead with no speed bumps to upset anyone. Wonderful chapter. I suppose it can't last. Life always has a habit of intruding... I hope it is not a devastating bump!
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Hmm, two chapters in and Nathan gets drunk? Where's the assassin's paranoia?
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And binge I will do! I have to admit that for an assassin, Nathan sure lets others sneak up on him!
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I'd say that Connor needs another drink at the well! Um, just to make sure that everything is working properly. Yeah, that's the ticket!
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Thanks, @Mark Ponyboy Peters. It's been wonderful to read the start of the Thompsonville saga, and refreshing my memory of these lovable characters!
