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Well I like risque =D It's sexay (oh I rhymed). But that wasn't risque really. I thought it was awesomely awkward and I love awkward moments. They're so real. They also give a story flavor. They give your character more depth. I'm talking about awkward moments, not necessarily sex. So I don't think you should feel bad about writing either, or feel weird about writing them. Peter's self-doubt and esteem issues are a big turnoff, but at the same time they make him more real. It's kinda at odds when he keeps reassuring Jason about their 'awkwardness' and then has this huge self-esteem issue. It makes me wonder, as I'm reading, if he's so insecure because Jason is so hot? Or is always so insecure? Jason's insecurity has a lot more to do with other things than his looks, I think. He's a lot more put together than Peter and I wonder if he'll realize that. Peter may be out, but Jason is more secure in being gay. Heh. Shopping trip will be interesting =D. \o/ I'm such a girl. I get all hoobity jibbit about shopping trips in a story.

So all the lovely dialogue couldn't get me out of my funk for this chapter. I just felt so terrible for Jason. I mean here he is getting this awesome, incredible thing - the co-captain - and he can't even enjoy it because people are so closed-minded! Throughout the whole congratulations from all his friends, it's all I could think about. It'd be like getting a promotion or raise at work while constantly wondering if someone else was getting fired. He should be able to enjoy his success, not have to worry about whether his teammates will accept him. The sad part is he's right, there's every chance they wouldn't accept him. It's so silly and stupid that he doesn't get to be who he is without fear. ARGH *RANT RANT GROWL* And yeah, I hope the contractions get better like you said. They're really distracting. Especially since the dialogue is one of your strongest points. (and is so good it's making me jealous!)

I LOVE YOU SHMOVE YOU! *FUME* Cliffhanger... GAH. She is EVIL, our little author, pure plain evil!

I'm pretty sure that I'm crushing hard on Peter. It's the motorcycle, I admit it wholly and without shame. That, and the leather jacket. I feel so terrible for Jason though, that I nearly want to smack Peter in a lot of ways. I don't think Peter realizes that Jason would lose his money for school. For me that's almost a reason to stay closeted. And I'm always the one saying coming out is better. ALWAYS. This is one time I might have made an exception rather than giving my usual "it's better to be you". Probably my whole being a teacher and really pushing the importance of college and/or technical school/training. So far I'm loving the story and the characters, though I see something familiar with Hayden and Jordan... hm. Is that weird? When I first read the part about being given a Porche, I immediately went to Jordan and his. It made me wonder if Hayden isn't Jordan's middle name or first name or something? I'm kooky, right? heh. I guess my only complaint is the use of "I will" instead of "I'll" when they're in dialogue mode. Well, not my only complaint. I additionally would like it noted that the description of Peter's ass isn't forthcoming. Jason needs to be noticing - and describing - such important details. *sagenod*

My husband would disagree. But only because I think his can do such interesting things - which I've tried. Until you touch it too much and then it loses 'flexibility'. Unfortunately. If anyone was wondering... it hurts when you try and bend them at the wrong moment... And now back to reading Second Shot (I just started). I'm an end of story reviewer when I start a completed story, but if you prefer chapter by chapter I can do that too =D. I'm chatty that way.

Am I the only one not sure of which 'c' word is inappropriate? Is it the one that could also mean a chicken of the male kind or the one that girls go >>>>8( about ?

Oh hell yes =D I love it! OMG THat ending nearly had me in happy tears. Man that was just f**king perfect. I swear, you wrote taht whole thing just for that line, didn't you?

And we'll just get on her to start a new story =D *snicker* LIKE RIGHT NOW! Er. no. Not now, now. Like when SS is done. That kinda now.

This was a good chapter but it raised some hackles on my back. Jared needs to get over his guilt and fast because this whole visit Ronnie every day is not kosher! Also yellow roses? I know those mean jealousy, but they can also mean friendship. I wonder if there was an intentional purpose behind the color? =) (Methinks yes)

HEY! Don't punish us *hmph* for that. No delays! LOL when I'm finished. I can't put up WIP. It's just a quirk of mine lol. I'm writing three stories actually. One completed and needs to be edited more. One halfway completed and needs a beta, and one in its first chapter. I'm weird that way.

Dunno, that happens with bipolar disorder too (I've been researching it for a character I'm writing). Lots of mood swings and at the height of the manic stage they start hallucinating. It could be that! Also there's lots of medical conditions (I learned while watching House - cuz, you know, TV always tells it right) that cause hallucinations. The House team always has that one disease that they give a shout out every single episode. For now I can't think of it, but so far it's caused everything from hallucinations to bleeding lol. (always cracks me up).

I wrote a long ass review so I'm going to keep this short and simple THANK YOU FOR THE UPDATEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE. Made my night =D

AIEEEEEEEEEE *ZOOOOOOMS*

*recommends model mayhem, where you can sort by age, hair color, height etc.* I get a lot of inspiration there =).

=D Did you see the tummy? That's what drew me in, because I remembered Connor looking in the mirror and seeing his tummy protrude a little. That pic just immediately went CONNOR to me when I saw that.

I have Connor as something like this (except, you know, blonder) - Sorry about the size - I couldn't figure out how to resize. But bigger is better sometimes right? =D

Dear Gawd - I just came a little. I'll be in my bunk. (PS now I'll see that as Connor AND Jared).

*points at her previous post where Con-red was mentioned* ALthough I like Jonnor *snort* but thats almost all Connors name and just J for Jared... maybe Jannor? Jarnor? ConJar? Oh gawd. Did anyone notice that we haven't put up a pic of Connor? I can't even think of who he looks like tbh. In my head he's probably nothing like what KBS had in mind oO.

I don't have Darren Chris in mind when I think of Jared. I have Zach Abel nom.

That's like an oxymoron right? I mean /too/ much Glee? That's impossible.

Oh gawd, let's hope not. I mean she's losing weight rapidly and looks thin ... Ronnie preggers would mean me = heart attack.

Damn the cliffhanger indeed! Also didn't anyone catch the 'they' told me? Am I the only one going "WHAT?" I'm like sitting here going : Is she insane? Did someone really tell her that and that's why she said it aloud outside? Is she drugged? What is wrong with her? Oh gawd the cliff hangers wtf? YOU"RE TRYING TO KILL ME!

Bastard! You made me cry so much. Oh gawd. I cannot believe how many times I freaking cried! I actually had to leave the story twice and go watch TV because my heart was so clenched. You seem to know how to tell a story without being manipulative at all. I mean a lot of writers could seem melodramatic telling a story like this one, but yours just came off honest. Rory just came off honest. Amazingly, heartbreakingly, gutwrenchingly poignant. And also /thank you/ for giving Aaron a chance to redeem himself. I think, oddly, that I was more sad about him than anything - and not just about the Cody thing. I just have this feeling that selfish people like that don't realize what they're missing. And that doesn't make me angry, it makes me pity them. It makes me sad to think they don't know all the beautiful moments they miss. So maybe Aaron has a chance now to experience that. I know I said I didn't want to read your WIP stories, but dammit if I won't find myself doing that >8( I just don't think I can stay away from your writing.

IEEEEEEEEEEE *ZOOMS OFF TO READ* (I was up late for some reason and this IS MY REWARD!!! WHEEE)

This is an incredibly moving story. It was just so real. I immersed myself in it for days. It's the characters, each one with their own separate personality. It just shocks me how I can see them and hear them and really feel each one as different people. I'm just in love with this story. It's the second one I've read by you and both of them just brought out so much emotion in me, but this one way way way more than the other. To be honest I never thought I'd love another set of characters as I did the first ones - esp Jude (oh Jude how I love thee) <3 but dang if I didn't fall in love with your characters again! You really are a brilliant story teller. I won't say writer, because there's typos and a few names misplaced, but that's just editing right? I mean you have this quality to tell a story that just makes it impossible for me to stop reading until I'm done! I think I can't face your Works in Progress just because I know I'll be constantly thinking about the characters, wondering about them and wishing to hear more. I guess when you decide to finish them, I'll be scrambling to the be first to immerse myself in their world too. Thank you so much for sharing this story! <3