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Never just a pulp fiction writer are you Sasha. The threads of depth and emotion swirl though the words like the smoke curling up from Oli's burnt page. Thank you for those haunting words. Earlier in the story i was waiting for a sign that Oli and Boris will find away around the offset of their changes. Now i know whatever happens, it doesn't really matter. Thanks for not settling for second best in your writing

I keep worrying that this story will fall apart as you have a mighty mix of complex concepts and problems, and yet... it holds together wonderfully. Because we don't get a look inside their heads, the female characters are the hardest to read. In some strange way, Andrea and Anastasia are two halves of a whole: the mother being the thinking side and the dog the feeling side. Riveting!

It is sweet torture waiting for each chapter to come out. That you post on a regular, if measured, basis only makes it worse. Thanks for the torture and for your understanding of people and their emotions as you weave your tales.

One of your more traditional stories but no less excellent. Thanks again. Your characters come to life inside my head and get into our skin while still being very human with fault and foibles. Looking forward to the next tale (or tail).

Chapter 5 was great (no surprise) You really demonstrated Dave's teammates looking out for him. The speculation on his sexuality gets a little wordy though and intellectualizes the moment. Usually the story moves through issues with active dialogue and the flow is broken up a bit here. The content is great but they don't quite sound like teammates talking but instead voicing their thoughts. You're writing is strongest when you show what they are feeling rather than having them simply articulate it. Hope this is useful - ignore it if it isn't.

I have really enjoyed how you have used Jameson's character in this story in his interactions with both boys. The romance is sweet but in some ways he is the most interesting character of all. Another great story. Thanks

you really make us pay attention. i love the subtle cues in the various relationships. You have created a variety of real characters that behave truly human. Congrats.

I definitely don't see it as lazy. One of your great strengths is character based stories that are not strictly plot driven but deal with the subtler aspects of challenging relationships. Direct confusion certainly has those elements and i don't want to see the sublets buried in huge plot action. That said i am just a part o the audience, it is your story to play out as you see fit.

a great story and gripping. Your feel a little heavy on the drama quotient in Ch 25 though. Luke's brother has just died and the school and his friends are aware and yet he isn't given space re the homophobia (Jim, coach) and then Erin ramps it up with his fears that Luke will blame not only himself but Erin as well and Erin walks. All these things are plausible but the timeframe is a little compressed. Did i say that the story was great? i always like your writing wolfie.

a wonderful story that has entranced me for many months. i feel withdrawal coming on. One question, how did Michael resolve his work situation??

Great Chapter, but i have the feeling that we are nearing the end. We are coming down from the climax, just enough time for some tender exchanges and a little snuggling and we will be drifting off to sleep. Thanks KC but tell me its not quite over yet.

The "obligation came from something my brother said shortly after gay marriage became legal in Canada. We are not married and are fine with that even as we strongly supported the right to marry. My brother felt we should gotten married "because other in our position could not". We felt that choice implied just that a choice

I think that you set the right balance to prepare for the upcoming drama. Neither man has painted themselves into a corner but some acrobatics may be needed. What comes through is that both men are damaged but we see them doing better together than on their own and ultimately they will figure this out. Now if we can only figure out to get 2 or 3 Wednesdays in a week.

I like that KC: "They made me do it". Is that an excuse for taking them through the wringer or a song from "Chicago"? I guess alls fair in love and war. Great chapter!

This is the first of your stories that i have read. It is really great, fantastic character development and lots of wry humour. Each of the characters has a distinct voice and they are hilarious together. Thanks

Well, last week they were Over the Rainbow and now we are back in Kansas again. Lets see if bluebirds will sing again. Its always tough when worlds collide. Great story!

So now that it is over, i loved the story BUT i think you used the hook (keeping Ken's identify secret until the last chapter) a bit to the detriment of the story. Paul's character was definitively developed separately to lead readers to believe he was Ken - no problem there. However once things came to a head he almost fell of the map and the issues that were keeping him apart from the team were almost explained in a perfuntory manner to tie up details. The strength of the story is in the relationships, how the boys depend on each other and how that dependence builds and threatens the trust between them. Paul, Deon and others had trust issues as well. This criticism is not meant to take away from the story, rather having set a high bar, reader have higher expect ions on your writing. Can't wait to read the second part when you are ready

We knew you were better but what better proof than posting a new chapter. What a lovely chapter too. I'm glad you gave the boys a little respite (they were worried about you too these last few months) I'm sure it won't last for long though. Welcome back

Just found Outcast the other day and i am enjoying it. I have reached Chapter 12 now. You are trying to be really ambitious but i think the whole Corporation conspiracy aspect is overpowering the strong character development at the beginning of the story. The characters are rushing ahead when they barley know each other. Al to of the early humour and tenderness came from the smaller interactions between the charters. Now the cast grows with each chapter and the plot complicates. It is a great story but i would suggest a stronger focus on the small stuff. As i reader i am invested in Don, Danny and Chen but the Corporation is vague and faceless. Don't forge the larger plot, just don't let it hijack the story. You are carrying 7 main characters now, a future NYC psionics and a love story - a big load This is meant as support not criticism

you are playing with us but i will stick with Paul. I really appreciate the various threads that weave the story together. Looking forward to hearing more from Julie, she is a strong character. Good work on the radio interviews, that sort of dialogue could easily be flat since the reader is not actually connected to the fictional teams discussed but you kept it lively. As always a great story!

I have a mixture of joy and sadness: joy at how this story is developing with the wonderful richness of Tay and Kurt"s relationship, sadness that I can see the end in the horizon. too soon this story will reach its conclusion but thank you for the amazing journey. Thank you

In lesser hands, this story would have been interesting and would have wound to a satisfying conclusion by now. You however have given a depth to the story that fleshes out these characters so that not only is it a hugely compelling story but we can reflect on our own inner turmoils and recognize our own emotions and struggles and those of our friends and family. That surely is what fantasy is all about. Oh did i mention that it is pretty damn sexy too. We all knew that Kurt and Tay would work it out, how could they not, but you ensured that it would be a thrilling and compelling ride. Thanks

i was surprised that there was as much tensions there was in the shower scene. The story is set in contemporary time and there is less tension at my local community centre where gay men and straight families share a change room. For the story arc the scene was great though

A truly profound chapter. A moving one too. As always this is not just another werewolf story but an expiration to a different world. Sadly as things become clearer, i see that we will reach the end of the tale not too long from now. Our Tuesdays will be emptier for it. Thanks again for a great story and what will come next.