Rndmrunner
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I particularly love the chapters that have a football focus. It is one of the things that sets this story apart.
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Hi Graeme, another lovely chapter. The pacing of the story is fantastic. You manage to move things forward steadily and have moments of suspense, growth and conflict without ever having to pack a huge chuck of the action into a single chapter. I see other writers here struggle with this and you make it effortless. The only difficulty is waiting till Saturday of rate next chapter. Cheers
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Hi Graeme, another fine chapter. I like how Doug is developing with his complex relationship to Neil through his relationship with Liam. It is also good to see Ty and Jim's storylines moving forward. And now another wait till next week. I, along with all the others will stayed tuned.....
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The flight response helps the plot line but these are grown up men. You have created 3 dimensional characters who have a history. Even if there is an ongoing misunderstanding, Patrick has regressed to a 15 year old here by the cut and run. Rob's connection and influence can still be explained gradually. I really like that the characters are not teenagers or young adults, it offers many opportunities. thoroughly enjoying the story
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Well, things are finally coming to a head. Hopefully there are still quite a few more chapters to go. I thought something was up when there was much less football this week. You got me hooked on the game/training details along with the story. You have really captured the potential for violence in Neil's dad. I am waiting to see how you handle his mum's reaction as well. She has had a more balanced view to date. I was trying to also figure out the significance if May 1st. Does it have to do with the proximity of Neil's birthday or something else? As always you have got me hooked and not waiting for another week.
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As always i am amazed by how you hold all the threads together and make it work so well. You cover a lot of ground in this chapter which is technically harder i think than even the previous one. It also warms me how well all the guys are pulling together for Dave and for each other and yet no cliches in sight. Thanks
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Really well set up. The themes are coming to a head but its not all melodrama. I like the pacing between the various themes: Neil, Dave and Ty. The middle characters round it all out and hold it together. As always an amazing story
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I love the complexity of the story. While i wait impatiently for the next instalment, i don't feel rush to get to the end. The characters and their interactions carry the day. Even more impressive is that you have created a raft of really well thought out characters beyond the usual 2 or 3 leads. Thanks again and take your time
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Never just a pulp fiction writer are you Sasha. The threads of depth and emotion swirl though the words like the smoke curling up from Oli's burnt page. Thank you for those haunting words. Earlier in the story i was waiting for a sign that Oli and Boris will find away around the offset of their changes. Now i know whatever happens, it doesn't really matter. Thanks for not settling for second best in your writing
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I keep worrying that this story will fall apart as you have a mighty mix of complex concepts and problems, and yet... it holds together wonderfully. Because we don't get a look inside their heads, the female characters are the hardest to read. In some strange way, Andrea and Anastasia are two halves of a whole: the mother being the thinking side and the dog the feeling side. Riveting!
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It is sweet torture waiting for each chapter to come out. That you post on a regular, if measured, basis only makes it worse. Thanks for the torture and for your understanding of people and their emotions as you weave your tales.
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One of your more traditional stories but no less excellent. Thanks again. Your characters come to life inside my head and get into our skin while still being very human with fault and foibles. Looking forward to the next tale (or tail).
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I have really enjoyed how you have used Jameson's character in this story in his interactions with both boys. The romance is sweet but in some ways he is the most interesting character of all. Another great story. Thanks
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you really make us pay attention. i love the subtle cues in the various relationships. You have created a variety of real characters that behave truly human. Congrats.
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a wonderful story that has entranced me for many months. i feel withdrawal coming on. One question, how did Michael resolve his work situation??
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We, the jury, find the defendant...
Rndmrunner commented on K.C.'s story chapter in We, the jury, find the defendant...
Great Chapter, but i have the feeling that we are nearing the end. We are coming down from the climax, just enough time for some tender exchanges and a little snuggling and we will be drifting off to sleep. Thanks KC but tell me its not quite over yet. -
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The "obligation came from something my brother said shortly after gay marriage became legal in Canada. We are not married and are fine with that even as we strongly supported the right to marry. My brother felt we should gotten married "because other in our position could not". We felt that choice implied just that a choice
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Shrapnel of a broken heart
Rndmrunner commented on K.C.'s story chapter in Shrapnel of a broken heart
I like that KC: "They made me do it". Is that an excuse for taking them through the wringer or a song from "Chicago"? I guess alls fair in love and war. Great chapter! -
This is the first of your stories that i have read. It is really great, fantastic character development and lots of wry humour. Each of the characters has a distinct voice and they are hilarious together. Thanks
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Well, last week they were Over the Rainbow and now we are back in Kansas again. Lets see if bluebirds will sing again. Its always tough when worlds collide. Great story!
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We knew you were better but what better proof than posting a new chapter. What a lovely chapter too. I'm glad you gave the boys a little respite (they were worried about you too these last few months) I'm sure it won't last for long though. Welcome back
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you are playing with us but i will stick with Paul. I really appreciate the various threads that weave the story together. Looking forward to hearing more from Julie, she is a strong character. Good work on the radio interviews, that sort of dialogue could easily be flat since the reader is not actually connected to the fictional teams discussed but you kept it lively. As always a great story!
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I have a mixture of joy and sadness: joy at how this story is developing with the wonderful richness of Tay and Kurt"s relationship, sadness that I can see the end in the horizon. too soon this story will reach its conclusion but thank you for the amazing journey. Thank you
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In lesser hands, this story would have been interesting and would have wound to a satisfying conclusion by now. You however have given a depth to the story that fleshes out these characters so that not only is it a hugely compelling story but we can reflect on our own inner turmoils and recognize our own emotions and struggles and those of our friends and family. That surely is what fantasy is all about. Oh did i mention that it is pretty damn sexy too. We all knew that Kurt and Tay would work it out, how could they not, but you ensured that it would be a thrilling and compelling ride. Thanks
