Adamantyne

Noooo! I guess it's what you could expect from Michael, but itjust made everything worse that he seemed to have become so at ease with the gay thing. Poor Asher :'(

Jack surprised me in this one - he needs to get help, like Bernard said. and they were quite nasty to each other over the phone. But I think it was a bit harsh for Bernard to say that he started drinking again. It happened once, come on. Not that I think he's going to stop at that, but he could at least give him the benefit of the doubt. So... I dunno. I think Bernard should try a be thereb more for Jack, but not necessarily move back to him yet. Jack is definitly the one needing counseling right now... and Bernard needs to grow up enough to not always lean on his mother. Seriously! I understand that she'ws all he's ever had, but he's almost 50 years old! Grow up! And I'm looking very much forward to the next chapter. I hope I won't have to wait too long *hint*

First off, I can't believe he lied about the job thing. Why would he think that was necessary, if only there had been some truth to it. "I’m sorry, but how does someone so mentally disturbed, and by that I mean suicidal four times over, get to the place where he can really make his own life decisions?" - I fwould've been so fucking pissed off by that comment that I probably would've walked out. If Bernard thought that the previous comment was patronizing, then what was this? I have no idea how he took it so calmly. "I won’t be trapped in a sick, abusive relationship" - Just really a short comment on this... I think that 'abusive' was a pretty strong word in this. In fact, I don't really see how any aspect of their relationship would be categorized as abusive. So, I understand Bernard completely, I think he has every right to be jealous. Especially if he has to hear about Randy every day. However, I think Bernard has had quite a set-back. Or maybe he just let out some things that he'd kept bottled up. But he seemed rather paranoid. "He reached for his hand, but was denied," or something like that. Sorry, can't myself, you've used this phrase several times in the story. I dunno, I just always noticed repetitions.

It would seem that I misjudged Jack some. The 4th of July thing was kind of "extreme" - for lack of a better word. I thought he had moved on further than that. I would be getting a little... uneasy if I was Bernard. I'm glad that Bernard sort of made up with his sister and I hope that the pregnancy will help her get her life back on track.

Bernard and his mother have the strangest relationship. Seriously, he's 46 years old and she still calls him her baby boy... and he lets her?! And he kisses and holds her hands all the time (but maybe that's more of a cultural thing...?). Lol, I just think it's weird. I feel sorry for Bernard having to deal with Jack's sorrow while everything is still so new to him. But at least Jack is open to changing things. And lastly, I'm glad that Molly reacted the way she did. I would just really like to meet Brenda soon now

Jack's patience is admirable, but it paid off and I really glad for both of them. By the way, I just read through my first reviews to this story. The first one didn't really make any sense and the next two or so had quite a few errors - I apologize for that. They were written on phone and the autocorrect and I didn't really agree. Therefore I will re-post my first review (without all the errors) - so now that we're all clear I am really excited about the story so far. I feel really sorry for Bernard, I wonder why it all went wrong. As for the more technical side of things, I really only have one thing; the dialogue can be a bit 'heavy' at times - not as natural as I'd like. Other than that it's all looking good. And like I said in the beginning, this story has really drawn me in. Nice Work:)

I'm glad that it seems his colleagues like him - and that he actually noticed that they missed him I'd think is a big improvement. Nad Jack asked him out!!!!! I am totally rooting for those two! Really kind of brave for Jack to make that move after reading his diary (even if it didn't go into details a whole lot), he really knew what he was getting into. And it's great that he's starting to lose weight and all and it seems that he's gained a tiny bit of confidence? I wonder what his mother will say when she finds out, and when and how he'll tell her.

I would've thought someone had cleaned his apartment - I Lean, it not like he's alone in this world ( and that god for that). I actually tried looking up how a 270 lbs man would look like, but I didn't get a whole lot of results on that, mostly muscly guys. I did find one or two, though, and they rally didn't look that bad. And when I try envisioning a 270 lbs man in my head, I get the same result. But Athen again, some people carry fat better than others, he might be one of the more unfortunate. And I Hope to god te stays in touch with Nancy, I really Love her. Hope I'll get a nurse like her if I lever go to hospital.

Wow! That Jeremy guy was a total asshole. What is wrong with some people? The laughing in his face I can kind og forgive - defense mechanisms and stuff, I have a bad habit og reacting like that if someone throws something totally unexpected at me -I mean, you can't necessarily help that, but insulting him afterwards? No need to kick a man already lying down! And I think it Wad horrible what happened to him after highschool. He doesn't even Steel to blame his mother that much, I'm pretty sure I would have. I Can See how that might Wear you down. Oh, and I love Jack! He seems like a great person.

I al rally afgiftes abort The story so far. I feel rally sorry for Bernard, I Wonder way it all Went wrong. As for the more technical side of things, I rally only have one thing; The dialogue Can be a bit 'heavy' at times - not as natural as one might wish. Other than that it's alm booking good. And like I said in The beginning, this story has rally drawn Le in. Nice Work:)

No!I Was so hoping that Tyler hadn't gone home with him. Geez... Awkward! And poor Michael, that's probably not what he expected. I will be impatiently waiting for the next chapter

Oh, you can't be serious! So I have to wait for a whole week for the next chapter?! I really didn't see that coming. Michael causing a scene... Tsh.

So I read this the other night, and feel a little guilty that I didn't review anything xD I really like this story so far. Really nice language, a good flow to everything and like-able characters. I don't much like Asher's friends, though, Ian and Milo. They seemed a bit insensitive considering they know about his sister and the Turtle Island thing. But then again I'm not really sure of their jargon. Anyway, I am looking forward to the next chapter.

It took me a while to figure out what was going to happen with Genji - nice going. Now he will hopefully have a really good memory to bring back to japan. I really liked the characters in this one, they were all quite endearing. I was really slow, though, when it came to figure why the hell their shoes were attached (until Kristina clarified, of course). I guess I'm not that good with symbolics.

A very delightful chapter as always. Kind of cool... I can't believe he actually asked him, I mean, it would've been her loss but still I don't know if I'd be able to. I like your sense of humor and especially those last two conversations with Brennan were awesome!

This is a fairly good story and with a good point. I did find it a bit overdramatic at times, though. Especially when they called all of Tony's previous victims and they showed up. I don't know... I just think it seemed a bit... excessive... Anyway, aside from a few minor grammatical and spelling errors, the language was really good.

I loved it! I really liked the 'set-ups' and they weren't too easy to see through. Especially not the one with the high way. Great story!

I'm not very comfortable with those three words. It doesn't even matter if they're meant for me. I don't like it in movies or books either. I've only ever said it once - twice counting the time I wrote it down - where I have have meant i from the bottom of my heart. I don't know if I'm insecure, but I'm almost afraid of how people will react. The few times it has been said to me I have not had the faintest idea of how to react. The first thing that comes into my mind is to run away xD I'm just really not good with commitment of any kind at. all. xD For the record, I am aware that this will most likely be considered immature by most (I agree and I am trying to work on it )

1. United States 2. England 3. Russia 4. Mexico (La isla de las muñecas) 5. Poland/Hawaii

I written stories before, though not in here, and I like to get some constructive criticism. In fact, I find it rather annoying if people don't have anything but flatter. I mean, it's nice, but I won't make me improve. I've actually thought about the whole "positivity thing" before, but I never thought about not telling the author my (almost) honest opinion - I do tend to sometimes leave out a few things, since I have experienced some author's taking my response very personal. I think it's a good idea to PM the author if it's more than just minor flaws. Don't know why I never thought about that xD

""Comin' in hot" by Hollywood Undead

I absolutely hate when people write "must/should/could (etc.) of". I cannot see how it is not obvious that an "of" does not make any sense in that context. Ugh! Also I'm not the most patient person on the planet, so it is of great annoyance to me when people don't drive the speed limit. I can see why you don't in for example cities, but when you are on a highway there is not reason whatsoever not to drive the speed limit. And when I see people throw trash on the street even though there's a garbage bin two feet away.

I really like this story, getting quite curios about that watch. The build-up of the story is nice, maybe a bit fast, but good. Your characters are well-defined and easy to follow. And I totally love Nathan, he's the cutest thing ever! I think you should get someone to proof-read it (or beta-read, isn't that what it's called?). It seems you've been tired or something when you wrote some parts - the adverbs, past tense and a few other things are a bit messy at times. Especially thought, though and through is mixed up more than once. It's small mistakes and it's not like it ruins the story or anything, hust thought I'd let you know Really nice lenght of the chapters by the way.

Really well-written, not that I expected anything else. Kind of original too and the way you jump in time and place is easy to follow. Well, not really much else to say. It was really fucking good - enticing Loved the ending - not too predictable and cheesy xD

I've been poostponing reading this for quite a while, I just couldn't seem to get started. I've read it now, though. I kind of feel like crying, but then again - I guess this was sort of a happy ending? The story is really well written, though I had some difficulty figuring out the time and place at times. I like how it goes back and forth and how you make the ends meet in the end. Jesus Christ, you really left me with and odd melancholic feeling here. This might be one of the best short stories I've ever read. Composition was great and the story was actually fairly original.