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I posted it more than a year ago... sometimes the internet here is a bit iffy, though.
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You have whisked me out of my bout of self-pity with your colourful images of life - I marvel at your way with words ...
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I'll still be with you
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I know embraces cannot heal pain and anguish. Virtual ones drift by in the wind.
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Great chapter! I could not help laughing at the scene of Z. recoiling from the plunger. What a funny scene! Brilliant. I had always wondered how these two will ever manage to get together. You have worked your magic as ever. Great story!
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Great ending! Thanks for a wonderful new story.
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They found him. Lee told Eddie to keep away. He has got rid of him. Finally. Now just let our guys not be too late! Forgiving authors for cliffhangers would be easy if the next chapter was posted the next day!!! Harlan. He knew. Of course. Who else...
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Isn't it sad to feel how special just having a room of his own and a clean, inviting bed are to Lee? Yes, there was so much to enjoy in this chapter, I agree with all of you before me on this, but somehow the omelette-making and the scene in the cabin have shown me more of Lee's past than even that horrible first chapter could. Has anybody ever shown real interest in Lee, in his abilities and his personality? These scenes, how Greg draws him out, how Lee starts developing ambition and a sliver of self-confidence, which was never there before, culminate in Harlan's assessment. But they also show the emotional abuse this boy suffered for the last years. And the squalor and dirt in Eddies apartment will now be a contrast to the cabin Lee can call his own. Avery will help him, if need be, to keep it as Lee likes it. I remember that Lee knows nothing about making life worth living. And I remember what you wrote about Eddie, Wayne: Why teach somebody to fish if you can buy him a can of tuna? This chapter is highlighting your comment brilliantly, by contrasting Eddie with Greg. Greg, who teaches him how to live. Who pays attention to him. Who tries to understand him instead of bending him to his will. I have always wondered how people can overcome the consequences of having been abused...
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Chapter 20 Epilogue: The Promised Land
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 20 Epilogue: The Promised Land
You have moved me to tears. Beautiful. I love the way past and present are joined here to make a promising future. How evil is buried and forgiven. How mother's love is remembered with love and new lives. And our two men right in the middle. You couldn't have given this story a better ending. -
Beautiful - I like the way they complement each other, overcoming inhibitions. How difficult it must have been then to talk about something so intimate, not wanting to use any dirty words for it. Watching the trust and the love between them in the barber scene was wonderful, hearing Boone talking about using an enema - ingenious construction! - and then feeling their love for each other and their care - then hearing them promise for ever. Beautiful. It might just make me forgive you for saying that's it. But I do look forward to your epilogue. Thank you, Gary, for this beautiful story. And be well.
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The headline led me to expect something different, but what I read had me hooked immediately. I also liked your little trick of looking back on the scene in the office instead of following the timeline. I was wondering all the time why they would be buying horses first. Lemon with his hidden agenda... does not bode well, I'm afraid. I do hope that trouble won't unfold before they have made a few good friends. And I cannot help but think that a pair of watchdogs might be a good idea, too. I love how easy and happy the two of them are now. What a contrast to the constant tension and uncertainty of the first chapters. Thank you for another great chapter.
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Chapter 17 Lessons Learned
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 17 Lessons Learned
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Chapter 17 Lessons Learned
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 17 Lessons Learned
Beautiful and more than welcome on this dreary day, Gary! I wonder what more will come? Will they hit any obstacles buying their lots? Will they be accepted by the locals? Will they be able to prepare for winter? Will they take in orphans? There are so many ways this can go on, I just hope it does... -
Great to be at Camp Refuge again. A wonderful present to start the new year with. And - although many have said this already - a very promising start. I found the scene in Eddie's apartment really harrowing, it made my heart ache for Lee, especially getting to know later that he had been there for three years... What a contrast to the last scene, where we see Lee getting a decent meal, one that he had made himself, too. I wonder how long it will take him to understand that he need not be afraid of our friends at the campground... and what it will take him to understand that. He seems - understandably - unable to trust anybody. I am also glad that his phone is destroyed which means that as long as Eddie does not come to get him he will be safe from that creature. but I am sure that we have not seen the last of that man. Thank you for this new story, Wayne!
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I love the way the two of them circle around the issues, first how they check all the plots until they find the ideal ones - really like Eden - and then around their relationship, first talking about farms, then houses and then - finally about themselves and each other. How they find their way to expressing their love, both in words and in then physically, too. Great chapter, Gary. Wonderful present for Christmas this year! Thank you.
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Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
Dear Gary, enjoy Christmas Day and all the goodies you may be preparing for yourself. We will feast on deer tonight, Brussel sprouts in a cheese cream and I'll try a new potato dish. We just finished sampling our traditional Christmas cookies (old family recipes) and our "Stollen" (German Christmas cake). Winter this year feels more like spring, no snow as yet and none in sight. Here and there a lonely violet in blossom in the garden. All the best to you, Gary! em -
Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
It has been long. Indeed. I have lighted my candles, my 'traditional decorations' are lit, too, to cheer me and the people passing by up. Take care, stay safe and enjoy Christmas, my friend! -
Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
I need to add this: the loudest lines to me in your poem, Gary, are these: It’s for my own good While I await my four calls -
Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 24 Christmas in the Time of Covid
In the original German poem or song, the Christmas stood for true love, evergreen, ever loving, ever growing. Not flighty or fickle. So, your tree - let it stand sparsely lit. You will still smell what it is, enjoy its green twigs, a sign of hope in our times of isolation and care. Let's hope for being together again and touching our loved ones. Why not? Yes, we may be alone now (how long has it been???), but there are phone-calls and emails, letters and chats. Remember, a letter once took days to arrive. We know now once more, what's really important. I was sitting at my desk, trying to pour my love for my loved ones into verses as there are no embraces in sight, no Christmas parties, festivities in the days up to Epiphany. Those days between Christmas and Epiphany - a never-ending party with ever more guests and friends and family.... This year it will be a truly quiet time. Silent. As the night. (There's a 9 pm. curfew over here.) Holy night? I'm not so sure... Feel embraced, my friend. Feel comforted. With thousands of miles between us, that is all I can send. em -
I have been looking forward to the evening all day, trusting that the next chapter to your story would be posted by then. Thanks for making my day! Clever the two men are and careful, making a great team, complementing each other. They read people truly well! What I like most is the feeling I get from Coy that he is staying and not for just a short time. I like that the last sentence starts with laughter and "in unison", which I take as a sign of what I want to happen eventually.
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No wonder Coy held back and pushed Boone away. And what irony, as it only shows how much he cared for him. What Coy tells Boone is just another example of what hatred and mindless egotism can do to others. As long as his brother lived Coy would never have opened up to Boone or even considered his feelings for his longtime friend. The scene where Will acts as if he was the judge on whom to allow to exist and whom not to is frightening - as it shows us his perfect willingness to take a life he thinks abnormal or whatever. He even threatens to kill his own brother, the only relative he has left!? I am glad the two of them can be on their own now and find out about themselves and each other. Thanks for telling us about Coy's past - and Boone's, too...
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Chapter 12 Confessions and Commandments
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 12 Confessions and Commandments
Beautiful ending to a chapter of cruel dreams and truth laid bare. Fitting too. Somehow they are on a good path to finding to each other, yet so much can still thwart them and destroy what they are about to find. Thank you for this chapter, my friend! Be well and take care.- 88 comments
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Chapter 11 River of Dreams
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 11 River of Dreams
His nightmares mirror his feelings, the fear, the fear for Coy. I guess it was good to go back to the place where he fell into the river and almost drowned. But how hard that must have been. I like the new, more self-confident Coy. Their friendship now seems to be on an equal footing, at least more so than at the beginning. I wonder where Coy found his self-confidence which he did not seem to have before. Maybe it is partly going after a person whom you suddenly miss and whose absence taught him how much he means. I'll try to be patient... -
Chapter 10 Praises for Blue
mayday commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 10 Praises for Blue
A real respite. I wonder, though, what both are keeping back from the other. I get the impression that not everything is out in the open yet. That will take time and some more moments in which they must decide what they really want. The last part raised the hope in me - or rather the certainty - that Boone will find the perfect place for him eventually. But he does not know yet, how much support he has in his friend and his animals. I love the idea that Blue trusts him and cares for him. Animals can be reliable judges of character.
