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BeautybutBroken

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  1. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 1

    I first read this story years and years ago but recently, I found myself thinking about it. This led me back here to read it again. I love this story. It's one that sticks with you long after you read it
  2. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 2

    Great chapter! I was a bit surprised when Nate and Jeff did it. I thought when Mandy left the room, they were just gonna jack each other off or something like that. I figured the first time they did it would be special lol my mistake!
  3. Invisible Can I disappear? Become someone else Stand in the lithosphere Just for an hour Maybe for a day It has to be possible These must be a way I wanna be above Away from the shadows Let me be free I won’t stand in the gallows Death is not a wish Or even a request It’s getting harder to breathe Knowing I can’t pass the test Humiliation Where’s my retaliation? I’m not anything But a creation Can I be on top? Have no one look down on me? Just a chance, just
  4. Great poem! sad but true...
  5. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 16

    OMG! Best ending ever! you scared me there for a minute. i thought tibal was really gonna leave. I hate that the story is over though! you did a great job!
  6. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 13

    I can't believe Tibal has 2 little girls. OMG! it's just so cute seeing him as a dad to them. But now that Chad is back in the picture...hmmm...Wonder how and if Tibal and Chad are gonna put the pieces back together (Which i totally think they should!) Did Mia die??? I hope not. i mean even though she did get in between the boys, she did help them both out. she wouldn't deserve to die. I loved the chapter though. Great way to start part 3. I'll be waiting for the next.
  7. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 6

    no offence but i hate reading the ending of this chapter! I think it was so wrong of luke to do that. But it worked out ok i guess lol
  8. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 5

    Now i definatly see where luke and noah from the soap oprea come in at!!! i can't believe i didn't see it before. Noah tried to hide is feelings from luke in the soap too even though he really did like him. And Luke was opened about his feelings waiting for noah to finally admit to them. I knew something good would come out of watching those tv shows lol
  9. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 12

    OMG! i can't believe Chad did that. You surprised me there. Lol i wasn't for sure what would happen but i never thought that of all things would. Hmm i wonder what's gonna happen now. Tibal is gonna be miserable
  10. BeautybutBroken

    Time

    Such a HUGE surprise about Eddie being in the wreck. It really scared me lol.
  11. You're not too bad a reveiwing lol i'm glad you got somthing from them. As i grew up, i always thought that a poem had to rhyme. I know that it doesn't have to but it doesn't seem good enough to me if i don't make them rhyme.I will be writing more soon. Hope you stick around
  12. BeautybutBroken

    Realization

    I seriously thought Aaron was gonna rape Rory
  13. BeautybutBroken

    The Shadow

    Loved it. I must admit i did rate this story before i read it. But i had a good feeling about it. This poem was great.
  14. BeautybutBroken

    Understand

    Yay! this is the first story i've read that has my name in it It's pretty cool. Well maybe not my WHOLE first name. But close enough lol
  15. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 10

    Wow a jail break. I never thought of that lol. I wonder how this is gonna work out. Mia with the 2 guys. i think it's not gonna go very smooth but then again... i may be wrong.
  16. OMG! I knew there was something up with "Uncle Jase"! I cant believe they're all gay. hmmm wonder how this is gonna work out lol
  17. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 1

    I liked the story! i just wish it was a tad bit longer lol.
  18. This poem and the poem in chapter 6 was my favorites lol. they're easy to relate to, well in my case anyway. i've been thinking alot about not knowing who i am, so chapter 4 meant alot... knowing who you are is never easy. And "tell me how", i ask those questions to my self sometimes. but never really come up with an answer lol
  19. BeautybutBroken

    Tell Me How

    i loved this poem! it's really good. i could definatly relate to it.
  20. i have to admit, this story freakin scared me in certain chapters. But it was good enough to keep me wanting to read more. The ending was different and not what i expected. But story was full of surprises lol.
  21. BeautybutBroken

    Tease, Please

    i got confused at some parts but it was over all pretty good. can't wait to read the next chapters
  22. This is my first set of poems on here. So please reveiw it and let me know if it's any good. I hope ya'll like it!
  23. Have you ever wanted to touch a fire flame? Or been with tons of people but your the only one to blame? Looked in broken glass and seen who your really are? Wanted to turn around but you've went too far? Seen an old friend getting put in the ground? Searched for a reason when there's not one to be found? Thought you was okay but your scars are still there? Screamed that this game is anything but fair? Lost something you thought you couldn't live without? Known that
  24. BeautybutBroken

    Chapter 1

    it was pretty good. you should write more. i think writing is one of the best ways to express yourself and your feelings. no matter how bad they are lol
  25. Ya'll are brave for showing what you really look like. I would never have enough courage to do it lol.
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