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James Clay Henry and Margret “Maggie” = J and M - an effort to tell the world what Abigail Henry did not want told
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The Return From California
innerkid13 commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in The Return From California
It seems that bigotry exists in many forms. Welcome to America…😢 -
As inept as McCormick is at his job, I cannot fathom why any reader would expect that police force to be anything but a clown car at a circus. As a reader, I am struggling for any other option except that McCormick is now somehow working for or with Tarquin. This town seems to be becoming a major mafia operation with Tarquin being at least a local operator based on the level of corruption and complicity. I am really struggling to give this the benefit of the doubt. (Sorry.) There are too many infuriating characters and situations - maybe it is time to tell Noah to load the Arc and cleanse the rest. AARRGGHH!!!
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I agree with Geemeedee: I am triggered. I feel Oliver has become an addict like victim - to TARQUIN! With full knowledge. Is he salvageable? Hmm…. Will it take something above and beyond amazing to redeem this character - DEFINITELY. Do I think it is achievable? Hmm…. Maybe a slightly shorter prison sentence than Tarquin is a good outcome for this character. ugh.
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It does not seem plausible that Tarquin could squirrel away money. Convince me otherwise. 🤔
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Sometimes sharing how you resist temptation can be the most enlightening and cathartic experience for all involved…even if Kyle deserves the kind of painful death Shaun would inflict. Maybe the dark drug group will eliminate Kyle and Ethan in a public manner as a message to their other local dealers.
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I don’t know whether you have some extreme experiences or just the imagination to pul this together. The cattle reference was particularly impactful. Well done, sir; well done.
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Well written addiction; I almost feel sorry for Lucas, almost-
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It seems like Jake is now in danger from Lucas. Will he drain him dry.
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Lucas is insatiable, truly addicted to semen to continue growing. When will he hit bottom and realize his addiction is not sustainable. Great writing as always.
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Seizième partie : Le Dessert
innerkid13 commented on W_L's story chapter in Seizième partie : Le Dessert
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Krista is AWESOME for posting this chapter during Thanksgiving week - Thank you!
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I am unable to find the dehydrating from tears emoji
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Woo-hoo! Go Davin! Go Joel! Learn how to be happy.
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Only if the Darth went grey - there is no inherit evilness - just what is required to force back to balance - well her definition of balance - maybe if Yoda did not choose the Jedi or the Sith but the path between
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Soap? It is more like Laverne & Shirley. I always wondered about Lenny and Squiggy. They probably smelled like bleach.
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Your story just supported that hate and anger is superior to supporting each other. I struggle to not reject this.
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Minor detail: where are the dogs, with Colt, Gavin, Davin, and Two tractors across the road or on the couch before the boys return?
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Minor detail: “Steve turned, pulling off his helmet and shaking out his dark hair. His eyes, electric blue in the low light, were warm and soft. He looked at Kenny, a quiet, questioning look on his face.” Kenny was wearing the helmet. Overall, enjoying this crazy little story.
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I thought the purpose of a curtain was to peak and still be willing to believe what you see…or something even better…or…
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I begrudgingly admit that you have enthralled me to actually like Josh…and even Zeke (good thing you started being nice to Joey). Your writing and story crafting bring the characters to life and allow for an emotional connection with them - even when they make bad first impressions. Cheers to you for the accomplishment. Awesome!
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THaNK YOU! Is there a story about Renato, Ariadne, Timmy, and the council? I look forward to learning the answer one day…
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Ok, I dislike Zeke less but still not a fan (picking on Joey remains a hard action for me to overlook - just me). Zeke has gained a little hope from me. Separately, October would likely be considered late in the season - a couple of paragraphs in the chapter around the swimming lesson/wet suits indicated “this early in the season” then October a few paragraphs later. Great chapter in a compelling story. Looking forward to your next posting.
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I am not yet a Zeke fan. Maybe he will redeem himself somehow and become more relatable and like able, but now he is just annoying and mean-spirited with a dichotomous willingness to share what he has with others - odd and difficult to align with the jealousy. I really hope my opinion changes…
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“I Will Survive,” but I “Ain’t Gonna Bump No More.”
