Jaro_423

That was great! Very enjoyable! I liked the quick read even though I normally enjoy getting into something longer and more meaty (excuse the pun!). It took a while to get to the meaty bits - 18 chapters of the 23! Wow! But must say I was way ready for it by then - very worked up! Thanks for the entertaining read. It was also teary! Just like Mitch! Hell! But you made all the characters so likeable. Really nice! Thanks.

Having read the first three chapters I am getting into this and enjoying the feisty characters and the potential for conflict here, and domination (oooh!) Not sure who will dominate who though! It's fun and am beginning to enjoy the ride and look forward to reading on. I like the POVs and so far the characters are true to form and coming out well.

The realism is brutal and hard hitting. It's like a slap in the face! Not sure that I like it, but it was a very interesting experiment and hard hitting. There were elements of humor in it and a great deal of interesting explorations of Chinese culture. Quite fascinating. That was worth the read. Myself, I am a hopeless romantic and that's what I would look for in a story that was going to entertain me fully. But I am glad I read this and I did enjoy it. Thanks.

Just wanted to say thanks for the great story. Thoroughly enjoyed every part of it.

And thanks for writing! Enjoying muchly! Though also so envious of this love they have - ah to dream!

Great details and development. Really loving the story, though still disconcerted by typos (not so many in this chapter). Wondering if you return to read reviews since the last time this was reviewed seems to have been in July 2012; more than a year ago! Anyway, it's fun to read what folk have to say about your story and what turns them on, freaks them out, shuts them down, etc.

A great chapter and very touching but spoilt by lots of little typos/grammar errors. Rather disconcerting and distracting. Don't you have someone to proof read for you before you publish the chapter?

Just started this story today and it's great. Very intriguing situation and you make it so convincing. So many writers don't get the kids stuff right and the age thing but you do it so well it is so easy to picture it. I love it. And the tenderness there is so touching too both between the kids and their dads and David's love for Christian. I am looking forward to a good read here.

Maybe that's why I struggle with the shorter chapters. Too quickly over, just like all modern stuff. A quick dip, in/out and we're done. Hope the love story is not too much like that too! I find it unsatisfying and unfulfilling. This is just my personal choice, of course. Prefer to get my teeth into something and experience it heart and soul. But thanks for the explanation.

I love your realism here and you convey it so very succinctly and amusingly. Keep it rolling. It is a good story, though the chapters are very short.

Been away as my computer needed repair, so I did a quick catch up with the story. I am captivated and so enjoying it in all its aspects. Have not listened to the song, regret to say, as my computer is so slow with the video stuff and eats too much of my precious airtime too. The mix of Chinese culture, the reality of your experience (loved the comments about the noisy family on the bus!), the humor of your sitting side by side using your phones to communicate. It's all very entertaining, plus, of course, there's the drama of the "love story". Will it happen? How will it go from here? Very enticing. Thank you!

A powerful prologue. Really sets the tone well. Draws the reader in and holds attention well. I like the way you handle the language too. Fine control.

What can I say? It's as good as ever. You sure know how to keep ones attention focused and lead one on! I'm following like a puppy. Where's the next one?

I am so enjoying it. It is so interesting that you explain the nuances of culture that a westerner (actually I should say an African since I live in Africa) would not understand. I find it quite fascinating, and the development of the relationship weaving thru this is also enticing and exciting. You being so caught up in the exchange about food that you made a date without thinking was just so natural, because we were also caught up in the story and it was such a natural progression. No sweat, man! It was good! It's strikingly unconventional in the way you are just describing it as it happens, so the relevant parts of your chat were recorded verbatim it seemed. That was good. I love the little aside observations too. You have such a sharp observant mind and often see the funny side in things too. You may think the business of being Chinese is just as it so happens, but it's what is making this story so fascinating too. The Chinese element in it is important to understanding your apprehensions. As an aside we are getting a bit of culture lesson too which is great. Keep it rolling, Maestro. You doing a great job.

Wow! Another very sobering story that makes a hard case against the evils of porn. Very thought provoking.

That was an incredibly sobering story. What started out as sad and then turned humorous became in the end soul scorching and made me look at myself and my own desires and to think how I must be careful with them and re-evaluate what I really want. Very powerful. You are an amazing writer. Thanks.

Another good one! And so different to what I have read so far. No comedy or humor here. It read like a detective story - a bit like a Sherlock Holmes - in the style and the tension and the understatements together with the descriptive details of the time and the place. Very compelling writing. And I found the conclusion was enormously satisfying in that a good resolution was brought out of a bad situation. It was also intriguing in that I wasn't sure in the beginning whether you were getting carried away with your imagination in what you were seeing in the situation, and then it became apparent that you were right on target. Excellent! You are a great writer. I am a fan!

Very good! Thanks. Looking forward to some more like that.

Very good! I loved it. You are so funny! I love your sense of humor!

This is so real and so good. I love it. Your comments about internet dating and all that goes with it were a laugh a minute! And you made me laugh - I laughed all the way to the bathroom (just happened to need the bathroom; it wasn't your writing that sent me there!) and that was good because I have been more than normally depressed today, even a little suicidal in my thinking, and I really needed to be pulled out of it. Your story has really helped here. But what is so good is that it is also serious, and the end of the chapter was so real too with the fears about what might result from internet meetings. You handled it so well and so naturally. I love it! Keep it going!

A very interesting Prologue. It's most intriguing and makes one want to find out how this all goes. Lots of room for misunderstanding and drama rather than love. So I want to read on. And as you are saying this is based on personal experience, so much the better. Real life experience, even when it is so dramatically amazing, is always more convincing that romantic fictional tales from the imagination. So well done, so far. It's enticing me into the next chapter!

Whoa! How's Sarah fit in so close that she can alter the house. She appears to be a neighbor and doesn't own the house. That's strange. And then to be bossing Scott around - he sure needs it - but a neighbor doing this. Where I come from neighbors don't do that! Sorry, it's all a bit unrealistic. And then the business with him and Sarah waiting for him to come out of the shower sitting in his bedroom. Shucks! They sure take liberties. It was almost turning into a comedy at that point, and so I didn't read the rest of the chapter. Sorry, dude. It just doesn't cut it for me.

Yes, it was a shocker that Will had made such a comment and that Michelle reacted so badly to it. A bit over the top, but if how it came up in the exchange was shown it might be more understandable, as well as Michelle's dramatic response. The grief and the turmoil is well expressed and deeply moving.

So very intense and so well done! I love the way you write and your handle on the emotions. It is so appropriate, so masculine, so compassionate. Can't wait for the story to continue and thanks for being so diligent with keeping the next chapter coming. You do a really great job.

Very weird! Not sure about this at all!