This Story has the makings of something more. The author might consider expanding this into a full story. I would like to read a longer story with this short story as a premise. Maybe build on Leo and Kenny's relationship going forward.
I still find this story interesting, but frustrating. Such short chapters! I almost want to pause for a year before coming back to this story and reading the chapters to catch up. Kidding! Sort of! Maybe?
Did not mean to imply that there is anything wrong with the flashbacks; I just wanted to note that it was a deviation from Comicality's style. There is nothing wrong with using flashbacks in a story, in my opinion. I am still looking forward to reading the next chapters.
Well, an interesting chapter. The nightclub fits in with Comicality's storylines, but I do not think that the flashback did. I could be wrong, but I do not remember any flashbacks in his stories. I also sense trouble from the elders. I am looking forward to the next chapter.
Wow, there is a lot to assimilate in this chapter! Keep up the good work. I look forward to seeing how things turn out. Will Adrian become a vampire? Only time will tell.