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    Coldwater splashed over me, drawing me from an incredible dream. I spluttered, feeling the coldness begin to seep through my pyjama top. Looking around wildly, I found three boys sniggering at me. The middle one, grinning evilly, held the bucket. “Wet yourself again, I see, faggot,” Laurence taunted. Either side of him was his goon squad. His six-foot frame blocked the light from the door, and his bright blue eyes watched me with unadulterated glee. “What the
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    Alex Walker is your average Kid, he loves computers and conspiracy theories. On a normal Saturday, he and his brother are wrenched from their lives and hidden in an underground bunker for six months. Alex must find out why he and the other children have been put down there and survive to emerge from the bunker. With strange happenings and a saboteur, Alex has his hands full with the group of teens he must now lead.
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    Lay Me Down

    Westarcher commented on Dahawk's story chapter in Lay Me Down

    I'm sorry but I could not finish it, the premise is there. Did you have an editor in the first two chapters because there are a lot of grammar mistakes. It's a interesting story but I would suggest less POV's, there are far too many. My suggestion would either cut the POV or go third person, which for this story would be perfect. Good luck with the story!
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    A great continuation of Fearless, I read fearless elsewhere and was sad Clint and Travis never got together but I do like Zane.As I've read from your other responses you were considering continuing Fearless, I would like to have seen more from Clints point of view especially as him and Zane got together. Perhaps a chapter dedicated to each, usually I don't like different perspectices in one book but I love Clint. Great Story and Zane is certainly shaping u to be an interesting character.
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    I wanted to wait until this chapter before reviewing, but I've spent the last few days reading your story and I absolutely love it!. Robbie is so awesome and I can certainly empathize with Robbie, I struggled with my sexuality for years until I was in my twenties. When I was younger, the world was not as liberal so it was harder to come out. I love Robbie and Nathan together and I really do hope Robbie comes out, I think Sue might know but I really don't like Nocola. Was she really like that in real life?
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    I would love to read it on Nifty, but I'm really enjoying it and hope Billy and Brett end up together
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    Tristan and Jesse are great together but Tristan really annoyed me at the beginning of the story. Please hurry and get another chapter ouy instead of making us wait another year. I think your like Jesse, you like writing but have all these ideas. I'm the same, I've got so many ideas in my head but I force myself to focus on one story, I write the other ideas down in a notebook and focus on the main story. It might be a suggestion to help you write one story at a time.
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