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Glad you think so, Tim. ;-)
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Just riveting. I'm in love with this story: the characters, the honest dialogue, the real-life conflicts of family ties and love and loss, the mystery of what's to come between Craig and Jared. Carly's a mess, but hopefully she'll turn around. You've got it all going on here, Gary, and your writing style makes for pleasurable reading.
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A True Italian from New York
MacGreg commented on R. Eric's story chapter in A True Italian from New York
Great character development. North meets South, opposites attract. I appreciate their conversations and their humorous banter. I can tell that they're going to have fun together. I was raised Baptist, I can relate to a lot here. I've been disenchanted with church-life for a long, long time. But once a Baptist... well, let's just say there's always going to be a lingering effect. I look forward to reading more of your story. Cheers -
Another great chapter, pulling us along on the journey, offering a glimpse of possible future community bonding that offsets the impending conflict with the gang on the way. Love the sweetness between Jae and Dave. Gives hope to the whole thing. Barry and his sons seem like genuinely good people, down-to-earth.
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More conflict, and with it, a tighter bond between Dave and Jae. Jae was very brave - made me see his character in a new light. And he just learned to ride a horse, so kudos to him for toughing that part out. Poor kid, though, getting caught, held hostage, beat up. His injuries could have been much worse - and worse things could have happened to him. Again, a great sense of community, even in disparaging times. Your descriptions of the farm bring me right there, as though I'm smelling the crops and manure myself. Cheers to the good writing, Tim.
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I agree with AC - you've got some Steinbeck-esque to the feel of this story, which is a good thing because he's one of my favorite authors and I never tire of that style of writing. The overall agrerian landscape and lifestyle you've chosen really sets the tone for something special here... a chance at a decent life, living off the land, finding love, enjoying the company of neighbors, trying to make a community in a dystopian world. Dave is very sweet to Jae, wants to make it the best it can be, not just physical. He's got surprising restraint, considering intimacy hasn't been a common thing for him. Conflict at the end of the chapter regarding Jim and his news of a gang is a great way to leave off...
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Haha, sorry again about the meltdown of your computer, Lisa. Better keep an extinguisher nearby for future use, lol. Much more of this story to be revealed, including the intern. Stay tuned.
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Valkyrie, your comments are great. I like to keep this story moving along with some mystery, unfolding the characters a little bit more along the way. Glad you liked the rock scene. More to come, so to speak. Haha. Cheers.
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Hey droughtquake, you're right, there's a deeper wound that fuels their sibling rivalry, to eventually be revealed. I appreciate you following along and giving comments. Cheers
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Thanks, Jeff! Confusion and conflict are all a part of the substance of this story, but there will be moments of great clarity, too. There are many more experiences for Ben and Travis on the horizon. And some surprises, too.
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Kind words, thank you Larry. I've enjoyed developing Ben and Travis' characters and bringing them to life. You'll find out a little bit more about Katy's deal - eventually. ;-) Thanks for following this story. Cheers - Mac
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Ben and Travis’ attempt at a post-meal retreat was unsuccessful. Dessert was served in the front sitting room beside the fire, and everyone’s presence was expected. The sun had long since disappeared behind the foothills, and the ranch now sat in quiet stillness – no cars passing, no helicopters overhead, no evidence of a busy world beyond. To Ben, the atmosphere was stark and deafening in its placidity. He was unaccustomed to such silence. Claiming a spot on the dark chenille sofa, Katy ne
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Great piece of writing. You explored the characters well and described the landscape with rich, believable detail. I appreciate the candid conversation between the strangers and the prospect of the two of them sharing a hot moment together.
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Dangerous, yes, but both seem to be willing to take the risk at this point. Even if Katy wishes otherwise... Thanks for your feedback, Gary, I appreciate it coming from you. Cheers - Mac
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Glad to hear it, Jeff. I hope readers can get inside Ben's head and see this story through his somewhat scattered, unsure perspective.
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Yep, send me the bill for the new computer! Haha. We haven't seen the last of little Miss Katy... ;-)
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Hi Valkyrie, thanks for the positive feedback. I appreciate your thoughts, and I'm glad to keep you in a bit of a frenzy. Their restraint in the bathroom was commendable but can't last forever... As always, your eye for edits is appreciated!
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:-) What's wrong with a little attention from middle-aged women and creepy old men? Haha. Thanks for the chuckle, droughtquake.
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After learning about your "Treading Water" story, I thought I'd come check it out - and am I ever glad I did! Phenomenal writing. You developed your characters in a subtle way without spelling it all out within the first two paragraphs, which I greatly appreciate. Very engaging story with believable characters, a sense of mystery, good tension-build, and passion - all in only the first chapter. Bravo!
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Dinner was served at the main house shortly after sunset. The spread was unexpected: grilled tenderloin, roasted potatoes, spinach salad, jalapeno cornbread, Malbec wine. “My mom enjoys cooking when there's company,” Travis whispered to Ben as they took their places at the dining table with the antique chandelier shining brightly above them. That morning, Mrs. Cooper hadn't even been aware that she'd soon have three guests at her front door. Ben sensed something special, or maybe supernatural, a
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Haha, Lisa. I've broken up my chapters into sections here on GA, because I think each chapter would be too long for this format. I'm trying not too wait too long between postings. :-)
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Ha, your stories and memories of Colorado are great to hear, Lisa. Your drive from Denver to Aspen might have been along I-25, through Glenwood Canyon. But Independence Pass is the road that is much more direct - and much more treacherous. In December, it would have definitely been closed. Best you didn't take that one. :-)
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Thanks, Jeff!
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Hi Lisa, I agree, Mrs. Cooper is beyond amenable for having 3 unknown guests show up on her doorstep. Don't know that I would be. :-) Glad you like how Ben and Travis are starting to get to know a little more about each other. Similarities are unexpected but bonding. Thanks for following along. Cheers - Mac
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Hey Gary, thanks for the feedback! Travis is a complex character, who will continue to unfold as we go along, as will Ben. All people have individual stories and complex backgrounds of experiences that mould them into who they are, and that's what I hope to elucidate with these characters. Cheers - Mac
