Anton_Cloche

So, you tell us (loyal readers) "...no one ever really dies..."? * And yet Hunter talks with his Great-Grandma Jillian and Grandpa Tristan who said, "she wasn't in spirit form but passed away", (meaning she can't come back in 'spirit form' or be otherwise reconstituted). On top of which Tristan (elder) spoke with CC and she was aware of a coming bomb and told him to keep Tristan (younger) safe? Any statement* you'd like to recant? 🤔 And what else transpired during Tristan's 90-day coma? Inquiring minds want to know...soon. 👀😭

Ok AG, This cliffhanger has all the earmarks of a funeral. While you've repeatedly said "No ones ever really dies in (my) stories", I do recall some people who have died, been killed off etc. Eventually, through shifts in space, time, alternate realities, some (not all so far) reappear. So, is this your version of Ebenezer Scrooge seeing a glimpse of 'possible' futures, or are you just throwing a stick into the bicycle spokes to see what happens? 😳 😕

As much as I'd like to help, (offering my skills such as they are), I'm in the midst of trying to challenge my late Great-Aunt's estate, which over the last 11 years has become the basics for a story unto itself. My Great-Grandfather's daughter, (ergo my Dad's niece), died in UK in 2009 with No Will, No children (in UK-speak aka 'issue'), leaving about $240K. Under UK law they have to go back up family tree to her common paternal (thanks to UK Primogeniture rules) grandfather to determine heirs. My dad was one of 3 surviving heirs who also had children. Unfortunately greedy and unscrupulous UK lawyers tried to 'game the system' and enrich themselves, friends and cohorts. Longer story shortened, I found out by mis-receiving an email and the hunt began. But COVID intervened, I can't fly to UK (from Canada, OR enter US, my late Mom's family from Maine, to fly from there) to handle directly, so long-distance legal battles ensued ( not pun intended). Anyway, getting back to your finding a sympatico editor, I could just pass along any errors or oops' I find in case you're thinking of re-writes, but not before Sept. By the way, any suggestions I would make are done by DM and not posted for others to see. That's my respect for the author. In the meantime, keep writing, stay safe, get Fully Vaccinated ( 2 shots of Pfizer or Moderna are best), and keep wearing the damn masks in public*. Tony (Anton) * ICYMI - The Anti-Vaxxer covidiots are 98% of those in hospital infected or dying, and Asymptomatic ("I'm not sick so I can't have it") are spreading it as we speak as modern day 'Typhoid Mary'. Even if Fully Vaccinated they can still spread it to you, you just won't get super sick.

Apps are only a good as the people (in other countries for whom English is not their first language), make them. In a previous lifetime I used to edit International trade agreements, which involves translating from 1 language to 1 our more others. Then it had to be reverse translated from each language back to English for accuracy. LOTS of mistakes. Tony (Anton) B

You said, " I would love more interaction with my readers", and while emojis might be an indication that somebody's reading stories, real feedback is what can reward authors and also stimulate them. Also, I think GA needs to incorporate a 'click meter' that just records that someone has read it. (Otherwise 'somebody' is gonna get his shorts in a twist. But hey, I'm using MY Freedom of Speech). AG, this story can be confusing at times ( oh hell, a lot of times 😜 ), what with character shifts, time and locale shifts etc etc. But in it's own way that to is endearing. My 'Editor's Eye screams a lot at syntax, spelling, continuity , grammar and other errors / issues. Often enough that my 'red pencil' 📝 is afraid to be around. 😉 Anyway, keep up the good work. Tony

DK, your 'end notes' in chapters are one endearing item that makes your writing special. Thank goodness for that special woman who helped you when you were being bullied and saved your life. Without her, you wouldn't be here, and your stories would be lost. Hope your summer vacay is working out.

WTH? 'g' with Iron Man-like device in chest that 'counts down', releases 'hallucinogenic gas' AND brings the whole damn 'Company' down in an "explosion" not implosion? Unless chest 'device' was wirelessly transmitting BOOM signal to devices around the building? 💣 So you just had to go one step further (for you) from a 'regular cliffhanger' to a "Yippee Ki Yay, motherfucker" (John McClane speaking, not me ) one. As for Zeke's multi-Million dollar inheritance being totally wiped out? The 'books' 📒'cooked' by 'g' only show the money is 'gone'. Which leaves the question - 'Gone Where'? Corey says: “Well, you haven't lost everything". As we all know, bad guys, criminals, drug lords (et al) and sleaze-ball corrupt politicians stash their ill gotten gains offshore. 💰 💵 💸 🏝️

Just an FYI, the image for this story does not appear, unless your mean the original FAMH one. Looking for McNugget now that you've whetted my appetite. 😛 Where is it posted?

Doc, you've done it again, brought me happy tears in a finely crafted A Farm at Maple Hollow story. All the hard work, love and caring of Effr, both as Dr and 'father' to Rabbit, has been rewarded as the boy healed and grew. From Timothy - a boy broken and left to die, to a young man learning how to succeed with the help and love of his best friend Bax and the curative power of Ethan, Arik and Sam's cabin on Ant Island in Blueberry Pond. And "in the fullness of time" to marry, follow in his father Effr's footsteps to become a doctor and father to three identical 4-year-old orphaned triplets! (There's a story right there along with aspirin for headaches brought on by a likely rambunctious trio). Thank you, and may Effr (along with Ethan, Arik and Sam) long continue to whisper in your ear and encourage you to write and share more stories of The Farm at Maple Hollow. Tony

Yet again more questions than answers. Hmm, Would Agatha Christie have thrown you off the Orient Express 🚂? Would Sherlock have sent you holmes? Why did Zeke 'agree' to have his mind 'wiped' (again) after he'd wiped Tyler's with the syringe Corey gave him to administer to Tyler? If the point was to erase Tyler's memories of 'The Company', Zeke et al, so that Tyler could have a new life, Zeke as 'owner' didn't need to. Accept we now know Corey (and G?) were hiding from Zeke the fact that his inheritance 💰 is gone 💸. And why is a thoroughly scared to death Wyatt behind 'door #2' 🚪in the hidden sub-basement? So this leaves us 3 chapters from 'The End'? Or is it? Is there going to be an Epilogue (5 years on?) to wrap it all up neat and tidy, or a CLIFF HANGER leading to 'A Promise to Protect, Rebuilding'? Stay tooned?

39.5 fricken weeks? You better start on Book 2 now, so that it's ready by then. You're making War and Peace look like a Reader's Digest condensed novelette.

You said: " So now that it's all written I'm going to sit back and enjoy your reactions. Have fun~ 5 Chapters LEFT!", so where are they? Or like Zeke are you leaving us hanging in wind? Worse than 'cliff hanger' is an author who drags it out. ( makes it harder for readers to decide whether to follow you... Just saying). 😕

In addition to Grandpa Jack finding that in the case of the judge's homophobe son, the rotten apple doesn't fall far from the rotten tree, he's also stumbled upon information that poses a clear and present danger (apologies to Tom) to everyone; from the youngest to the oldest. ⚠️

Relieved that an innocent boy, Levi Foley, was able to escape death at the hands of the Outlaw Bears bikers aided by the evil 'rev' McAllister. The bad guys got what they deserved, but at least Bart Foley, before he was killed, saw his good son escape. Quick action by Elm and Effr putting out the attempt to torch Foley's house provided needed evidence in Timothy's rape and attempted murder. Under MA & Federal 'Victims of Crime*' laws, (because of FBI investigation of the Meth lab), Timothy and Levi could be eligible for part of the money seized (including Cayman bank accounts). That would ensure the boys' future. * FYI "The Victims of Crimes Act (42 U.S. Code Chapter 112), enacted in 1984, authorizes crime victim compensation and assistance to victims of federal and state crimes". * US DoJ

I gave this chapter a 👍 instead of a because its seems like you were like a comedian 'milking' applause. As for "Look at that... no cliff", I think weinerdog hit the nail on the head, and your next chapter begins with a Bang, Thud or Explosion of some kind. Do we think you're getting predictable ... Let's just say many of us 'suspended all belief and reason' if not a few 'Books' ago then certainly with this one. Why do we keep reading? Well, maybe it's for the same reason that people who don't like (ice) hockey, watch the game ... they're waiting for a fight to break out. 😋 Next chapter please.

A perfect end to the day only to be ruined by some (plural because they travel in packs like the rats they are) homophobic jackholes. Unfortunately for them their lives should probably get worse, but if they get neuterred they can't breed MOTS.

This is one giant 'Cluster F**k' that is 'FUBAR'. It's great Zeke finally recognizes. what he truly feels for Tyler, and his own real identity (that he's gay or bi?), but how many times has his memory been wiped? And done so by 'G' who Zeke hired when he inherited the 'Company' as a teen and needed someone he thought he could trust to run it. Time to 'deal' with 'G' but not until his mind and memories are completely and permanently wiped with Zeke present. So before Tyler is supposed to get his memory 'wiped', Zeke leaves Tyler alone in the apartment (in the building) to recovery some more while he goes to purge 'G' and get rid of him. As Zeke leaves, his mind still a little confused over his kisses with Tyler, he 'forgets' his ID / building access card on the counter. After getting washed and dressed, Tyler sees the card and safely makes his escape? 🚪 Hmmm

Good chapter. Sorry about Timothy loosing his leg but thanks to Effr's skills he's alive and on the mend both physically and emotionally, but the latter will take time. With him and Effr moving into Ethan & Arik's old main floor apt on The Farm at Maple Hollow (good title for a book 😉 ) Timothy is on his way to recovery. With Effr's friends in the 'Vet Squad' of 'amps' - Mark, another Tim and Robbie to help him out, and with the prosthetics now available, Timothy will be walking in the near future. Running? Still possible in the long-term, just look at the 'differently abled' participants in the Boston Marathon and Paralympic Games. There could be a 'Rabbit' 🐇 in his future. As for the evil reverend (oxy moron), and the Bikers running the Meth lab? It seems they've got an informant at the police dept. As Donk found, it's gonna hit the fan. Tony

I think it's in your zeal to get it posted they slipped by. Didn't want to unleash the 'Red Pencils'. 😋

I wanted to give this chapter both and 🤞 but had to choose latter in hopes that Timothy survives. What poor young Timothy had to endure in the brutal attack by those (sorry, but 'reasonable' words escape me) homophobic, 'god's messengers', waste-of-skin thugs was bad enough. Hopefully by the grace of a loving God, Effr's skills and Ethan & Arik's ( there's that name mix up again) caring, Timothy survives. Tony

Good intro to the latest from Maple Hollow and nice to seem family connections with reference to Sam, Ethan, Earl and Aric. Is this the permanent spelling of his name? Because in TFMH you kept switching between "Aric' and 'Arik'. There are some spelling, grammar and punctuation errors that caught my 'editor's eye', that slipped by your beta readers or software. While I look forward to the coming chapters, I'm just sad to see the next one apparently start with the loss of Timothy 'Rabbit' Johnson. Hopefully not a youngster.

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Okay this is now officially nuts! Dead. Former dead. Walking dead. Teleporting (physically & mentally) dead. Dreamscape dead. Time travelling dead and undead. Can you liven things up, please? 💀 💀💀💀💀💀 💀💀🙏

I have stuck with you throughout this entire story, and have no good reason not to linger a while longer, in anticipation of what's next. You've left us with threads to pull at and see what unravels. Arik and Ethan's dealing with little 3 year-old Gustin. Getting him healthy and back to where he should be as a toddler, engaging his curiousity about his first 'real' home. Since it's obvious his parents don't have the ability to care and provide for Gus, or themselves, I suspect, being the good people they are, Arik and Ethan would try to help them out. Gus could be the next Sam. Speaking of the San, there's his grown-up life to learn all about. I know as a writer you'll have other story ideas (or manuscripts complete?) waiting to be launched. So in the meantime you could offer some of those 'short?' stories, while 'TFMH -Book 2' continues to formulate. Maybe some R&R at a cottage near water will help? Take care, stay safe. Tony

Hello Frank: Your newest story about Hunter and family 👨‍👨‍👧‍👦 is off to an interesting start. The twins are an absolute delight 🧑‍🤝‍🧑. Nothing attracted my 'editor's eye' or needed a 'red pencil'. As for "I am not American, so I hope you'll forgive me if I get something wrong", not to worry. Other than an obvious "whilst" or "unpacking the lounge room" (you could have called it a 'snug' but didn't), nothing really gave you away as being perhaps a 'cousin' from down under. In fact your earlier referral to 'family room' was spot on. And although a majority of GA readers are probably Americans, authors come from around the world and for me All are welcome. I look forward to coming chapters. I hope you're well and coping with the continuing Covid-19 pandemic (although I think the nature of this horrific beast allows for it to be called a damndemic. Ooh a new word?). In any event, take care, stay safe and well. Tony