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Interesting start of 'The Home', the story of an illegitimate son of fictional King of ? who's 'not recognised' son (as a result of a dalliance) is to banished at the Queen's 'request', not just to a neighbouring European country where his existence could come back to haunt the royals, but to that upstart country America, never to be heard from again. Historical note - last real Holy Roman (Italy) Emperor in 1800, Francis II, dissolved Empire in 1806 , a de facto abdication, to become Emperor Franz I of Austria. He turned Rome over to Napoleon I, who eventually lost his head . Francis II had 12 legitimate offspring. Like many European Kings of that era (all related as cousins, more than 'kissing), he's allegedly had 'son' who survived but was banished to America. So, some basis in truth. Oooooooh. And now, the story gets interesting?

Calvin: All Good Things come to an end, unfortunately even the Chronicles of Lucinius. This very well written story gives hope that when Lucinius passed, that he left instructions for his Freedmen and boys to remain at the villa and free. Unfortunately the real history of Rome tells a different tale. We can only hope that his brother (and Senator) Duccius would do the right thing, and if not him, then his son and successor Junius who spent much of his childhood at the Villa, in the company of other boys who were not treated as slaves and property. Worst case scenario, whoever has to decide must face both Apollo and the Mouth of Truth (Roman Holiday). Hopefully he (it would have been a 'he') does not 'come up short' in handling the estate. Looking forward to the next story Cal. Tony B

Hello Cal:Hope you're well. It took me a little while to get into this story. Not that I don't like history , but too much current history being made got me sidetracked a bit. This is a very good story about what life could have been in Roman times. If only some papyrus scrolls, like those young Lucinius uses to chronicle his life,, survived to this day. We know of some of the inventions (water diversion via aquaducts) the Roman's used. Lucinius, with all of his creativeness, is an early version of another famed inventor from Italy, Da Vinci . Lucinius, with help from his mother and two grandfathers, is proving how narrow-minded his 'father' is . (I suspect he is not his father's son, but only Apollo knows of his mother's prayers). At least his brother Duccius , when he succeeds his father as senator, will remember what Lucinius has shown him, perhaps making life for some slaves better. Looking forward to more of this story. Stay safe. Tony C

I've been following Camp Refuge since the first story. It's name says it all, it's about saving people, whether they know they need saving or not. Now Avery has unwittingly hurt they very person he thought he was helping, by trading his own ADHD drugs for a couple of Oxy for Lee. Unfortunately, the Oxy (may have been cut with Fent) and Avery is on death's door. And Lee, thinking he's killed Avery, is running away - back to the streets. Harlen needs to save Lee. Come on Wayne, save these young boys.

Even as a first draft, this story lays out what brought Kyle to St. Clement, and how at just 17 he's able to exit MD/the U.S. and gain entrance to another country. Short flight time suggests either Canada or possibly EU. How Kyle goes forward? We'll wait and see. BTW, from my Editorial POV , there's a few minor Sp errors and two grammarical ones (that I may address via DM). but so far, looking good DK.

'All good things must come to an end'. Or so the saying goes. While I'm sad to see this story end, it seems as though some of the children have decided to carry it and Brad's vision forward. At least we're brought up to date on how things have improved over 10 years for the children who arrived at Sanctuary and found a 'safe haven'. Some have taken what they've learned and use it to help others. ( Carlos and Maria with Hacienda del Paz in Mexico ). Sadly and unfortunately, some did not find what they really needed the most at Sanctuary and had to 'settle' for less. For children like 8-year old Pat who really need the love only a father (even an adoptive one) can give, and who demonstrated that to Brad in words and deeds on many occasions, he kept being rejected by Brad (no matter how often Brad explained to Pat, and justified to himself that he could not 'chose' a favorite, even if Pat was the first child Brad rescued). In the end, Pat waited 10 long years in quiet desperation (no matter how well he hid it), until he was an 'adult' in the eyes of the court (Brad's father) and changed his last name to Brad's of 'Williams'. Brad also missed the boat in his relationship with Tony . (again Brad's justification seemed acceptable but still...). What's next? Tony C

With all the HAWT men rafting down the 'Hooch', I'm surprised Nash didn't get a case of 'The Vapors', Lord-ee. Plus he was the 'mascot'. As for Todd, between 'Hooch', Julips, and whatever other recreational libations are at hand, I see Todd heading for a fall. But will the others be there to rescue him and set him on the right path? Griffith is going to educate Nash about the 'Ramblin Wreck from Georgia Tech'. The term originally referred to 'mechanized transport' vehicles (would barely qualify as trucks or cars), cobbled together by GT engineers in early 1910-30s and used on Central America Projects as support vehicles. It later referred to the 1914 Model T, that became a 'mascot'. Not to 'sully' any reputations, but the term was (and still is) used to refer to the many well put together young men of GT, using their 'talents' on 'others' (female AND male) on and off campus, and elsewhere, where getting 'wrecked' holds special meaning.

Calvin, lo has vuelto a hacer. ¡Un gran capítulo! Con la adición de Carlos y los otros niños mexicanos / latinos Brad definitivamente va a necesitar la lección de español. Tal vez el detective Diaz le ayude. ¡Sigue escribiendo bien! (okay, I cheated with the translation since I don't speak Spanish, except to order in a restaurant overseas. Here's the English version. ): Calvin, you have done it again. A great chapter! With the addition of Carlos and the other Mexican / Latino children Brad is definitely going to need Spanish (and other language) lessons. Perhaps detective Ruiz will help? Keep up the good writing!

This chapter brought tears to my eyes. The loving, caring acceptance shown by all the guys to Pietro allowed him to deal with all the pain and guilt he was carrying from being a young teen terrified of the feelings he had for other boys. A fear so intense, that had he not been able to finally share his feelings his story might have ended in tragedy. Sam's reaction to Pietro, his empathy in offering to be both a friend and maybe a boyfriend , a first for both boys, showed just how much Sam has learned from his relationship with Ethan and Arik, much to their surprise. A touching coming of age chapter.

WTH? FSELL this chapter was going great, leading us along, families all in town for Lucas and Hailey's wedding. The ceremony getting to the "I do's" and then ... the wheels fell off the bus? No segue? I too had to go back and re-re-read the chapter. I thought you'd had a major FAIL when posting, maybe too many JD's and become a 'Clumsy Ninja' writer! But it worked out in the end (not a pun referencing Jamie and Ben, or did I? ). I'm getting close to the end of 'Jamie - The Journey Begins', but the title suggests hints, foreshadows, at least two more? 'Jamie & Ben - The Journey Continues' and 'Jamie & Ben - Journies with Children'? Hey?

Great chapter. Jamie finally (?) decides where his career future lies with Ben , in the States. Of course by the time they retire after say 25 years as firefighter & EMT they'll only be 55 & 53 respectively. Young enough to retire to OZ (and still work p/t).

Liked the chapter as more things seems to be falling into place, or at least they're heading that way. And then, Brad gets another premonition. I know all too well about premonitions. Sometimes they're good, or at least neutral. Other times they can be bad. Often, they're like a loose thread you keep pulling on. It would seem, even though Tony hasn't 'set in stone' the 'Trust', that initial finances are in good shape, and the seized funds of the evil men (penance) are adding to the surplus. Do what does Tony's visit to review finances portend? A departure? An arrival? Hopefully not a calamity...

Great chapter and a wonderful trip to the zoo. The evolution of Sanctuary shows that Brad isn't monkeying around with his plans for the children and youths. He's bearing down, showing people how children otter be treated, and won't accept any lion. All puns aside, I look forward to more chapters.

I really hope the HVAC (vents, fans and exhausts) in the Cocoons can handle the results of the 'traditional' Irish dinner. Between the boiled cabbage and potatoes, plus the corned beef there will be lots a noises and smells from the pods.

A very good, derailed and revealing chapter Carlos. Ritch(ie) didn't wash out in first month, largely due to his support network of home, family and friends, and I'm sure it will continue, as he adds Will 'Bender' to the list, having been accepted by 'Cap' and César. (I can see 'Bender' being his 'call sign. Ritch's - perhaps he'll reach back and use his late father's call sign, OR, perhaps for fun 'Wingnut'?) As for your, "...not sure if he'll survive 4 years yet." No you don't. I can just hear the mental cogs squeaking (not implying anything other than writer's fatigue. Yeah, that what I meant). No flight / training incidents! No 'down range' oops! Vail ski vacay accidents limited to sprains and bruises, and hurt egos, NO compound anything! (maybe Blue Balls, heh heh). Looking forward to Jan 15th posting. Ps. Some of DoD's Obesity funding should be used for ALL 'Commanders'. Tony B.

Wow! Another great chapter . I had to go back and reread to double-check if I missed some important info. Until Christine's grand tour I'd only pictured four floors, former warehouse and lofts, hence the higher than normal height allowing for creation of A, B and C as mezzanines to 2nd floor as if by magic. (not really, just a clever use of 'headspace'). But now Brad speaks of 11 floors? If that's that case, then there had to be a previous commercial elevator (lift) at least 8' x 8' or larger. Even in 'century old / 1900 era' buildings, that was required. Those building codes required a concrete (block) 'shaft' that when old buildings are retrofitted today, new shaft 'liners' are installed to fit current 'cars' (what elevator 'cabs' are called). Brad's (and Tony's) 'To Do' lists are expanding as Sanctuary does.

Sorry for being 2 years late to the party (so to speak). The food and beverages are gone, but 'Jamie' remains.

No no no no! Sean is dead years ago in a car accident with Jamie. Jamie can't be seeing Sean. That doesn't happen unless he's on the door step to... NO! Save them both!

Small town America of your / our youth, one of courtesies, common sense has vanished as I watch The Capitol being breached. I look forward to more of The Farm, autobiographical or not, and when you decide to wrap this 1st Book, (in another 10+ chapters), that there will be a smooth transition to Book 2. The transfer of ownership / management of The Farm to Sam as the appointed 'heir'.

Noooo . Now Zeke knows Tyler wasn't imagining 'everything', but who else could know Zeke's home number? A rejected former boyfriend using a scrambler to alter his voice? Not likely the person who killed Tyler's family because he'd call Tyler by name. OR, could it be Zeke and Dr. Corey's 'boss' who they don't like, don't trust, and who Zeke fears would "wipe his memory"? Whaaat?? PLEASE post next chapter ASAP

Another interesting chapter. Almost like a guided tour of best parts of Brussels, Paris and Oxford thrown together. Yonatan and Matan's neatly coordinated homes may be heading for a change if Jan's need to be with Tyrese increases, which it will.

On September 17, 2018 at 5:35 PM, Will Hawkins said: Crisps = Potatoe Chips ? All this kerfuffle over a tuber? Apparently only spelled that way, one time, on live TV by a Vice President from Indiana, http://www.bing.com/videos/search?q=YouTube+video+of+VP+Quayle+mispelling+Potatoe&view=detail&mid=B71A050B56039C89C8FFB71A050B56039C89C8FF&FORM=VIRE&PC=RIMBINGD Posted by MartyMcFly As for Will's comment about "old eyes", vision issues occur at all ages, but in this case GA's setup uses smaller fonts for 'comment' section. However Will you can select text and then click on the Tx button in the 'fonts & emoji bar' to increase the size. Hope this helps.

So apparently being a 'dick' = pardon from same? Speaking of 'jewels', Bob has to learn to control his anger, because at some point snap-on tools don't stay attached. Oh, and not for nothing, the littler 'brudder' is a favourite!

GA needs to add either a 'shrug' or a 'm'eh' choice for chapter quick review symbols. Just when you think things are getting better, some bastard throws a curve ball. Bad enough the 'Big Shot' is buying children like Jabir as slaves, but keeping at least one more locked up (caged?) in his basement and fed dog food! Not only should Big Shot be prosecuted to Nth degree, 'persuaded' to provide names of ALL others involved, AND all his assets seized, sold and profits turned over to Sanctuary, authorities should then put him in GenPop so he learns first hand how other prisoners treat child molesters. 2021 only 3 days in and my ire (and BP) up.

Happy New Year Wayne. Glad to see the 'Re-Opening' of Camp Refuge. It's good to see it back at work. We knew it was kept going since we last read it. After all, the need for Refuge and places like it unfortunately hasn't stopped. And due to this Damndemic (invented a new 'polite' word for C-19). It looks like Lee found something 'real' that he's good at - cooking. Maybe that will feed his need to feel worthwhile, not just someone to be used. Avery also looks like he may have found someone to help (and hopefully help him), although we know his complications. Glad you 'pre-packaged', if you will, this latest Camp Refuge book so it is complete and automatically posts weekly. As an editor I've suggested to many authors that they look at 'pre-packaging' as one way (among many) to organize writing. It also frees up the author to work on their next project. (I also suggest to authors, that they write a chapter outline so they don't get caught short if for some reason they're unable to complete a book or need a 'helping hand' to do so. This helps preserve their works for future readers). Looking forward to the weekly installments. Stay safe, 6ft / 2m apart, wash hands frequently, #WearaMask and #GetTheJab.