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The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
And they love nothing more but having more stuff to fix -
The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
They're on it. -
The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
Someone still longs after that toaster, I see... -
The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
He is not a simple human -
The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
The two humans needed to have their moment of triumph! And what a triumph that was... -
The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
You're on to something here... -
The Hour of the Witch
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in The Hour of the Witch
It's a totally valid curse! Jack would say... -
Chapter Twenty-Five – The Healer Danny turned Ryder with his face up and searched it for signs of life. His fingers worked quickly, touching Ryder’s handsome face, then searching for a pulse in the side of the neck as he had seen people do in movies, but the wolfshifter wasn’t moving at all, his stillness pouring ice into Danny’s veins. What if Cassandra had succeeded, after all? In fairytales, all the evil witches died at the end, and the heroes prevailed only to live happily ever after, b
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[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Kaleidoscope... when malfunctioning, it becomes misaligned Alex's ex is important, but not as a person, but as a 'why'. I shut up now. You're a bit on to something in what you're saying about Brad... he doesn't even know what he's doing. And who might you be talking about when you say Alexander is like one of your favorite characters? Could it be... the forever charming Mr. Darcy? -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
I am so hiding them... That's so interesting, about how you see them as a family. I worry at times that the depth of their friendship is not clear for the readers, but I see that I'm getting my point across. While it's fun to write easygoing college kids as characters, I think this version is closer to the truth. It's the age where we still want to impress upon others that we're cool, interesting, witty, knowledgeable, etc. (insert your own choices). So they all perform without being completely truthful. And each of them hurts because of that, but in college, yeah... they weren't ready. And you're asking the right question. Brad reunites them, but why? He just recreated his triangle of a family... or did he? I have a big reveal planned out, but it will come much later. Until then, enjoy getting to know the characters -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Just as I thought, lol. You might lead to charge for smacking some sense into Lyn... -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Wow @Cane23 be aware, you have competition It's so true what you say about Lyn. He's the one with the difficult to bear secret, of his own design, of course, but still. However, he's too caught up in his own head that he fails to see that the others might not have it all 'figured out' as he suspects. Adoration is not love... I agree. Lyn should learn the difference. He doesn't question anything. He thinks things just 'are'. He-he, Alexander is water... I like this. He might turn into solid ground at one point. Just saying. (Lyn is up for grabs for smacking, but he might end up dizzy). -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Oh lol... -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Yet Lyn thinks Alexander tastes like dark chocolate -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Yeah... I think this story is loaded with subtext -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Okay, let's go Hmm, yeah, the male bonding is pretty strong in Alexander and Brad, who act like they don't give a damn, while for Lyn, it's all this big disaster waiting to happen. His friends have nothing to hide, unlike him. (But that's just Lyn's version of the 'truth'.) He doesn't even realize that his denial, his refusal to own up to his own preferences and identity complicates things. Alexander doesn't ask him those questions by accident. He truly wants to know what Lyn thinks, because he realizes something's very wrong there... Patronizing, even a lil' bit humiliating? Yeah, I guess it is, lol. Alexander can be a little petty, although he's too subtle for Lyn to understand what he's seeing. Oh, self-erasure sounds pretty much like Lyn. He's so decided and determined that he's got no chance. He does nothing but retreat, retreat, retreat... He-he, you noticed how the 'sour' was actually 'sweet' That's why I chose passion fruit instead of lime, which Lyn prefers. Not only because it's on the nose - passion fruit - but because that flavor has sweetness, too, just like Alexander. Since I'm working hard to capture these unspoken things between the characters, just imagine me riding 'weeee' all over the moon. Thank you for your analysis, so great, like usual! -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
So true. Also, some readers say... pretty sad for Alexander. -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Tunnel-vision at its finest! Alexander is trying, though... -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Wow, just wow, I have no words -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Thanks a lot! I'm not usually writing love triangles - I usually found them obnoxious - but when I do... these guys must be involved. -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Yes! Correct. Lyn from the past had way too many hang-ups to respond truthfully to a direct attempt at honesty. -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Tell it to Lyn (the past version) and he'll turn livid, fall in denial, and drown although he has no reason to. -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
That's a very good question. They all used to wear armors and masks. -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Yes, he is. Especially since his whole attention is trained on Lyn -
[Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
Laura S. Fox commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in [Memory, Freshman Year, February] – Sharp, Bitter, Sour
He knew everything Or, at least, that's the impression he's giving, right?
