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I'm beginning to wonder where I was July 10th, 2023. Surely I'm not this bad about missing comments... but I've been known to miss them. I noticed I missed one last chapter as well. I also wished I remembered what the hell happened in this chapter. I think this is the chapter that Cindy terrorizes the campers in search for her little man. If so, I think this is the 'second?' time Cindy shows off her protective instincts. I swear I'm going to have to go back and reread my own stuff... I'm not this ditzy senile, surely.
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This is the first time I wrote a character that had a distinctly different, just for themselves sort of hobby that forced me to develop separate dynamics. Writing his original friend group vs. the swimming group. His experiences between the two, the outcomes of both, the plot pressure they both had. It was fun for me to do that. I liked Emily and Jackson's relationship in the writing.
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Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Krista commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Either way, I look forward to it. I know writing in such a way that you have chosen to write this story is low-key a lot more difficult than it looks. Maintaining such a style, punch, wit, and bite within the confines of a themed chapter and continuance of the plot. -
Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Krista commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Oh no... 😮 As long as you don't end up on the same list Wildthing usually ends up on. Mostly me weighing pros vs. cons, and geographical distance vs. motivation, and the possibility of having to convince a jury of my innocence. -
Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Krista commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
"Instagram algorithm in human form," has to be the most modernized veiled form of an insult I have read since, "Well bless your heart." The random TMs were hilarious. Especially the one trademarked for Whore Corps. I don't know if Lex is good for him or a very energetic heavy on the peer-pressure grenade. It will be nice reading through the off-beat, funny, and absurdly biased narration to get to the meat of the story where some of it blows up in his face. -
Sometimes it does take knowing someone and seeing them as human beings walking the earth for it to sink in. I'm sure they knew of others, but at a distance couldn't understand, or lacked the will to. My mother was somewhat like that. She knew gay people most of her life, she was around those circles as she had a wide circle of people around her running a business, all kinds of different people. It took my friends coming around and her knowing they were gay for her to settle her mind on the subject a lot better. She fell in love with the people they are and removed the weight of 'what they are' off their shoulders.
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I was very aware of my own pet peeve when it comes to reading. The quick heel turn of a character, typically the "Morally good, but boring" character in a love triangle. The writer wants the character to choose the smoldering bad boy with a bit of a hard to find heart of gold, so they make the boring, grounded, self-aware good guy do something so out of character heinous that it eclipses all the bad qualities the "bad boy," has in order to finally break that triangle. So, I tried not to do that with Jackson. I wanted him to grow, but I always wanted there to be some evidence of good in him, but also the wild-streak that started the story.
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Yeah, I do remember them clicking quick after the kiss. They became rather dependent on one another, but I never thought it was at an unhealthy level really. It was just different from both their normal existences. A challenge of sorts. If I were Grace and I saw the sudden continued appearance of Luke after knowing Jackson and his other friends, I'd be running thoughts through my head as well, especially after the park restoration completed. I don't know if my mind would go 'there' though, not right off, especially with Jackson's history of running through girls not knowing that he hasn't been sexually active with any of them.
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Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Krista commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in Hi, I'm Gay, and This Is a Cry for Help
Not read a word of this yet, but I just happened upon it because my eyes caught it as a new story. You delivered the hell out of the story blurb all the way down to the chapter title. Now to avoid spoilers, scroll back up and read it. -
That would be how I would explain Lisa Benton, at least so far. I think in chapter one the writing explains that they only went to two services a year. I don't think a person that goes twice a year would feel a push to pick up a bible either, not in any spiritually significant way that would lead to learning. Some people just don't care to listen to reasonable arguments as well. It is obvious when someone is truly listening compared to someone who is just waiting for their chance to counter an argument because their minds are already made up and there will never be enough room in there for anything else...
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Yeah, Luke returned the favor and picked Jackson up this time.
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These early chapters being proud of Jackson was a bit of a rare occurrence, if I'm remembering correctly. I don't know when I made the gradual transition into making him less of a willful spontaneous idiot to someone growing to be a bit deeper. I do remember being a bit worried that I'd go too far either way and it put people off. I find it annoying when characters flip, like flipping a switch. People don't change, especially in dramatic fashion overnight.
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Those scenes were easily some of my most favorite passages of writing I've ever done. I'm glad you got to them.
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Yeah, I remember surprising quite a few people with Luke being the brave one here. I think he needed to be the brave one, because I highly doubted Jackson would take the hint. Still partially being hung up on Allison and thinking he was mostly into girls as it was.
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I can't remember the conversations between him and his mother, but to answer the second part, I'd say Jackson would rough up that bullish idiot pretty good.
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AYC is a bit of a rough-read, grammar/structure/story-wise. I was still very much in the learning phase of writing when it came along. I think my bigger growth in storytelling came with SiS. You may be sick of me by the time you get through Learned to Lie and TBY. I hope not, we'll see. lol
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Thank you for sharing your lived experience, a few of y'all have with me over the years and every time I get a little bit of protective rage. I hate that you suffered trauma and that people felt it okay to inflict that on you. I'm glad you came out the other end of it as well. I tend to look at the words and take them at word value, so it takes a larger sampling size (unless outright told like this) for me to notice anything. (and I struggle to respond to comments such as these, if you didn't notice).
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You're on 7/58 chapters. I hope the slow burn is worth it as well. I want to say their connecting picks up soon, but I can't remember when the pacing starts speeding up to be honest. I do try to read this story for fun, but it is a big commitment for me and most of the time whilst reading, I tend to think of newer ideas and want to start the writing process with those. I am in a bit of a down-time sort of between area with, "Learned to Lie," just needed read/edited, maybe I will try to read this as a fun read.
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I honestly didn't see any of them getting very far before the floor burns on their butt cheeks started anyway... lol, they might have went sliding about a foot or so before the soap failed them. And yeah, a small-town hospital doctor would work tons of hours, and a higher-up manager at a factory likely wouldn't work as many hours as I had Grace working to be fair. She would probably be on the same 40 - 50 (overtime) hour work week as the rest of the factory in a designated shift. But, I wanted to depict them as workaholics.
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Yeah, his parents were a little late in having their "the straw that broke the camel's back" moment with Jackson. I don't know if parenting works in the, "better late than never," theory. At this stage of the story I think the only character people weren't annoyed by was Luke who sat innocently off to the side. I remember this story being such a refreshing take for me to write. I had just came from, "Are You Christian," and, "Standing in Shadows," back when I was silly and wrote multiple stories all in one go and thinking that's a sane thing to do. Christian and Cory were very Luke-ish. Christian was a bit more cheeky, but Cory didn't. Jackson was my getting away character, I really liked writing along and seeing how much patience I pushed with his antics.
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Kind of like puppy's first obedience training?
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Lol, you're taking a different approach to Jackson than a lot of people. I think by chapter three most readers wanted to put Jackson in a permanent time-out corner.
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Yeah, the 'we' is very much intentional, there. The "my house" not so much, but it fits her personality so much that I'll chalk it up to a happy accident. Here in the south, if we live in the dwelling we say, "my house," or "my property" when speaking to someone else. Mind you, the use of it against someone you're in the process of kicking out of it, specifically family, it would be rather an ugly way to state it no matter what.
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Sounds like a horrible combo of adjectives for one to live with.
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Oversight oopsie on my part. I don't think he's slipped his last name into any conversation yet. I can either edit it here, or go back and slip it into chapter 1 and pretend it never happened.
