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This chapter is like all the pieces fitting into place. I like how Sadie commented about Adam’s “friends” didn’t move to SF with him, then she turns around and reveals that she in moving there. She is not only family by association but now she is proving herself his real friend. Artie must me extremely happy.

Great to see a new chapter. This chapter came at a perfect time, and what it had to say was right on. It is so good to see Artie, Adam and Dizzy all united again. No kidding Artie that yours and Dizzies relationship is going to be different after your night together. It can be so much more and I hope that is where Ace is going with this story. Yeah, I hope Ezra heard what Artie said and he stays out of Arties life, better yet, I am so glad that Artie finally saw the truth. Great write Ace.

I had just signed on to ask the question about the story and then I went back and read the comments and lastly I saw your comment about no sequel. Please don’t say “no”. It is ok to say, not at this time I have pk to finish but to think “no” is like a beautiful waterfall drying up and cascading no more. Weddings are the beginning of a time together. Cade needs to get his name changed. Alex and Daniel need to stop moping and get things going. I have a good friend in England who has written 43 books. He has several with sequels. Some stories just need to be told more. Yes this story is long, but with your writing skills, make it a side project and get going on the next book. Speaking of the English author. He had two books in a series and after reading the second book I felt there needed to be another. I wrote him asking if there was a 3rd in the works. Come to think of it, that’s how we met, was through the letters about book 3. He did share with me, there were others asking as well. After several months he wrote me and said he is working on a 3rd. It came out May 2019. When we met in England this past September I asked him about sales. It is turning out to be one of his best sellers and for people who are new to him it is creating sales in book 1 and 2 as well as sales of some of his other books, because he brought some characters from some other books into the new one. You can do it, you have it in you. Think sequel. :-)

I have a question. I just finished reading Johnny Breeze and me in its book form. Is there any difference between the book and what you posted here. I rate the book and this story as one of the best things I have read in a long time. I have been reading your stories posted here for a couple of years. I very much enjoy your writing style. Generally I don’t read stories with lots of sex in them, but you pull it of and make it feel natural.

Late in making a response. I read this right when it came out, but I wanted to wait and see what others had to say before I put down any words. I found myself experiencing all kinds of emotions in this chapter. I was so ticked at Ezra I wanted to yell at him, sure glad Artie finally did. I was overwhelmed with Artie, wake up kid, see what the fuck Ezra is up to. When Artie finally got a voice and spoke his mind I shouted out with joy. A “dad” is not made though sex, it is the man we seek out and respect who is there for us when we need a male’s advice. Adam really is a dad. It was nice seeing Mason have more of a roll in the story. He seems like a real keeper. I remember earlier in the story that Adam was having partner problems. Looks like he may have found his mate in Mason. As far as Dizzy, and earlier comment said something about Dizzy. I just figure he got his nick name for some reason. Great chapter, glad it isn’t the last one. Keep up the great work Ace.

Wow deep Philippe. You might just be right. Time will tell, who knows what Ace has planned for the future in the story. I can see now that Ezra was brain washed by Adams dad and Adam saw the light and escaped. Adam wasn’t lost, he found himself. Ezra is the one who is lost.

Do I actually see Artie beginning to see things for what they really are? I like how Adam has been giving Artie some slack. It will be a lot better if Artie sees what a sleaze his “bio dad” really is. Ezra proved himself even more out of it with no clue to what’s going on when he started giving Artie all the tune up instructions. Best way to drive a kid out of sports, try to make them perfect. Some kids want a high level of perfection, but it has to come from with in them selves. I had to laugh at the line, Adam was lost. He wasn’t lost, he found his true identity. Lucky guy that he found it at 13, or 14. Gave him a great deal of his life to perfect it. I think Adam is doing a fantastic job of raising Artie and the good thing is, Artie really seems to care how Adam feels. I can’t wait for Ezra to say something really stupid about Adam or Dizzy. I wonder how Artie will react. I am happy that Artie is finding his own real identity and if he is strong he will stay on the path of his real identity. Living a lie is hell.

This is so long after your original writing, you may wonder why I am just now writing a comment. I am going back through all the past comments looking at all of them. When the laws were written for the Jews the intention was to populate the area with people. If you look at many of the laws they were to create respect for God, but some of them were simply for survival. Eating pork, could give you worm, you would die, produce no kids. Same is true with sea food and other things. Just so happens the laws about homosexuals were in that same light. Gay sex does not produce kids. The punishment associated with gay sex was meant to be so it would discourage most people from even thinking about it. Please note, I am saying gay sex. There were gays, just don't have sex. In the book of Romans, Paul writes about gay sex. Again a bit of history is good to understand what Paul was getting at. Paul was a citizen of Rome, the rulers in that city would battle with other civilizations and bring back the beautiful boys and have sex with them. Even in this day and age, having sex with boys is not acceptable. Again Paul was writing about the act of homosexual sex and he was writing that letter to Rome. You can ask most Christians and they will agree that the important things in life are discussed in the Bible. Another comment you may hear is if it is not discusses in the scriptures it is not important. That very statement is interesting to me. The first 4 books of the bible are the story of Jesus. The subject of homosexuality is not mentioned in any of them. Seems as if homosexuality was not important to the son of god. Instead he instructed us to love one another as we would love ourselves and do unto others as you would want them them to do to you.

There were so emotions expressed in this chapter my head is in a spin. That speech by Ezra when Dizzy headed to the bathroom turned my stomach. I don’t like adults brain washing kids. Sadie has it right, the devil is not the demon depicted in cartoons, he is a smooth speaker like Ezra. The way Ezra reacted to Dizzy and his art hurt, his reaction to Dizzy staying over night. All those things are strikes against him. He is not supporting Artie, he wants to dictate Artie’s life. His who attitude towards San Francisco shows his narrow point of view. I agree with Artie, I like the variety one can find in San Francisco. I have been to both San Francisco and Dallas. I love the city by the bay. It will be interesting to see where this story goes. I really wish Artie had invited Adam to the pic nic. Then again maybe Ezra will show even more of his real self and Artie will get to see the evil that lurks within.

Interesting. Nice to see a new posting from you. I like that you try all kinds of writing styles.

Wow, reading over the comments I am not sure there is much I can add. Ezra is a creep, wonder what he is really up to? Now that he has heard that Artie is gay, is he hoping to do some conversion therapy on him? I keep wondering if Ezra and Adam had a sexual history and if Ezra got slighted and is now trying to get back at Adam. There really is something going on. I really do wish Artie would reach out to others a bit more. He is carrying around way too much garbage in his head, that he could do a lot of cleaning out, just by confiding in his friends and Adam. I feel really bad that Adam feels like he is failing. I feel like Artie did some to help Adam feel better. I wonder where my head was and that I never saw the Adam/Dizzy connection. For sure Dizzy needs a positive male role model and Adam is providing it. I can also see how both Adam and Dizzy stand to loose a lot if Artie doesn’t get his head screwed on correctly and see Ezra for the sleaze bag he is. Can’t wait to see where things go, I HOPE they are positive.

What you say are all true about SF. On behalf of a great story I find I am willing to let some things slide just because it makes for a great story to allow them. Here is a possibility. Adam’s partners folks own the property and are more interested in their daughter and good friend having a successful business then lining their own pockets.

I like your thinking and it dawned on me. The next time Ezra meets up with Artie will be at the game and it is likely Arties support team will be there. 😊

I enjoy reading, and I really enjoy reading stories by this author. It is my opinion that this chapter is some of his best ever writing. There were so many emotions and so much feeling. Dizzy’s joy over donuts, Arties confusion over the same, the continued conflicting feelings over Ezra, expressed by all. The near relationship ending conversation between Artie and Dizzy and the feelings that Mason has for Adam. A true emotional roller coaster. Very well written and a can’t put it down chapter.

I so hope your not right. I have been enjoying this story and don’t want to see it come to an end any time soon. Ezra for sure is a 50 percent part of who Artie is, his story needs to be played out, but there is so much more that can be told. I know the story is about Artie, but there is Adam too. Where do things go with Artie and Dizzy? I hope to see many more chapters before we move on to the next excellent story that @aceinthehole writes.

Excellent chapter, after reading it though I have one concern. If Artie has had problems with his concentration at the ball games, having just talked to his bio, how in the hell is he going to be with Ezra there? They want to win the last two games as well as have fun, as Jose put it. Artie is going to end up hyperventilating trying to use the breathing exercise Jose showed him.

I enjoy your style of writing, it is very direct. Your a good story teller. Glad you came up with a new story so quickly. This one has a lot of potential. We know Matt’s dad beats on him, but don’t really have any idea why. I am sure that will come out in future chapters. I look forward to following this story. The two boys have been close since birth. Hope that both can become even closer. There are often can be right times to break a promise. When the life and well being of a friend is at risk, it is best to open up and do what you can to save their life. Eddie would feel 10 times worse if his keeping the secret would result in the death of Matt. Eddie would never forgive himself. He did the right thing, now I hope dad does the right thing.

I recently witnessed something that left me confused at first. The grandparents of a boy seemed to be less interested in their name sake then the grandchild of another family member. I discussed it with a friend and the answer was “blood” The namesake grandchild is adopted, the other grandson that does not carry the family name is not adopted. That experience helps me better understand what’s going on in Arties head. It’s blood. Maybe their can be a relationship, maybe not, but the effort needs to be made seeing as that Ezra reached out. I just hope that Adam remains supportive and that Artie keeps his eyes open. The conversation between Adam and Artie was heated but neither created barriers. It seems that the morning after reactions were positive.

With all the things going on in Arties life it is no wonder his ball game is off. It was great that Jose reached out to him. Life has its troubling moments. I think it is amazing that Artie has rebounded so well from his mother’s death. I don’t see him using any who are in his life now as an emotional crutch. He still thinks about her and misses her, and those around him seem to be the support we all need in our regular lives. Very mature young man. I hope he will take Jose up on the breathing exercise. Sometimes things pile up and we need a way to get our body settled back down. I know many professional athletes have their get in the game groove meditation time. It is time for Artie to add some skills to his coping bag. I know this is just a story but I find that @Aceinthehole is doing such a great job of writing, I have to sit back and “think happy thoughts” to cope with some of the things brought up in the story. Artie has so much on his plate, it is great that Jose saw it and reached out.

With out trying to be critical, I think sometimes we equate material things with a better life. It seems to me that Artie's mom did a fantastic job with what she had. There is also the possibility she did not want Ezra to get the idea he could buy his way in. The last part is only conjecture with no evidence. I appreciated how Artie challenged Ezra about his money bragging, shows that he was not brought up with a material mind.

Good point, I started reading stories on here because of spending way too much money on the pay to read sites. I found most of the authors here below my reading standard. ( I know snobbish, sorry). When I ran across aceinthehole I was astonished. Here is a really good writer. I may need to re-phrase my question. Do you agree that he writes at a quality level that the public outside this forum would read his work? I do know of another author who writes both here and publishes on Amazon. He has commented that he likes the comments here, he considers all the GA readers as his editors. I appreciate your feed back to my question. I will have to check on, if Amazon requires not publishing anywhere else.

I know this is like cheating but I have waited to make any comment on this chapter until others had commented. I wanted to see how others felt, in order to confirm my own opinion or have my opinion changed by the insights of someone else. I am not swayed by others that much, but still I like to stop and listen, read in this case, and find out what others think. Here is my opinion. I think that all us readers are very fortunate to have a gifted author like Aceinthehole writing for us. I feel that the pacing has been close to perfect. Though I would like to see a bit more change of scenery, lots of living room conversations, I am not turned off by it. I read a lot, I don’t read the “check stand books”. I have read all the classics, even have gone so far as reading the original Robin Hood in its original language. I have read the best seller books and authors. The bottom line for me at least is, I know good writing. I know I am not an author and I am saying aceinthehole is a very good writer. This story is excellent. The presentation is excellent. The pacing is near perfect. I could go on and on. I would hope that when this story is finished, that this story move on to a greater audience. Say, Kindle books. I think I will create an opinion pole here. I wonder how other readers feel? Speaking of pacing, I hope this story does not rush to a conclusion. It is moving along just fine. I look forward to every posting and want them to keep going. I understand that there is more to a person’s life then just sitting down and writing but I am sure glad that aceinthehole has had the time to write so we have something to read and enjoy. Great story, loving it, now what do you think about encouraging the author to post in Kindle or Apple Books?

Great to see a new chapter. It feels like visiting relatives who live a distance away and you don’t get to see them very often. You could tell that life was going on while we were away so it was great to get caught up again. I could not imagine that Colleen did not like Artie. In fact I would have a hard time imagining any one not liking Artie. It is good they got it worked out. Of course Dizzy deals with the issue by blurting it out to his mom when he gets home. I had never thought about Adam at work, yes he is pretty lazy at home. Now his home behavior makes better sense. He wears himself out at work. I am like one of the other people here, who wrote. I am not sure about the need for “closure”, with his biological day. Maybe information or knowledge but not sure what Artie is thinking. It will be interesting to see where it all goes. Another thing I thought was really good in this chapter was Artie and Dizzy having a good open conversation about their relationship. I have found those kinds of discussions keep a relationship alive. I could see that Dizzy was getting a bit frustrated. He has had other relationships but this is Arties first. It was good to discuss. Great chapter.

I was kind of thinking when I read this, that the difference between people who live a youthful life and those who grow old with time, is what do you do about the memories. Do you set them off as something in the past or do you dwell on them or do you bring them into the present every once in a while. I know that we learn that somethings are not real, tooth fairy and easter bunny, but it does not mean we can not live in the joy they brought us. Life is what you make of it. Act youthfully and you will stay young. Act old and well you become old. That was very enjoyable to read, thank you for posting it.

You did it right DK. The ending was perfect. It actually leaves you and opening for an update if you have the time or desire in the future. As it is the story ended on an upbeat and that feels great. You have a real master piece here. Very clever writing and very enjoyable to read. Thanks for taking all the time it does to write so those of us who enjoy reading, have something to read, that is very entertaining.