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I assume, AC, that you are referring to this checklist:- Taking them one at a time.... Fail to include elements of nature and the season? Nature was included (the fish) - but no seasonal reference. Fall short or go over on the syllable counts? Yes. It was 5-7-6 Present a “me” or “I” POV? No such POV was presented. Revert to disjointed “haiku-speak”, or make lines just for the length and pay no attention to flow, grammar or logic? I don't think I did, but see my answer to the final question in this list. Make hard stops at the end of each line? Assuming that you mean full stops (periods), no I didn't. I did include a tilde (~) at the end of the second line in an attempt to signal a change to come (the change from stillness to movement to spear the fish). Treat the poem as a bunch of stand-alone lines and not a stanza? Not deliberately, but I can see how the three lines by themselves could be conceived as stand-alone lines... However, I should point out that what I wrote was intended to be a continuation of the following (which I did quote in the post before my three lines):- Read as such my three lines are no longer stand-alone lines, and the inclusion of the heron (from Tim's original three lines) at least brings an element of nature into the piece, although I do admit that there is still no seasonal reference. To be honest, I don't think I was even really trying to write haiku when I wrote the lines, although haiku may have been in my subconscious mind at the time. Had I actually been attempting a haiku using Tim's piece with the heron as a prompt, I would probably have come up with something like this:- Motionless heron seeing under the surface drops head and spears fish. And then I would probably have got annoyed with myself because there was no seasonal word in it, deleted it, and written about a frog catching a mayfly with its tongue! 😅

I am interested but, as it's after 2 a.m. here, I'll leave it until tomorrow. (watch this space) 😉

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I suppose that depends on how someone actually pronounces a word. Some might pronounce batallions as bat-tal-i-ons (4 syllables) whereas others might say it more like bat-tal-yons (only 3). Not that it really matters, but it may have relevance to how westerners (non-Japanese speakers) view the writing of haiku.... The five-seven-five rule comes from the fact that Japanese haiku is traditionally written in three parts, the first with five sounds, then seven sounds, and finally another five sounds. Bear in mind, however, that a sound in Japanese is not the same as a syllable in English. For example, the English word “sign” only consists of one syllable, but I understand that to the Japanese ear it would actually be heard as three sounds (roughly: “se-eye-en”). Because of this, a seventeen syllable Western haiku would normally be longer than a seventeen sound Japanese haiku. Also, because of this distinction between Japanese sounds and Western syllables, some western haiku writers argue that the 5-7-5 rule should not be taken literally. More important, they reckon, would be short-longer-short format. I suppose the decision is ultimately up to the poet...

Love them! They all have a Zen like quality to me. I particularly like the flower baskets one - although I might have used something like bringing glorious colour as its second line... (some haiku warriors might complain that this one has no seasonal reference to it - but, as the father of haiku himself, Matsuo Basho, reportedly once said "Learn the rules, so that you can break the rules.") I really like the snowdrops one as well. And I don't give a toss about the fact that the final line may have one more syllable than it should have. But they're all good. You're doing what Basho himself did. His haikus were about what he was observing during his life. It doesn't matter that you are surrounded by "concrete and glass, wind and rain, traffic and honking horns...with a little green thrown in"- you've just shown there's still a lot in your everyday surroundings to speak to your inner poet.

... still as a statue watching pond water's surface ~ sudden dart spears a fish

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