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Thank you for the recent flurry of comments on Lone Wolf Ranch which have prompted me to re-read this story - looking forward to its continuation in whatever form takes the Author's fancy.
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Chapter 1 - paragraph 2 - The clairvoyant had been clear: this tower belonged to his fated mate, and he lived on the top of it, like a king among humans, superior in every way. Underline added for emphasis - Ryder is trying to get into Pembroke tower - but Danny (aka Average Joe) may still be superior in every way?
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My grandfather served in Gallipoli and Palestine and survived, his younger brother served in France and did not - missing presumed dead - his name is inscribed on the Australian War Memorial at Villers Bretonneux - I understand the Commonwealth War Graves Commission cares for graves and cemeteries in 2945 locations across France
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So many unknowns - how large is the planet - how large is the moon - how close - does it rotate - is it like our "special case of tidal locking called synchronous rotation" (internet search - no prior knowledge) - 10 days to orbit - dragging the sea with it - would the moon be visible at all when all the water has been dragged to the other "side" of the planet (or wherever it goes) - just asking I suppose a diagram would be like a ten pointed star with a cone of influence from the moon to the planet - animated 3D?
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From earlier points in the story it is evident that the great force of the roaming sea would not only wipe away any markers left by earlier vanguards but also continually reshape the bottom, moving loose material around, creating new hills and valleys, wearing away at old rock so that even those massive outcrops do not look the same - which is why the compass is so important - are there not other stars in the night sky to guide them?
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This is my second reading of this story - back again to respond to each chapter - and maybe comment
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It has been quite a while since I read any of the Pern stories - I have just 9 of the first ten in the order written - [1] Dragonflight (1968), [2] Dragonquest (1971), [3] Dragonsong (1976), [4] Dragonsinger: Harper of Pern (1977), [5] The Smallest Dragonboy, in: Get Off The Unicorn (1977), [6] The White Dragon (1978), [7] Dragondrums (1979), [8] Moreta: Dragonlady Of Pern (1983), [10] Dragonsdawn (1988) - paperbacks on the bookshelf behind me as I type - this story builds dramatically as the threat of Thread becomes more evident, and then more devastating - the human and dragon toll in fighting during this Pass is emotional at the end - all through the eyes of a somewhat reluctant rider finding his place and his love - thank you for writing
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In chapter 2 there is reference to a Seamount seen on the sonar - a large grey lump - that took some time for their ship to pass over - of interest because the orx often feed near them. What else is known? Bzup-kind could be living undetected in such?
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Old Earth, as we know it, is approx 70% ocean too
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Referring to Marksman, Nico says "Phew. I've been playing this game for a long time, and I've never seen anything quite like this. Must have been some great new stuff in the last update." Who on Benteen has time to write this new code, develop these new places and creatures? Is it just a game, are "they" monitoring when Jem saves Nico?
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New Australia - ironic, given history of colonial occupation without consideration of original inhabitants or seeking to understand their land management methods - on a planet with a very different climate!
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Sent some images to R.Eric in 2021 for the flag (in different proportions 2:1, 3:2, 4:3, 1:1) and for the ring (with Latin motto) - but the dragon needed more work - now updated for the year of the dragon - see Makarovia Gallery >
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I think that the Aeras Kingdom Orphanage "managed by Prince Kleopas" (or named for him?) would be a reference to Prince Leon's father (not his son) - not that there is yet anything in this story to accurately align with The Prince and His Royal Guard except that the "Anastasia Grand Hotel" (named for his mother), was opened by Prince Leon before he became Crown Prince.
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Like Chapter headings - the music adds another layer to the story - if only all such misunderstandings were so easily resolved? Chris appears very attuned to Caleb - that he would like Rachmaninov - and I think the flow of this piece is Caleb swimming back up out of ocean depths? The third movement performed by the London Symphony Orchestra conducted by Andre Previn is on YouTube - But what would Caleb compose for Chris to celebrate a winning goal? Music for the lows and highs of a football game?
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A Spy In The Land of Canaan
dbonarz commented on Sean J Halford's story chapter in A Spy In The Land of Canaan
I like the chapter titles - another layer to consider (in relation to Caleb as explained above) Surely Canaan is the promised land - a glimpse of the future - that only 2 of the 12 spies were confident about entering - Caleb (son of Jephunneh) and Joshua (Hoshea son of Nun) - see Numbers chapter 13
