I actually pick things up the same way you do when I re-read them. If Matt wasn't emotionally linked to Wade, the two of them would represent perfect contrasts to illustrate what you're saying.
March 12, 2004
Malibu, CA
Will
“I hope we didn’t screw up all your plans for this trip,” Marie said sympathetically. She’d called me last night and told me that Bongo and his girlfriend, plus Mike and a friend were coming along. John had also latched onto some new girl at Menlo named Brittany, and he was bringing her with him. With those people in addition to me, Travis, Crawford, Sierra, Marie, Ryan, and John, we were tapping out on rooms.
“It’s fine,” I said.
Sex as recreation cheapens the act: You are generalizing here.
and becoming unable to curb your libido costs relationships: That's not a libido issue, it's a relationship issue..meaning how the relationship handles sex drive issues and libido size.
It is the chief cause most relationships end: Silly Republican, everyone knows that the leading cause of breakups is money. 😀
I have some good news and some bad news for you all. The bad news first. There probably won't be a chapter update for at least six weeks, probably two months. The good news? I'm putting off writing more until I get back from vacation. I'm going to England this summer, and even plan to spend some time in Portsmouth seeing the HMS Victory. That should inspire me.
I almost think it would be hard to change the minds of those who like Zach because he hasn't really changed. What he did to Travis is basically the same thing he did to the dentist in Claremont.
Zach is more complex than that, and as I mentioned above, I don't think he's changed all that much.
In case you're curious, most of the chapters in this story were about 5000 words long. If you look at the word counts for the revised chapters, you can tell which ones have changed the most by looking at the higher word counts.