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Seeing that Jake has finally, and convincingly I might add, become unfurled, I suppose it seems only fair that Jordan move him into the next crisis. There must be plot, you know. For me, Ryan has become the star-stud of the story. <sigh> I often fall for the straight guy. Him and Chole....that's fantastic! Well, for now it is. With Ryan being a self-admitted asshole, well at least in the "boyfriend" department, and with Chole not really into being a girl, things between them will go awry. That's a given. Will their new relationship recover? Will our threesome survive as friends? The dynamics are really changing here. Maybe we'll have a foursome as in two couples: Jake & Shane and Ryan & Chole??? :wacko: Jordan, you've set all this up rather nicely!

Really nice, hashbrown! Nice imagery, except maybe for "chambers of my stomach"...some sort of acid reflux thing going on there. Some nice sounds...trackless train....parentless puppy. Using Christ as a metaphor for "lost cause" and "misguided direction" was superb...very thought provoking. My favourite stanza... So sweet!

So what you're saying is lugh moved you to write about tears and fear! Cheer up, Kia, stop talking to lugh. Joking aside, I like your poems. 2 minutes? :wacko: I'm envious. Yes, do write more.

So, you call this an interesting twist, do you? Tell that to JP! A slight understatement, I must say. More like "twister" - you know, that interesting breeze that got Dorothy out of Kanas for a while. So if Bill Hendrickson were to have a nickname, it would be Billy "Spread-my-seed-far-and-wide" Hendrickson! Billy obviously never learned how to wrap his whopper. The first question that comes to mind is why didn't Brian's mom slap a paternity suit on Bill? The man had money and no doubt would have paid up, if only to avoid a scandal. I'm glad that JP wants to acknowledge his brother and come out of the closet over all this. Secrets always suck, I say. I believe JP's "kids" should know. When it comes to being a bastard, shame is the real killer I really enjoy having Brad in this story.

Well aren't you the clever one! Just remember, Rilbur, before the fall, pride goeth first...or something like that. I am enjoying this story immensely. It's just so satisfying. I'm not one for trying to discover what the writer is up to. I enjoy being surprised. I even enjoy being tricked. That sort of manoeuver just tends to engage me even more in the story. When I'm engaged like this, it's like I become totally submissive to the writer's whims. Kinky, eh? The real world totally needs Guardians. Chapter 11, the "Scotty Chapter" was excellent! The closing dialogue between Jason and Ashley was just so cool.

Authors can't resist using the cliffhanger. It's like a cookis jar to them, full to the brim with their favourite cookie. It starts off with, "I'll just take one." But it's the beginning of the end. Yes, there's guilt and remorse from the author, especially for that first one. Some authors feel so bad, they post the next chapter sooner than they had planned. Yes, the road to hell is paved with good intentions. It's not long before the craving for sweetness returns. Another cliffhaner appears, this one more insidious than the first. And on it goes, the sweetness becoming a drug, the author no longer in control. It's sad really. Jordan was such a cool dude.

Give it a rest, old bob. Howie's taking his story to Nifty. You win. The membership here at GA is seriously in your debt.

This is a clue, right? I don't get it. ...and my head is hurting again. :wacko:

If we're going to get into personal views on what constitutes pornography, erotica, artistic merit and the like, then let's move this thread to the Soapbox. The question posed was a simple one: I have a story that has explicit sexual content, can I post it here? The bottom line, for me at least, is that the GA management team has done an excellent job in managing the "content" of stories published on the this site for several years now. Let's just let them continue to do their job.

Before making a judgement, I want to know if the sex was consensual and safe. Did you ever hear the one about the Great Dane and his scantily clad mistress? The folks at Sesame Street can now add a new verse to their song, "People in our Neighbourhood".

Ok, Nephylim, tell us what you really think! Sounds like you've spent some time in the trenches. I don't see Maslow's hierarchy of needs as "truth". It's simply one model for understanding human behaviour. There are a multitude of such models. Some will work for us, others won't. In my view, a model that works is one that causes you to act. It helps to have a goal in mind. Asking esoteric questions such as, "Who am I?" are not really helpful. It's just a lot of belly button gazing. Who we are lies in how we act. Plain and simple. There are for more useful questions to ask. Like, "What makes me happy?" Too many of us spend our time reacting. Even more of us spend our time standing still. Fear is the killer. I accept that there's darkness within me. Me and the seven deadly sins are not strangers. Sock it to me, Lust! However, I have no intention of embracing it. My goal is to do good. To forgive myself (quickly) when I mess up and get back to doing good. I like to spend a good chunk of time being "wild". It's good for my soul. It's energizing. Wildness, of course, comes in many forms. I don't think "self-actualization" is ever achieved. It's a moving target. If you actually get there, then what would you do?

I think the best approach would be to PM the story to me and I'll make the call. Another approach would be to post the story and see if you get warned or banned. Ok, scratch those ideas. Write Joe (JSmith), the admin dude, he's reasonable and really hunky.

Seeing that Nick hasn't started a subforum for this story...yet...this will tide us over. As Nick mentioned in his announcement, Staying Together is the "long awaited" sequel to Staking My Claim and My Jump Off. Phillip's in charge this time around, well, at least, chapter 1 is told by Phillip. I've been wanting this for so long now. Chapter 1 is great. Nick, you haven't lost the touch!

That was a happy chapter. I believe the burden of proof carried by the prosection in any criminal proceeding is "beyond a reasonable doubt". "Beyond the shadow of a doubt" would simply be too onerous. The same standard exists here in Canada. Who should I bill for this legal opinion?

Just read all 14 chapters over the last few days. Really a great story, James! It's so real, it's scary!! Ok, so why do the terroists always come into the USA from Canada? We know what terrorists look like. They ride camels, right? I'm not overly techy, so thanks for making all the technical stuff understandable. You've also done a great job of addressing the taking of human life by the boys.

While brave, Eric's rescue mission seems rather foolhardy. What's really sad though is that Jim, Linda and the Private are already dead. Only the nukes remain to be be rescued. Jerry will not part with the nukes; that's a given. The only possibility I see here for any success would be Jerry's men, who aren't overly loyal to begin with, deciding that Jerry's not worth it anymore and hand over the nukes. Maybe even hand over Jerry. They would still have the plane for a possible escape. Maybe Jerry's men will dig a big hole, fill it with ash, and then kick Jerry in the ash-hole. I'm sorry, the devil made me say that. When Eric said, "Tell Jansen that I love him...." I melted.

I have, but that was back in the bad old days when there was light and dark. It was alledged that I was rude to someone. They don't supply lawyers around here, only jailors and probation officers. You're right, though, it works.

Steve's in a Calgary hospital. I must say that "gunshot and stabbing wounds" does seem odd. There certainly hasn't been anything like that in the news. If the Calgary Stampede is on, that may explain it. Chuck wagon races can get ugly quickly. No one gets shot or stabbed though. Maybe someone was making a movie in the hospital's OR that takes place in Detroit. :wacko:

Happy B-Day, Steve!!!

Sweet, sweet chapter. I haven't been to Alaska, so I'll settle for this beautiful magical chapter. One of the most moving chapters so far. You do "wounded" better than anyone. So, Duncan, I'm no longer interested in how the light gets in. I want to know when the lights gets in.

I actually enjoyed Jake's meanderings over his "condition" this chapter. Simply because he was moving forward with all his thoughts in terms of realizing more about himself and moving straight to acceptance instead of the usual circuitous route he usually takes. He's finally gotten to the fun part and is thoroughly enjoying it. Not only that, but his response to Colin, when he suddenly realized that it had been Collin who had messed up Shane's life, was just unbelieveable. To have that kind of compassion for someone you "hate" and with good reason....well, it approaches saintly. I would not have been so generous. I am so totally proud of Ryan! He rocks! He and Jake are not only in a different place, but in a better place. When Ryan came out with his "proposal", I damn near died from laughing.

So one of the yuks (as in yuk-yuk funny) in the story is a reference to "coming together". It reminded me (for some strange reason ) of one of Robin Williams' stand-up routines (the one he did for HBO several years ago. He does a take off on the pairs skating event and suggests that there should be "sex olympics". Really hilarious stuff, let me tell you! So, right, where am I? :wacko: Oh yeah. For the sex olympics there would also be the "simultaneous orgasms" event. This event would have 6 categories - sprint and marathon with 2, 3 and 4 participants. Yes, there would also be different "classes" - straight, gay, lesbian and then maybe permutations of that. Before I get warned, I'm going to leave off there.

Good one, Paya! I was asleep at the switch on that one. Some great humour in that chapter, Mark! Yes, Darius might well become a lawyer. That was brilliant!

And now we have Quentin. Interesting character. Hitman at 12. Wouldn't it be ironic to bring him and Lara together...as in relationship. Probably won't happen. Anyways, Lara is a ballbuster...I still like her, though. I'm waiting for the chapter where all the sexual tension that is building up between Ronan and Jason bursts forth...as it were. It's going to be scary...and messy. Time to bust the pimp! :2hands:

Chapter 9 was huge. Both in size and content. I liked the way Jason stared down Ronan in the early part of that chapter. "Sit!"