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  • 06/10/2014
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Walking Through Darkness - 1. Trying to be Me

Thank you so much @Mikiesboy for helping edit my poem, you made a good poem into something even better, :hug:

Don't call me an abomination Don't tell me I don't belong Don't tell me That I'm worthless or I live my life all wrong

Don't judge me for who you think I am Don't tell me who I should be. I'm just trying to live my life, I'm just trying to be me.

I didn't wake up one morning choosing this path that I'm now on, I wouldn't have chosen a path with all this ridicule and hate. This is the way I was born, I'm happy with who I am- why can't you love me for that, instead of hating who I'll always be

The choice was made for me before I was born, yet you still blame me though I've done nothing wrong. I will not apologize, for there is nothing to be sorry for.

Don't tell me that I'm or that I don't belong Don't tell me I'm not the same as everyone else, I'm just trying to live my life, I'm just trying to be Me.

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nostic

Hello. I hope you find the feedback you wan here.

I'm no poet, nor have I any clue regarding poetry, and I'm supposed to "not" be brutally honest which puts me in quite a predicament :P....Alas, I gotta be honest. It touched me deep down, hitting a nerve or two.

I liked how you put words together reasoning in a nice way that people have to accept you the way you are. Good job. However, it was too neat, too grammatical, too much in the right order that, well, looked like a short prose to me.

Still keep on writing. :)

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C J

I'm not a poetry critic, so I can't really say much about any poem as far as is it a good one or not, but I liked this one, because it's expressing true feelings and it makes sense. I would keep on with poems, and read other poems, so you can get more comfortable with the process. Poems, I think, are a way to say something that adds some emotion to the subject. Using words in unusual ways, so the reader has a unique picture of the situation. If you keep doing it you'll get very good at it, and your poems will become recognizable as yours. I think you should do more, especially if you enjoyed doing this one.

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1brokNangel
On 06/11/2014 01:18 AM, nostic said:
Hello. I hope you find the feedback you wan here.

I'm no poet, nor have I any clue regarding poetry, and I'm supposed to "not" be brutally honest which puts me in quite a predicament :P....Alas, I gotta be honest. It touched me deep down, hitting a nerve or two.

I liked how you put words together reasoning in a nice way that people have to accept you the way you are. Good job. However, it was too neat, too grammatical, too much in the right order that, well, looked like a short prose to me.

Still keep on writing. :)

Thank you , and yes I want people to be honest , be brutal if necessary , that is what I'm looking for .

I'm glad that you were touched by it , in a good way of course...

I have never been told that I was too neat or too grammatical is that good or bad :/ ?? I hope that some of my other poems are received well BC they are pretty dark maybe somewhat intense.

Thank you for taking the time to read and to comment I really appreciate it

1brokNangel
On 06/11/2014 02:01 AM, C J said:
I'm not a poetry critic, so I can't really say much about any poem as far as is it a good one or not, but I liked this one, because it's expressing true feelings and it makes sense. I would keep on with poems, and read other poems, so you can get more comfortable with the process. Poems, I think, are a way to say something that adds some emotion to the subject. Using words in unusual ways, so the reader has a unique picture of the situation. If you keep doing it you'll get very good at it, and your poems will become recognizable as yours. I think you should do more, especially if you enjoyed doing this one.
I don't think you have to be a poetry critic to tell whether you like a poem or not , I'm very glad that you liked mine though

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment I do appreciate all feedback..

Some of the next few poems are going to be somewhat dark and intense I hope you will continue reading and let me know what you think

1brokNangel
On 06/11/2014 02:12 AM, aditus said:
Your message was clear as daylight, I can relate. Personally I like my poems messy, flighty, with turns and breaks, and words dancing around so I have to think 'Huh?' but that is just me. I am not a poet. I don't follow my own rules either. ;)
Thank you for taking the time to read and leave a comment , with my poems its more about my feelings and there is never really any kind of flow that I follow if it sounds good in my head then I write it down if it doesn't look good in the end I change it.

I appreciate all feedback :)

1brokNangel
On 06/11/2014 03:42 AM, Suvitar said:
Yours is the first poem I´ve read here ;) I liked it but also found it very sad. World can be a very tough and cruel place filled with ignorant people. Wish no-one had to deal with all that.
I feel very honored that my poem was the first on here that you have read , I wish that we could end the ignorance and closed-mindedness of people , but people are always going to find something to hold against someone

Only in a perfect world would everyone get along THATS the world I would love to live in but that is just a fantasy that is never going to exist. :(

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

Lisa

Wow, Angel. That was some poem. I think you should copy it and labor and delivery room nurses should hand it out to every new parent out there. Or better yet, put them in mailboxes across the world.

 

If these stupid people (such as the idiotic people in Texas who are reinstating those asinine "gay camps" - can you even be more ignorant than they are??), actually read this poem and really thought about it, they may think differently about their ridiculous ideas.

 

I thought it was terrific and very honest.

 

Angel, I hope that one day you won't be broken anymore and your new name will be 1HAPPYANGEL.

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On 06/11/2014 07:07 AM, Lisa said:
Wow, Angel. That was some poem. I think you should copy it and labor and delivery room nurses should hand it out to every new parent out there. Or better yet, put them in mailboxes across the world.

 

If these stupid people (such as the idiotic people in Texas who are reinstating those asinine "gay camps" - can you even be more ignorant than they are??), actually read this poem and really thought about it, they may think differently about their ridiculous ideas.

 

I thought it was terrific and very honest.

 

Angel, I hope that one day you won't be broken anymore and your new name will be 1HAPPYANGEL.

:D OMG !!!thank you so much Lisa for that comment very happy that you liked it I wish more people could read it ( the idiots of the world that is ) and become more enlightened and understanding to their children and others around them I think this world and the people living here would be way more happy than they are now

but it takes baby steps hopefully more people will open their hearts and minds and accept that which was never meant to be changed and allow people to be who they are without bashing them and making them feel worthless

Thank you I REALLY appreciate you taking the time to read and comment....

1brokNangel
On 06/12/2014 04:28 AM, carringtonrj said:
You write with a directness and immediacy which is good and impressive. it's a raw, honest. impassioned statement, saying something that can't be said enough. You write from the heart, it seems, and that's the most important thing. More power to you.
Thank you for taking the time time to read and comment , this one I feel very strongly about because some many people need to be more understanding towards others about who they are and who they are meant to be , they also need to stop trying to make others change and be something they aren't meant to be .

Everything I write is very much from the heart mainly how I'm feeling at the moment.

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