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Jay & Miles - 1. A Ride Home

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POV: Mikey

 

“Why didn’t you just tell me that?” Though the words were nearly whisper-soft, I could tell that Jay was angry. I looked around to see if we were alone, and thankfully, we were. I’d seen him around a long time, but this junior year art class was the first we had shared--and the first where I had dared speak to the blond boy. I was nearly eight inches taller than him, and a good twenty pounds heavier, but he was the more outgoing and popular one with many friends and a confidence I could only envy. I pushed my thick glasses farther up on my nose, and mumbled, “I’m sorry….”

The school parking lot was rapidly emptying of cars, since art was our last period, and I realized that once again, I’d missed my bus. Shit--nothing was going right today! Our school held about 700 students, but only because it served the three local elementary districts in our mostly farm-oriented county. A forty minute ride would see me home, thanks to the long routes, but to walk was still going to be more than six miles. By rights, I should have a car...but fate had decreed that my vision wasn’t good enough to get a license...and that put the final nail in the coffin of what ought to have been my social life. That, and the fact that I wasn’t into sports despite my height, and I liked to read.

I turned to start the walk home, the afternoon hot despite it being mid-April, and resigned myself to once again being alone; Jay had been open and friendly from the first day in Miss Jones’ class, and I had drunk up that attention like a man in a desert finding a water-hole--only to lose him thanks to my cowardice. He traded good-natured jibes with everyone, and after a few days, I found myself hesitantly giving back those same school boy lines: What’s up? Why don’t you grab it and see!...Bite me, dickhead! You wish!...and the one that had started this mess yesterday...Blow me!...and my automatic rejoinder: Right--name the time and place! Jay had laughed back, as was high-school custom since this was all in fun--but I had missed the change which came into his vivid cornflower blue eyes.

As we left class, he had handed me a note: Meet me at the bridge by the cemetery east of town at 10!--Jay. I hadn’t read the note until I was on the bus...and I was in a panic! Was he serious?! Was it a trick?...but he had never, as far as I knew, played mean tricks on people...Did he really expect me to be there? Oh god--what if someone found out my secret! While I wasn’t popular, and only had to suffer the occasional knocking of books from my hands, if it got out in this town where everyone knew of you--if not actually knew you, that I was gay...then what life I had would become a living hell. I couldn’t risk it, much as I wanted to!

I walked closer to the berm as I heard the crunch of gravel and the hiss of tires on tarred country lanes behind me. A rusty dark blue Ford pickup probably thirty years old stopped next to me. “Get in, asshole--you want to walk all the way home?” came Jay’s voice from the dim interior. I debated for a second--walk in the unusual heat, or be the object of ridicule by my former friend? If I got in, was there a chance I could salvage our friendship? I already felt pretty damn low, so it couldn’t get much worse…and climbed up onto the running board to open the door.

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For a few minutes, we rode in silence, then I noticed we weren’t headed to my house...we were headed up a narrow dirt road toward the edge of a little wood east of our small town, closer to his house than mine, since I lived a mile west of the corporation limits. Jay stopped with a faint squeal of brakes and shut off the engine. He pulled a bottle from behind the seat and used an opener to remove the metal cap. I stared at the glass bottle with the brown frothy liquid inside. “Choc-ola?”

He laughed, “Dry town, remember? And my dad would kill me if I drank and got pulled over!...Now--talk! And I don’t want the Bicentennial Minute version!” I laughed at the reference to the history segments on CBS, which had aired nightly for over a year to celebrate the country’s anniversary extravaganza. The laughter died when I looked into his eyes--so earnest that I couldn’t lie to him. “Tell you that my mom wouldn’t let me out alone late at night after watching that damn Helter Skelter movie the other night? That I’m a chicken-shit coward, and that you’re wasting your time with a friend like me….” I had no pride left, but still, I turned my head to look out the open window, letting the tears flow quietly.

“Mikey…” the soft voice again, only this time accompanied by a hand rubbing the back of my neck, trying to ease the tension there. Mikey--he called me that after the boy in the cereal commercial, since no one could think of a nickname for Miles--”Mikey, why didn’t you at least call last night?” Was that pain in his voice? I risked turning toward him, and I thought I could see a hint of wetness in his eyes, but I couldn’t be sure through my own watery browns. “I waited for over an hour...and you didn’t show!”

I couldn’t believe what my ears were reporting! “You...were...there?” I sniffled like a little kid, and hung my head so he wouldn’t see me like that. He was serious? He wanted...or at least hoped...for the same thing I did? “Jay….”

The blond’s next move nearly made me cry harder: he removed my glasses, and wiped the tears away with his thumbs, then with a kleenex from his pocket! “Let me guess--you were scared? Well, so was I…” he paused and took a deep breath, letting it out in one ragged burst. “You could have shown someone the note, or told someone I’d hit on you...but I had to hope that you might feel like me.”

“But, you have so many friends--why me?” I was so confused, but my heart felt lighter than it had in years as he spoke again, pushing my dark hair back as he put my glasses back in place. “Mikey, stop putting yourself down--you are a nice guy--honest, caring and I think you’re cute!” He laughed when my face colored up like a fire engine! “What, so you think I can walk up to one of my other friends and say ‘I wanna suck ya’, and get away with my life? Fat chance!”

Jay took my hand in his and gave me a searching, almost pleading, once-over. “Mikey...I want to be real close friends with you! Later, I want to try all those things we joke about--when it feels right. If you want that too, then just say ‘Yes’, and I’ll be over to take you out for pizza on Friday! How about it?” There was no way I could resist those blue eyes….

“Yes, anytime you want, Jay!”

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This was originally Prompt 344.

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A great start to your story.

I found I was immediately identifying with the characters and the situation.

I particularly liked the gentle interaction and the way you portrayed the feelings at the moment of truth.

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On 10/12/2014 10:31 AM, Palantir said:
A great start to your story.

I found I was immediately identifying with the characters and the situation.

I particularly liked the gentle interaction and the way you portrayed the feelings at the moment of truth.

Thanks Iarwain--that means a lot coming from one of my favorite authors.

Developments in store as the story progresses, but I'm trying to keep consistent with my feelings at that stage of life, since Miles contains much of my own psyche.

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oh that was very sweet, but not saccharinely so - well done! I liked how the reflection and set-up didn't fell too "I am going to tell you all the backstory in one go". it was just enough to give flesh to the two characters, but still leave us with questions.

And ohhhh, how could anyone not love Jay? Yes please and thank you.

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On 10/12/2014 06:06 PM, Sasha Distan said:
oh that was very sweet, but not saccharinely so - well done! I liked how the reflection and set-up didn't fell too "I am going to tell you all the backstory in one go". it was just enough to give flesh to the two characters, but still leave us with questions.

And ohhhh, how could anyone not love Jay? Yes please and thank you.

I try to keep some things back, and reveal others as a surprise 'asides' to make things interesting. Nice to hear that it seems to be working. :)
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This is so awkwardly realistic you want to touch it cautiously, so that nothing happens. Did this make sense? Anyway, I'm glad there's more.

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On 10/12/2014 10:21 PM, aditus said:
This is so awkwardly realistic you want to touch it cautiously, so that nothing happens. Did this make sense? Anyway, I'm glad there's more.
It makes perfect sense to me. Even though I'm writing it, it feels a bit like I'm looking in on a couple's private moments.
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Yes, all your reviewers are hitting on the very subtle nature of this flash story. There is both tenderness and believability in the way the boys have come to this situation, and the real act of bravery it took Jay to make that note. I feel for Jay – the way he describes waiting for Miles and not knowing if the other boy was going to 'destroy' him is all so palpable. I believe everyone has been in the situation of liking someone and putting their neck on the line, at least they should know it, because everyone should be brave when it comes to matters of the heart!

 

I like this, but I do wonder how tall Jay is…I know, a small point, but for Miles to be "nearly eight inches taller" either means he's really tall, or Jay is really small. It would be heard to believe in Jay's popularity if he were on the small side.

 

I agree, this is a very nice start!

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On 10/13/2014 09:23 AM, AC Benus said:
Yes, all your reviewers are hitting on the very subtle nature of this flash story. There is both tenderness and believability in the way the boys have come to this situation, and the real act of bravery it took Jay to make that note. I feel for Jay – the way he describes waiting for Miles and not knowing if the other boy was going to 'destroy' him is all so palpable. I believe everyone has been in the situation of liking someone and putting their neck on the line, at least they should know it, because everyone should be brave when it comes to matters of the heart!

 

I like this, but I do wonder how tall Jay is…I know, a small point, but for Miles to be "nearly eight inches taller" either means he's really tall, or Jay is really small. It would be heard to believe in Jay's popularity if he were on the small side.

 

I agree, this is a very nice start!

You had me nervousw with 'I like this, but...' :)

It comes as no surprise that you find subtle things in the story...your writing is full of it. In telling and enlarging on my own experiences, I didn't realize I was doing that. but perhaps I was subconsciously. Maybe I'm deeper than a shallow creek after all?

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So sweet and fragile, two boys almost not daring to believe they feel the same way. I hope Jay's courage is rewarded.

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On 10/16/2014 02:38 AM, Timothy M. said:
So sweet and fragile, two boys almost not daring to believe they feel the same way. I hope Jay's courage is rewarded.
Life seems to like throwing obstacles in the way, whether real or in our heads...we can hope.
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Very charming interaction here, beautifully done. The fear and uncertainty were palpable...desperation evident but nothing was over the top. These two seemed so real to me and it felt like I was there with them, like I had been there before. To accomplish what you did in so few words is very commendable...the innocence you portrayed to us was exquisite. I loved the genuine confusion of Miles and the incredible courage of Jay. Kudos CG...cheers...Gary

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On 10/29/2014 08:36 AM, Headstall said:
Very charming interaction here, beautifully done. The fear and uncertainty were palpable...desperation evident but nothing was over the top. These two seemed so real to me and it felt like I was there with them, like I had been there before. To accomplish what you did in so few words is very commendable...the innocence you portrayed to us was exquisite. I loved the genuine confusion of Miles and the incredible courage of Jay. Kudos CG...cheers...Gary
Thank you so muich Gary. I tried to portray how I felt back then...and I'm grateful that you think I managed it pretty well. Miles is trying to make something happen whereas I didn't have the guts. Onliy in that regard are we different.

I'll try not to disappoint you as the story continues. :)

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Great start to a story. The characters interactions felt so real and relaxed, not forced toward some end-point. I like (as everyone has been saying) the subtlety of your story. It's nice to be reading and be surprised and not--as we all have a habit of doing--knowing, or anticipating what will happen. It is nice and refreshing, the setting is described well. And i like the little details thrown in there, they make it more real.

Looking forward to reading much more. :)

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On 11/05/2014 04:03 PM, Branflakes said:
Great start to a story. The characters interactions felt so real and relaxed, not forced toward some end-point. I like (as everyone has been saying) the subtlety of your story. It's nice to be reading and be surprised and not--as we all have a habit of doing--knowing, or anticipating what will happen. It is nice and refreshing, the setting is described well. And i like the little details thrown in there, they make it more real.

Looking forward to reading much more. :)

Thanks, Bran! Welcome aboard. My style of doing a story is pretty much 'it grows as it flows'...I have only an end goal in mind, and each chapter just comes out as it will. :) The prompt ideas were a start, but after that, it came out as it entered my head.

I hope you like the story as it goes on, and if you have suggestions or anything else, please put them on the discussion group linked on the story description page! I love to hear from fellow members.

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Very sweet and hesitant interaction between the two boys. Both boys seem so afraid of rejection - but Jay has made the first hesitant move. Good first chapter.

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On 04/05/2015 10:41 AM, EagleIsaac said:
Very sweet and hesitant interaction between the two boys. Both boys seem so afraid of rejection - but Jay has made the first hesitant move. Good first chapter.
Thanks Eagle, I'm glad you decided to check this out, and I hope you stick with it. A lot of what Miles feels is the way I felt back then...
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Those first, hesitant fumblings of mutual attraction and you've shown it very well. This is very familiar territory. I'm getting started on this a little late, but at least I got here. :) This is close enough to my own era that I can fully appreciate it. I look forward to enjoying this story.

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On 04/24/2015 01:06 PM, drpaladin said:
Those first, hesitant fumblings of mutual attraction and you've shown it very well. This is very familiar territory. I'm getting started on this a little late, but at least I got here. :) This is close enough to my own era that I can fully appreciate it. I look forward to enjoying this story.
Thank you for joining my readership--better late than never. If you've read the replies, you know JM is based on my real home town and school, just the characters are fictional, if some are very loosely based on real people as I recall them. Miles is very much me at that time, but he found a way to have courage, when I didn't meet 'my' Jay. I wondered for years what might have happened if I'd gone, but I can't even talk to him to catch up as I learned he died about ten years ago. He was a cute, cool guy I wish I'd caught up with earlier, but I chanced on a relative of his by accident.
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CG: Now it's my turn to thank you for the 'push & prod' to get me to read this... Excellent start... I'm sure I'll have more to say after a few chapters...
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On 09/02/2015 04:09 PM, Atruefan said:

CG: Now it's my turn to thank you for the 'push & prod' to get me to read this... Excellent start... I'm sure I'll have more to say after a few chapters...

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Welcome to the life of rural boys in search of love! The first two chapters were my first fiction pieces here, so the prompts were to get the brain in gear--and the story was only gong to be a few posts--but after those few, I needed to tell the rest of my fears and dreams from high-school.

Everything Mikey feels was me, and Jay is how I imagine the boy who asked me to meet him one evening would be if we'd actually become closer--fear of exposure at that time kept me from making the little extra effort to follow through, and I've always regretted that momentary lapse of judgment.

As the story goes on, I get more confident, both as a writer and as Mikey, so there is more to read, and hopefully enjoy.

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Someone asked me if I'd read, or was reading this the other day. I said no, I wasn't. I didn't ask why I should but I said I would based on his question.
I'm glad I did. To be honest, I'm really not into teen stories because I normally just don't believe them. Love wasn't part of my teen years, if I ever was one. But this one, I felt was honest, was real or could be.
There was wonder and fear and the nervousness of coming out, being found out, and being different while already in a body that does its own thing.
I felt this and liked it.
I'll be back.
tim

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On 10/28/2015 08:11 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Someone asked me if I'd read, or was reading this the other day. I said no, I wasn't. I didn't ask why I should but I said I would based on his question.

I'm glad I did. To be honest, I'm really not into teen stories because I normally just don't believe them. Love wasn't part of my teen years, if I ever was one. But this one, I felt was honest, was real or could be.

There was wonder and fear and the nervousness of coming out, being found out, and being different while already in a body that does its own thing.

I felt this and liked it.

I'll be back.

tim

Wow, Tim, I'm so glad you could find something to like here--I've put a lot of my early self into Mikey, and he's finding experiences because he took one little chance. I knew who I was then, but how to BE it was another thing--I had the limitations of the times to deal with, and the fact that I missed a lot of cues with my limited vision. The boys in my story all pretty much know what they want, but in a world/town where you couldn't be that, what choices did you have? I hope you still find them real when they begin to find partners...it means a lot to me that you're here.

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Hi Columbus Guy,

 

I'm coming to this with a lot of chapters to read, but based on this one it sure looks as if I'm going to be enjoying myself. An excellent start and I'm connecting with Miles already.

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On 09/03/2016 01:57 AM, Ivor Slipper said:

Hi Columbus Guy,

 

I'm coming to this with a lot of chapters to read, but based on this one it sure looks as if I'm going to be enjoying myself. An excellent start and I'm connecting with Miles already.

Welcome aboard Ivor! The story evolved from a few short pieces into a story that went into my mental state back then, and thus they got longer. Mikey gains friends, some self-confidence, and a relationship as the chapters go on...I hope you'll still like them.

Bits and pieces of my real life are scattered throughout, some happened then, and others later but found their way into my fevered imagination. :) Good luck trying to spot the real events/things...there's one in every chapter.

I look forward to hearing more of your reviews!

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Hi again. I thought I'd come by and return the favor of a read, and I'm so glad that I did. Rural teen love stories are right up my alley, and yours has started well. You have a pretty fair body of work here, so it will take me some time to read all of it. Going to be a pleasure, though, I think.

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