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2017 - Spring - Unintended Consequences & Jagged Edges Entry

Rounded Rocks - 1. Rounded Rocks

Rounded Rocks

 

 

Jagged edges…?

 

I'd rather be a collection of river rocks

rounded smooth

matured and mellowed

not showing the turmoil

that knocked me flat a million times

in the currents of chaos.

 

Rather be the river rock that I am.

Copyright © 2017 AC Benus; All Rights Reserved.
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2017 - Spring - Unintended Consequences & Jagged Edges Entry
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2 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

This is wonderful AC... the jagged edges of newly formed mountains.. or smooth and mellow, gentled by the water.. lovely images. 

Thanks, Tim. Water is such a powerful and subliminal metaphor. 

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'matured and mellowed'  

Wow Ben. That got me there and made me think. Wow, such a nice description. It's really is wonderful poem Ben. As tim said, thinking about it it forms beautiful pictures in mind. Did well. Loved all those images and of course my favourite 'water'. 

 

~Emi. 

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I love this poem, for it puts me in mind of the serenity and loveliness of the rivers and streams and falling water; as a  metaphor it is perfect.

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9 hours ago, Emi GS said:

'matured and mellowed'  

Wow Ben. That got me there and made me think. Wow, such a nice description. It's really is wonderful poem Ben. As tim said, thinking about it it forms beautiful pictures in mind. Did well. Loved all those images and of course my favourite 'water'. 

 

~Emi. 

A beautiful review. Thank you for reading. 

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6 hours ago, Freerider said:

Beautiful and serene poem!

Thank you, Freerider. I appreciate the comments. 

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2 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

I love this poem, for it puts me in mind of the serenity and loveliness of the rivers and streams and falling water; as a  metaphor it is perfect.

Thanks, Parker. If you'll remember, this poem came into being while we were having a conversation....that makes you the 'brain daddy' of the verse ;) Cheers 

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Mmm, of course I agree with the above comments: a lovely poem ... at least the first six lines. They seem to form the complete poem. But then my problems start. That last intriguing line. If it would be identical as the opening line I would have been satisfied - an added accent to make a point. But it isn't, and I just can't assume it hasn't been done  deliberate. So, I left it perculating in my head, but have not come up yet with a convincing explanation. An intended consequence? :(

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26 minutes ago, J.HunterDunn said:

Mmm, of course I agree with the above comments: a lovely poem ... at least the first six lines. They seem to form the complete poem. But then my problems start. That last intriguing line. If it would be identical as the opening line I would have been satisfied - an added accent to make a point. But it isn't, and I just can't assume it hasn't been done  deliberate. So, I left it perculating in my head, but have not come up yet with a convincing explanation. An intended consequence? :(

It makes total sense to me. It is the answer to the question in the first line.

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3 hours ago, J.HunterDunn said:

Mmm, of course I agree with the above comments: a lovely poem ... at least the first six lines. They seem to form the complete poem. But then my problems start. That last intriguing line. If it would be identical as the opening line I would have been satisfied - an added accent to make a point. But it isn't, and I just can't assume it hasn't been done  deliberate. So, I left it perculating in my head, but have not come up yet with a convincing explanation. An intended consequence? :(

Well, it's a wonderful review. Perhaps if you think of the last line as being the poet speaking to himself, while the other lines are spoken to 'convince' others.... 

 

Thanks again, Peter. Muah 

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3 hours ago, Freerider said:

It makes total sense to me. It is the answer to the question in the first line.

I can see it this way too 

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It made me think about how you should be careful to envy people who are smooth and whole and in a perfect place. You never know what it took for them to get there. Maybe it wasn't as easy at you assume? 'the turmoil that knocked me flat' :yes: 

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9 minutes ago, Timothy M. said:

It made me think about how you should be careful to envy people who are smooth and whole and in a perfect place. You never know what it took for them to get there. Maybe it wasn't as easy at you assume? 'the turmoil that knocked me flat' :yes: 

Thanks for the review, my friend. It's nice to have your thoughts on a poem of mine. Muah 

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Feels like I'm on my way to being a river rock myself at times. Then something happens and that smooth surface cracks, showing the glittring but sharp inside. Not sure I want it to stop completely since there is a certain energy in that, though the reasons for it I could live without.  

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On 5/13/2017 at 7:39 AM, Puppilull said:

Feels like I'm on my way to being a river rock myself at times. Then something happens and that smooth surface cracks, showing the glittring but sharp inside. Not sure I want it to stop completely since there is a certain energy in that, though the reasons for it I could live without.  

Yes, your comments make me remember that river rocks once started as boulders....little by little those sharp edged (and exposed insides ;)) are worked away. Thanks, Pup, for a great review.  

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River rocks? Quite apt, AC. My rough edges too have been smoothed over time. It hasn't been an easy process, and it's ongoing, but I like the contours life has given me. I could relate to this one right away... the currents of chaos can't shove around what they can't get a grip of :) . Great poem... cheers... Gary....

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3 hours ago, Headstall said:

River rocks? Quite apt, AC. My rough edges too have been smoothed over time. It hasn't been an easy process, and it's ongoing, but I like the contours life has given me. I could relate to this one right away... the currents of chaos can't shove around what they can't get a grip of :) . Great poem... cheers... Gary....

That's a great take on the poem, Gary. Thanks. I especially like your mentioning how the currents can't shift what they can't grab ahold of. Thanks again.  

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Great poem, AC. :)

 

I, too, would much rather be a river rock, quietly going about my business.

 

I really loved Tim's second comment about envying people who seem like life is just wonderful for them, because we don't know what they had to go through to get to that point. So the envy the younger, rougher (jagged edged?) rocks envy the older, mellow and smooth rocks, but the older, mellow and smooth rocks probably had to go through the turmoil and chaos the younger rocks are going through in order to get to the place they are now.

 

I really enjoyed this, AC. :)

 

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2 hours ago, Lisa said:

Great poem, AC. :)

 

I, too, would much rather be a river rock, quietly going about my business.

 

I really loved Tim's second comment about envying people who seem like life is just wonderful for them, because we don't know what they had to go through to get to that point. So the envy the younger, rougher (jagged edged?) rocks envy the older, mellow and smooth rocks, but the older, mellow and smooth rocks probably had to go through the turmoil and chaos the younger rocks are going through in order to get to the place they are now.

 

I really enjoyed this, AC. :)

 

Thanks, Lisa. These are great comments and I appriciate them a great deal. People seem to respond to this poem, and I'm glad. Thanks again.  

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A fantastic poem, good sir. In a few words, I got the feeling that the smooth river rocks are a calm serenity, while the jagged edges are chaos and unpredictability. I rather be a River Rock too.

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28 minutes ago, BHopper2 said:

A fantastic poem, good sir. In a few words, I got the feeling that the smooth river rocks are a calm serenity, while the jagged edges are chaos and unpredictability. I rather be a River Rock too.

Thanks again, BH! Yes, rather have the sharp edges knocked off of me. I appreciate the comments, and glad you read this poem. 

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I often struggle to inderstand poetry but this poem makes perfect sense to me.  It also makes me jealous of smooth rocks!  

Everytime I start feeling like that nice calm rock life finds yet another edge to snap off or file down.

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