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Touch: A survival story. - 94. Book 1 Epilogue: Elementals.

Alright, y'all, this is the final chapter of book one. To mark the event, I would like to ask everyone to READ THE CHAPTER END NOTE after you're done with this chapter. It has important information. Please and thank you. Kay. Enjoy.

Hideyoshi:

The house was nearly empty when Hideyoshi saw his grandson home. There were no words spoken. James hadn’t talked since their return to this dimension. Hideyoshi found a pain in his stomach every time he looked at the boy. Three hours since watching Charlie flee, and still, he shook like a leaf.

Upon being allowed inside, James made a b-line for his room, and shut the door quietly behind him, not even stopping to give his mother a hug on passing the TV room.

Hideyoshi did his best to pretend he couldn’t hear the sobs.

For his part, the evening held another heavy task. He returned to the TV room, grasped one of the loose-backed chairs that accompanied the couch, and hobbled across the floor with it until it sat opposite his daughter in law. Then, he set his walking cane down.

He sat. Neither of them spoke.

Sarah looked about as drained as Hideyoshi felt. He sighed.

“... It was the most terrifying moment of my life,” he murmured, putting his hands together and resting his chin on his knuckles. “The first time my son got himself in over his head. I think it honestly made my heart stop beating.”

It took a moment for Sarah to respond to that, still just gazing into the distance, barely aware.

“I’m still waiting for it to start again,” she said eventually, her tone surprisingly calm. “...How’d you handle it?”

Hideyoshi chuckled.

“Poorly,” he admitted. “Roped Peter into five hours combat training a day. Planted a tracking spell on his wallet. Usual parenting.” He reached into his coat pocket and retrieved his cigarettes. “I’d ask if I’m allowed to smoke in here, but I’d have to ignore you if you said no.” He flicked the pack open, and pulled one out.

“I could use one of those, if you have a spare,” Sarah murmured.

He raised an eyebrow.

“I didn’t know you smoked.”

She shrugged.

“Stopped when I met Peter. Didn’t want my breath smelling like pot-ash.”

Hideyoshi grunted, then tossed her the cigarette, and pulled another for himself. A flick of his finger, and the tips of both lit up.

He brought it to his lips, held the smoke in his lungs for a moment, then let it out in a slow exhalation.

“So,” he murmured. “I came here as a newborn.” Sarah glanced across at him, mid-drag, one eyebrow raised in tired curiosity. He shrugged. “The story I was told was that the lord of my household met a stranded forge-spirit in the woods, and in exchange for the aid needed to return it home, was given the spirit’s newborn child as a prize.”

He took another drag, the statement hanging in the air between them for a moment. Sarah’s gaze returned to the wall.

He sniffed.

“I can never know for sure if that’s true, of course. They could have told me any story to keep me happy while I grew, but it’s the truth I choose to believe.”

Sarah grunted. Hideyoshi huffed. Neither spoke again until the cigarettes were done. He supplied them each a fresh one. Lit. Inhaled. Exhaled.

“... So what’s your story then?” he asked. “How’d you get here?”

For what it was worth, Sarah didn’t bother feigning ignorance. Perhaps she was just too tired. She took another pull, her fingers slightly shaky, then let out a sigh.

“I was born here,” she muttered. He raised an eyebrow, but she continued. “My parents weren’t. Of course they weren’t. I think they were hunters or itinerants or some other damned important thing. They always left the room to talk about it. All I really know is we moved around a lot. Spent most of my time alone, eating mac-n-cheese in crappy old motels for weeks at a time. Then, they’d come back all bloodied and we’d be off to find the next motel.” She shrugged. “That was life for a while.”

Hideyoshi nodded.

“There weren’t any others like you?”

Sarah shook her head. “Of course there were. My parents didn’t live here. My parents didn’t come from here. I went home with them once or twice. It never lasted long.”

“Why not?”

Another shrug.

“Because I couldn’t survive there,” she replied. “Born on Earth, after all. My powers were blocked off by all that Elvish spellcraft shit.” She let out a dry laugh. “I was the only child who couldn’t fly in a village built without the concept of restrictive gravity. The door to my house was a good two hundred feet above the ground.”

“So they took you with them?” Hideyoshi asked. “Left you half abandoned while they went to fight with monsters? Why?”

Sarah snorted.

“I don’t think they had any other idea of what to do with me.” She finished off her smoke and gestured to her companion for another. “But, the trips got longer and longer, and I got bigger, and louder, and one day, there was a knock on the door from someone at social services.” She caught the new cigarette, waited for it to light, and took a puff. “I was about six, as far as the examiners could tell. It wasn’t like I spoke coherent English.”

“What did you speak?”

She shrugged.

“As far as I can tell, a mix of my people’s language and whatever I’d managed to pick up off TV.” she chuckled. “I used to watch a lot of Jerry Springer.”

Another long quiet.

“So. What are you?”

She laughed.

“I figured you’d be able to answer that one day. So much for that, I guess.” She took another puff, then raised an arm to her face, rubbing at her cheek with the base of her palm. “How’d you find out? I haven’t told anyone about it in decades.”

Hideyoshi gazed at the wall to Sarah’s left for a time, thinking on the strangeness of his life, then gave his answer.

“It’s James,” he admitted. “He’s powerful. Too powerful. Stronger than his dad. Stronger than his grandmother. That shouldn’t be possible with a baseline human for a mother.”

Sarah nodded.

“Is he stronger than you?”

He shrugged.

“I couldn’t tell you. I hope so.” For a moment, the two of them shared a smile. Then, Hideyoshi sighed. “That boy is a loss to the gene pool.”

“What?”

Another shrug.

“He’s gay,” he muttered. “Line ends with him, unless his sister has something to say about it.”

Of all the responses, Sarah simply chuckled there.

“Called it.”

Hideyoshi snickered.

Sarah stared at the glowing bud of her smoke for a bit, then sniffed.

“Foster care was good to me,” she said. “It feels so rare that you get to hear those words, but it was. You’ve met my family. You know how kind they are.”

“Good people,” Hideyoshi agreed.

Sarah smiled, still gazing at her hands, the cigarette threaded between her fingers.

“They were so patient with me. Taught me English. Taught me maths. Homeschooled, right up till I was ten, just so I could get into classes without having to miss a beat. And every time I told them about what it was like before, they’d just smile and nod, and tell me I should write a story.” She shook her head. “Talked to a therapist about it once or twice. Gave me some bullshit about invented memory. I almost believed it.”

“Does Peter know?”

Sarah shrugged.

“Most of it. He knows my parents had powers, knows I got put in foster care. Never told him where I was from. Didn’t seem important anymore.”

“How so?”

“Hard to say,” Sarah admitted, taking another drag as she thought it over. “I used to think it was everything. Spent my whole childhood thinking about where I was from. Wanted to find it. Wanted to walk up to my parents and rip them both a new one. I had a whole speech prepared. Spent ages learning about redwood reserves and old forests. Looking for a place with trees tall enough,” she shrugged. “Couldn’t find it, obviously. Not like it was anywhere on Earth.”

She paused for a moment, waiting for Hideyoshi to pass comment. He did not, so she continued.

“I stopped trying after a while. It was making my newer, better parents worry about me. So I put it on hold. Waited until highschool was done. Saved some money, took a gap year.”

“That’s when you met Peter.” Hideyoshi nodded.

“That’s when I found Peter,” she corrected. “I told my folks I wanted to explore. But really, I was looking. I’d given up on finding where I came from. Now, I wanted to know about magic. I wanted to know why they could fly, if I couldn’t.” She snickered. “Magic’s a badly kept secret. We both know that. I started just doing internet searches. Forums. Message boards. Whole bunch of stuff. Looking for people who said they’d seen things, or survived encounters or whatever. Went out to meet them, if I could.”

She caught the look he was giving her at that, and shrugged. “I had pepper spray. Most of it was nothing. People telling each other stories or old guys looking for Bigfoot. But a couple names kept turning up. People saying they got rescued, talking about conspiracies and area 51: Toranaga.”

She chuckled.

“When I finally tracked Peter down, I thought he was part of M-K-Ultra.”

Hideyoshi remembered that. His son had been staying at a youth hostel on a solo hunt.

“What did you say?”

Sarah shrugged.

“We were young. I got him drunk. I wanted to learn about my magic. He wanted to bone. We compromised.”

Hideyoshi snorted in spite of himself.

“Christ,” he murmured, raising a hand to his forehead. “I taught the kid so much better than that.”

“No you didn’t,” Sarah smiled. “I was a pretty girl, and he was happy to show off. I knew everything I wanted in the first week or two. Told me he was a hunter. Told me what he could do.”

She took a drag of her dying cigarette, then continued.

“And he told me about his parents. That’s when I figured out I had to let it go.”

“Oh?” he asked, one eyebrow raised.

“It was the same story,” she said. “His parents were mages. They loved the work. They ran their kid through hell and back because hunting had to come first.” She looked him in the eye, then, her expression cold. “Magic damages people, Hideyoshi. Always has. I decided I’d have no part of it. I’d rather be a good person than figure out how to fly.”

Hideyoshi sighed. She thought he was a bad person. He wished he could be offended.

“Peter’s good,” he said eventually. “Tsuru and myself, I’ll grant you. But my son’s a good man.”

Sarah inclined her head.

“Call him an edge case. You didn’t screw him up as badly as you could have done. But we’ve both seen Casper. We know the kind of shit that parents like you can pull.” Hideyoshi winced, but she wasn’t done. “And now you have your sights on my son.”

“... The boy’s important, Sarah. You know he is.”

“We can agree on that.” Sarah nodded. “And if you ever manage to hurt him the way you’ve hurt the rest of your family, I’ll-” she cut herself off with a huff. “Ugh. I don’t know how to end that sentence.”

Hideyoshi hesitated.

“I never knew you hated us,” he murmured.

“I don’t,” she answered. “But you are broken. You always have been.” The two of them sat in silence for a moment while she finished off her cigarette. She dropped the stub in an empty coffee cup and sighed. “Get out of my house.”

Hideyoshi stood, took his stick, and calmly walked away. He climbed the stairs to the door of James’ room before he left.

Again, he tried to ignore the sobs.

“If you don’t want to lose people like that again,” he murmured. “You’ll need to be stronger. Training starts tomorrow.”


James:

James cried. Huddled under the covers of his bed. He cried.

Tomorrow, he would train. He would grow. He wouldn’t let this happen again.

For now, though, he cried.

Sometimes, that is all we have.

SPECIAL NOTE FROM THE AUTHOR PLEASE READ:

Okay, so, First up, thanks to every single one of you for reading and enjoying my work so far. There's more to come, and I intend to start posting the next arc on here within a week, maybe within a couple days. I'll fill the gap by posting a couple chapters of a different story I did a while back that had a much more light-hearted tone. The first chapter of that is already online for you. Just to help cleanse the palate leading into the next part. Those of you who have not done so may want to click the follow button to help keep track of the story, as I'll soon cease dropping daily updates.

Secondly, as we have now completed book 1 of Touch in its entirety, this feels like a very appropriate time to mention my Patreon, where anyone who wants to can support the story. No pressure, but anyone who does will have my sincere appreciation. If you would like to support the story, but do not wish to do so by the month, I also have a Ko-Fi account, where you can give a single time donation.

Thanks, everyone!

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8 minutes ago, Butcher56 said:

This was a great story to read, I didn’t think I’d like it at first but it grew on me. I’ve read other stories about magic before and I think this is the best one I’ve come across. I’m glad that James is home now and he’s safe, I think his mom is going to be a problem with Hideyoshi and his wife as far as training James. A few questions have been answered about the powers that James has especially since his mom might’ve been born here but she’s not from earth. I’m looking forward to reading the next story about James his family and friends.

Thank you 🙂. Seeing the little heart icon from you at the bottom of the chapter within half an hour of almost every post for the last couple months has been a very affirming experience. You are very cool, and I hope you enjoy what comes after this.

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9 minutes ago, weinerdog said:

I absolutely didn't see background. of Sarah  coming but perhaps I should have.They say it ends with James because he's gay can't they do the egg donor thing with him or is it complicated because of his powers? Looking forward to the next arc.

They can, but Hideyoshi's like, six hundred years old. He might not know that surrogate pregnancy is a thing.

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WOW, I so did not see that coming.  It had been mentioned several times that Sarah was simply human, so unlike most things about this story, I just accepted it.  You have to understand her point of view.  The fact that to access their powers the kids have to go through so horrific trauma just seems so unnecessarily evil.  I sort of think that it would be better to just be human.

This first book was well written and flowed better toward the end then the beginning and middle.  I did find some of the characters better developed than others and felt that some chapters were almost jarring in their disharmony; that said I did enjoy the story.  It is rare for me to find a story that seems to be fairly unique and not like something that I have seen a dozen times before and this story was definitely that.  

I will definitely continue to follow and can't wait to see where you take this next...

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12 hours ago, centexhairysub said:

WOW, I so did not see that coming.  It had been mentioned several times that Sarah was simply human, so unlike most things about this story, I just accepted it.  You have to understand her point of view.  The fact that to access their powers the kids have to go through so horrific trauma just seems so unnecessarily evil.  I sort of think that it would be better to just be human.

This first book was well written and flowed better toward the end then the beginning and middle.  I did find some of the characters better developed than others and felt that some chapters were almost jarring in their disharmony; that said I did enjoy the story.  It is rare for me to find a story that seems to be fairly unique and not like something that I have seen a dozen times before and this story was definitely that.  

I will definitely continue to follow and can't wait to see where you take this next...

 

12 hours ago, mikedup said:

Thanks for this really amazing and really intense story, it certainly took us all over the place , the sky, the earth and down below, I thoroughly enjoyed it, many thanks once again

I'm glad to hear you both enjoyed it. Thank you, genuinely. I hope you enjoy what comes in book 2.

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I can't disagree with any of the comments above. Giving credit where credit is due, this is a very good unique story, sometimes bordering on the verge of frustration for this reader. I found it to be much like a jigsaw puzzle where we see only snippets of the final image. I thought the development of the various characters as the story progressed was superb. There aren't any other stories such as this one, on this or any other site. I feel it flowed much better from the middle onwards. It will be interesting,and I am looking forward to see what transpires in the second arc!

And to quote that venerable comedy troupe Monty Python..."And now, for something completely different"!!!

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7 minutes ago, drsawzall said:

I can't disagree with any of the comments above. Giving credit where credit is due, this is a very good unique story, sometimes bordering on the verge of frustration for this reader. I found it to be much like a jigsaw puzzle where we see only snippets of the final image. I thought the development of the various characters as the story progressed was superb. There aren't any other stories such as this one, on this or any other site. I feel it flowed much better from the middle onwards. It will be interesting,and I am looking forward to see what transpires in the second arc!

And to quote that venerable comedy troupe Monty Python..."And now, for something completely different"!!!

Thank you. I know it got frustrating for you at times, and I'm glad you stuck with it. I'm very flattered by your words.

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31 minutes ago, Restolock said:

This had been a really great read.  Spent some time in a hospital so feel a bit behind for a while. Absolutely love the character development that had gone on and really curious to see how the story continues from here.

 

Looking forward to reading more from you.

Thank you. Hope you're doing ok after the hospital.

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@Rhythminthemind, I'd like to echo the others in thanking you for a unique and memorable read! It seems the characters in your tale don't often catch a break; I was very saddened by the way things ended with James and Charlie.

I've read almost nothing else on GA for several weeks, so I'm going to jump off here for the moment, I think. In due course, I may come back to read the interlude arc Hunt, and again when you've put up a bit more content for book two.

I sort of wish you had published this as "Book One" from the beginning; then you could have marked Book One as complete and we could have written some reviews for you. I've prepared a review of Book One anyway, which I've appended below.

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Touch: A Survival Story is Rhythminthemind’s sprawling (and ongoing) magnum opus. Book one alone, which is all I’m covering with this review, runs to nearly 100 chapters.

Touch purports to be the story of James Toranaga, a twelve-year-old boy dealing with the aftermath of a sexual assault. As he tries to deal with his trauma, he also faces the first suggestions of his own emerging sexuality. Meanwhile, he discovers that he has the power to fly.

Sounds simple enough, but Touch is actually a massive ensemble piece. Sometimes, our hero James drives the action but, just as often, he is marginalised as we follow the story’s other teenage protagonists, which include Tasha, a girl with super strength; Casper, a vulnerable empath; and, later on, Caleb, an enslaved hunter with a wide variety of powers. There is also an (ever expanding) array of supporting characters and assorted villains, who also take the storytelling focus from time to time. With so many characters to follow, I frequently found myself feeling impatient to get back to James to see how he was doing.

The first few chapters of Touch are a more focused affair with a cool urban feel: we deal with the immediate aftermath of James’ assault, including the impact on his family and the beginning of his friendship with the empath Casper, who is drawn to James’ new, troubled emotional state. As he befriends Casper, James also encounters Tasha, and begins to get dragged into the dangerous vigilante world she inhabits. These early, character-focused chapters were probably the part of the story that I enjoyed the most, although there are many other shining moments of character work scattered throughout the rest of the piece which I found equally enjoyable. Those were the parts of the tale I looked forward to the most as the main storyline began to take chaotic turn after chaotic turn.

After the first few chapters, the scope of the story begins to expand exponentially, and not always in a good way. First, we are introduced to a weird child exploitation cult and their sinister ‘Father’, who look like they will be the major enemy of the piece; but then they get slightly forgotten about as we move on to meet a variety of hunters and agents of mysterious competing factions. Eventually, the story enters the realms of all-out fantasy with witches, mages, elves, goblins, elementals and goodness knows what else tearing up the streets of New York, the snowy wastes of Scandinavia and eventually other worlds entirely. Whole chapters or story arcs are devoted to a series of spectacular battles, escapes and rescues. These are vividly described, with tremendous imagination; but the characters – and, believe me, there are many memorable and likeable characters to be found here – tend to get lost amidst the sound and fury.

It’s an enjoyable ride, but the story moves a long way away from the initial premise and it can become quite hard to keep track of all the different characters and forces in play. I get the impression that, while the author may have had a rough plan to follow, they were making a lot of the detail up as they went along.

It’s a credit to Rhythminthemind’s skill with characters that there are some good running themes to be had here despite the structural confusion, with communication (or, specifically, the lack of it) being a major driver of the ever-escalating events, at least for the first half of Book One.

In Rhythminthemind, we clearly have an author who is absolutely bursting with ideas. However, if I can offer the author any advice it would be this: avoid throwing all your ideas at a single story. Touch is bursting at the seams with loose ends and unresolved storylines. Many of them have great potential and could have been developed in more detail with a more pared-down and focused approach. Make a clear plan and stick to it, ensuring that the character beats and exciting action are delivered in equal measure.

My advice to potential readers: Touch is definitely a journey worth taking, but you’ll need to commit a good deal of time to it. I’m certain that Rhythminthemind is a talent worth watching.

Rating: *** for structure; **** for characters

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