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    Krista
  • Krista
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  • 03/24/2013
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Quiet House - 1. Quiet House

Quiet House


Lights are out in this house,

Candles lit, shadows dancing on the walls.

Your eyes are darker in the dimness of the room.

Quiet falls, only breathing.


And you whisper in the dark,

How your arms are strong,

How safe they are,

And that there will be no harm.


I can smell you,

Your mix of soap and shaving cream.

I can feel your smile on my cheek.

And your hand finds mine.


Your devotion is in your kiss,

And love in your gentleness.

Passion in your fingertips,

And happiness in your laugh.


The quiet in the room, lends itself to whispers.

And as you dream,

My name is,

Your whisper in the dark.

Krista
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 06:09 AM, carringtonrj said:
You include some vivid, precise details here. A nice job. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks! Not really a poetry writer, glad people like it. :)
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 04:05 AM, joann414 said:
Very lovely and romantic girl! I loved it! :2thumbs:
I do try sometimes... lol. Thank you JoAnn! :D
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comicfan

Krista you show a soft and almost vulnerable side here. The images you create are sharp, vivid, and easily lead the reader from beginning to end.

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WatchPatRun

I highly enjoy the softer side of Krista xD but really, it's a great poem that expresses strong feelings between two lovers.

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layla

Loved the way you used sensory images, this was beautiful and touching and romantic. I enjoyed it a great deal.

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Yettie One

There is seduction in dark shadows dancing in candle light.

There is lust in the quiet whispers in your ear.

There is passion in your gentle touch.

There is yearning in your skin.

 

This is a sultry, wooing for the reader, a tantalising tease of pleasure. :P

Romance and allure written in black ink! ;)

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Krista
On 04/20/2013 08:55 AM, Yettie One said:
There is seduction in dark shadows dancing in candle light.

There is lust in the quiet whispers in your ear.

There is passion in your gentle touch.

There is yearning in your skin.

 

This is a sultry, wooing for the reader, a tantalising tease of pleasure. :P

Romance and allure written in black ink! ;)

Lol! Wow, your part is good! haha
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 08:28 AM, layla said:
Loved the way you used sensory images, this was beautiful and touching and romantic. I enjoyed it a great deal.
Aww, thanks Layla. I was going for images. I wanted people to imagine themselves with the person they love in a dimly lit quiet peace and comfort with one another. :) Glad you saw it.
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 08:05 AM, W_L said:
A very Visceral experience of senses, quite enjoyable
Thanks WL! Glad you enjoyed my poem. :)
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 07:35 AM, WatchPatRun said:
I highly enjoy the softer side of Krista xD but really, it's a great poem that expresses strong feelings between two lovers.
What ever do you mean? I'm always nice, gentle, and all that. :)
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 07:23 AM, comicfan said:
Krista you show a soft and almost vulnerable side here. The images you create are sharp, vivid, and easily lead the reader from beginning to end.
Aww. My Poetry is easy to read in general, but I like that the imagery was projected really well and that if flowed. I just need to stop writing poetry about Aaron, if he knew I showed everyone other than him, he might blush.. haha
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Fishwings

Romantic, clear, and clever. I loved the ending line and how blatantly beautiful the emotions of the protagonist come out in the verses. Great work Krista!

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Krista
On 04/20/2013 01:54 PM, Luc Rosen said:
Romantic, clear, and clever. I loved the ending line and how blatantly beautiful the emotions of the protagonist come out in the verses. Great work Krista!
Thanks Fishie :D
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Krista
On 04/20/2013 04:10 PM, Michael9344 said:
Cleverly sexy. Sweet read:).
Thanks! Ooo 'cleverly sexy' I'll take that! :)
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Andy78

I like it Krista. This is poetry I get :)

Romantic, and portrays true affection between partners.

Thanks for sharing.

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Krista
On 04/21/2013 03:26 AM, Andy78 said:
I like it Krista. This is poetry I get :)

Romantic, and portrays true affection between partners.

Thanks for sharing.

Thanks Andy! I like simple and understandable poetry.. if it confuses me, then I get nothing from it.. lol.
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Mikie

Very romantic and yet somehow haunting. I enjoyed this very much :) Much more vulnerable than I would expect from you, in a good way :)

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Krista
On 04/21/2013 07:40 AM, K.C. said:
Hmmmmmm very sexy ;) Feel like a voyeur watching a romatic moment :thumbup:
Lol. I have to get my inspirations somewhere. I think I'm just now beginning to blush a bit.. :P
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Krista
On 04/21/2013 01:30 PM, Mikie said:
Very romantic and yet somehow haunting. I enjoyed this very much :) Much more vulnerable than I would expect from you, in a good way :)
I believe the haunting part is how it reads, or I see where you're coming from with the comment anyway. Yeah yeah yeah, I have a soft spot. :P
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