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My GA Writing Prompts - 6. Poetry Prompt - Tanka

Watching the sidewalk

Trudging, earbuds in, a girl

Walks alone to school

I drive past her, wondering

Does her bag hold her friends? Books.

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Jaro_423

Lovely clear picture and the juxtaposition of the punctuation really puts a swing on the meaning. I like it. Love the way you've slid each line over into the next.

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Percy
On 09/07/2014 07:46 PM, carringtonrj said:
Lovely piece, P. You observe, think, care. Nice job.
Thank you!
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On 09/07/2014 08:08 PM, Jaro_423 said:
Lovely clear picture and the juxtaposition of the punctuation really puts a swing on the meaning. I like it. Love the way you've slid each line over into the next.
Thanks, Jaro. The tanka form got blurred, probably, but the outcome was satisfactory.
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On 09/08/2014 09:22 PM, nostic said:
Good job. I could even imagine how she moved as you looked at her.BTW be careful when driving :P
Thanks for reading!
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Ron

Ahh, but the last line presumes that books are her friends . . . Maybe, she resents them because they take her away from her music. But still, the observed are bound by the prejudices and the desires of the viewer--at least in their own mind--and this puts us in sync with the "I" of the poet. There is no where else to go. Nice one, Percy.

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On 09/10/2014 12:45 AM, Ron said:
Ahh, but the last line presumes that books are her friends . . . Maybe, she resents them because they take her away from her music. But still, the observed are bound by the prejudices and the desires of the viewer--at least in their own mind--and this puts us in sync with the "I" of the poet. There is no where else to go. Nice one, Percy.
Thanks, Ron!
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