My GA Writing Prompts - 6. Poetry Prompt - Tanka

Lovely piece, P. You observe, think, care. Nice job.

Lovely clear picture and the juxtaposition of the punctuation really puts a swing on the meaning. I like it. Love the way you've slid each line over into the next.

On 09/07/2014 07:46 PM, carringtonrj said:

Lovely piece, P. You observe, think, care. Nice job.

On 09/07/2014 08:08 PM, Jaro_423 said:

Lovely clear picture and the juxtaposition of the punctuation really puts a swing on the meaning. I like it. Love the way you've slid each line over into the next.

I like the form and her friends.

On 09/08/2014 02:57 AM, aditus said:

I like the form and her friends.

Good job. I could even imagine how she moved as you looked at her.BTW be careful when driving

On 09/08/2014 09:22 PM, nostic said:

Good job. I could even imagine how she moved as you looked at her.BTW be careful when driving

Ahh, but the last line presumes that books are her friends . . . Maybe, she resents them because they take her away from her music. But still, the observed are bound by the prejudices and the desires of the viewer--at least in their own mind--and this puts us in sync with the "I" of the poet. There is no where else to go. Nice one, Percy.

On 09/10/2014 12:45 AM, Ron said:

Ahh, but the last line presumes that books are her friends . . . Maybe, she resents them because they take her away from her music. But still, the observed are bound by the prejudices and the desires of the viewer--at least in their own mind--and this puts us in sync with the "I" of the poet. There is no where else to go. Nice one, Percy.