With all my free time (hahaha!) I've been going through a hard edit of Camp Refuge.  It's sort of the story where I found my favorite subject matter.  It was where I decided I was no longer a writer of "porn with plot", but rather "erotica with purpose".

Head-hopping became my enemy after Camp Refuge.  I realized that I did it a lot, and I felt I had to eliminate it in order to improve, and grow.  So I did (mostly).

Yet, as I edit and as more players are added to the mix in Camp Refuge, I have begun to realize that I cannot rid the story of it.  Something would fundamentally change in the telling and not all for the better.  Yes, I'd be able to replace a lot of proper names with pronouns if I head-hopped less.  But... the reader wouldn't get to see the differences between what Jeremy and Mason are thinking, right in the same scene.  They wouldn't get to want to choke Clay for diving down the dark hole of fear, while his son is happy as a lark and unaware of how much his father is hurting.

Simply stated: the story would lose something vital.

Right now I build scenes linearly, in a single character's perception.  Sometimes it's the MC, sometimes it's a raccoon, but it's always a single perception.  It's easy, structured, and simple to read.

I'm rethinking it.  Because, though Camp Refuge needs help in many ways, ridding it of head-hopping doesn't seem to be one.