I Need Input On Sword Of Kings

[Bill W]

Hi, I could really use your help here. I am trying to address some comments/concerns/criticisms about Sword and need input to see if I am correcting those issues. I have posted a revised version of the prologue in the library section, and I would like people to compare that version to the posted prologue on my site ( http://bwsryc.gayauthors.org/stories/sok00.php ) and then give me your feedback as to whether you like/dislike/are indifferent to the changes I made.

 

There will be some other chapters with revisions along the way, to address the wordiness/dragging issues. I would appreciate any help any of you might be willing to offer.

 

Thanks,

Bill

[Reader]

Bill

 

I find the rewritten part a better read less bloody. when I read the original it put me off the story

 

I have read a couple of chapters will have to try get into your story

 

having read all but two of your stories ( that I have found ) I like your writing and will always give them a read