Night Song

[corvus]

Can be found here, and below. Please feel free to comment either/both here and eFiction!

 

 

Night Song

 

Alone among flowers

my jug of wine--

peach-blossomed forgetfulness

and late evening shine--

wine over bridge

is bridge over water,

and moon in a rippling sky.

 

Someone invited

that mute old loon

to join us on the West Lake.

Our lips open to a tune:

"By the huai he

we walk like immortals..."

Your feet are wet with dew.

 

A cock in the hills

awakens a gray sun--

my companions must scatter,

and night is gone;

I feign sleep

on this cold bed

in the silent hour before dawn.

[AFriendlyFace]

Very poetic and beautiful imagery!

 

I feel a bit dense but I'm not sure if I've fully grasped what it's about. I *think* I have, but I might be off. It seems that it's about a romantic evening outdoors in the night, which is then ended when the sun rises and the narrator is forced to return to his lonely bed and pretend to be asleep. Is that close?

 

Anyway, I like it

 

Good job, Corvus!

 

-Kevin