Reviews for Of Light and Dark

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Title: The Beginning Reviewer: Gay_In_Flanders

 

Ah, some more of DF's work!

 

I'm starting to become your biggest fan here.

 

Again looking forward to the next chapter!

 

 

Date: 07/26/2009 09:44 AM

 

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Title: Aftermath Reviewer: Rilbur

 

A fun story, even if I am starting to wonder if I should track down the author of a certain popular vampire series and murder them, messily, to get revenge for all the vampire stories I'm running into now.

 

Date: 07/17/2009 07:38 PM

 

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Date: 07/09/2009 10:03 AM

 

Title: Aftermath Reviewer: brilledelune

 

I'm loving this story very much, then again I'm sucker for a gay bloodsucker..lol

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Hi brilledelune, thanks for the comments and review. More bloodsucking, amongst other things, coming your way very soon! )

 

Date: 06/03/2009 05:16 AM

 

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Title: Aftermath Reviewer: Cuba Libre

 

I have just come across this story, and am drawn in already. The detail you put in almost makes it as if you're there yourself. Wonderful story so far.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Hi Cuba, thanks for the review and the comments. Glad you're enjoying the ride so far. )

 

Date: 05/28/2009 10:33 AM

 

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Title: Aftermath Reviewer: Phoenix

 

I like the joke about using a phone.

 

Gary may still be in shock, but it seems like he's blindly following again. Just when he had a good mad going, it just disappears.

 

Author's Response:

 

Mmm, I have to disagree. If you note the first section of the story and I quote: "I knew then, that I would have to bury my fears and face whatever was to come. If I didn’t, whatever was inside me could explode again, and next time I, or whoever was around me, may not be so lucky."

 

He knows what happened last time he got mad and the thought of hurting or even killing someone, especially Matt, because it got out of control frightens him. Trust me, none of it sits well with him at all, as was explained in the latter stages. But the thought of hurting Matt again has made him grit his teeth and bear it, for now

 

Date: 05/27/2009 08:26 PM

 

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Title: Aftermath Reviewer: DavyBoi

 

I had to laugh at the phone comment as well, wish I could do that. Yet another amazing chapter. More meat on the bones & interesting twist with him gaining abilities like that. Like it.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks Davy. As I said previously, I thought it was important to get what he can do into the open, so the story can move on. Glad you're enjoying it anyway. )

 

Date: 05/27/2009 07:50 PM

 

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Title: Aftermath Reviewer: Sir Galahad

 

Another excellent chapter in what is fast becoming one of my favourite stories on here. A lot of questions answered, but a lot of things left wide open. All I can say is that he's got some serious training down the road. Rather him than me! lol. Well done.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks for the review! Yeah, it is going to be tough for him, but he realises what he has to lose if he doesn't do it. I certainly don't think he wants that ability going off again any time soon!

 

Date: 05/27/2009 05:53 PM

 

Title: Aftermath Reviewer: David McLeod "Don’t these people ever use phones?" No, and that's the least of their differences. What a grand story! This chapter gives us some important background while opening endless possibilities. (And as far as phones are concerned...I'd be selling my Nokia stock if I lived in this world.)

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thank-you David for your review. I felt it was important to put the cards on the table as it were, regarding Gary's abilities, and then leaving the door open for some interesting developments later on.

 

Date: 05/27/2009 05:18 PM

 

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Title: Revelations Reviewer: David McLeod

 

Gary's "voyage of discovery" is taking place on some very choppy seas, which makes the few moments of calm all the more important. It may come as a kick in the teeth to him when he learns something new about himself, but it's a real kick for the reader, as well. The mix of modern and medieval--computers, swords, Lords and a Seneschal in blazer in slacks--is excellent.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks David for the review. He is having a time of it lately, but is it going to get any better? Eventually...maybe! I thought the mix of modern and medieval as you put it, was important to this storyline. House Crane is over 2000 years old, so obliterating all that history with no reference to the past made no sense to me. Plus it allows me to delve into one of my favourite subjects a little later on in the story.

 

Date: 05/12/2009 08:25 AM

 

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Title: The Beginning Reviewer: Draigen

 

I like your writing style, it really cuaght me. but I won't be reading on after this chapter. I'm not one for vamire stories. Sorry, but keep the good writing up

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks for the review!

 

Date: 05/09/2009 10:48 AM

 

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Title: Revelations Reviewer: DavyBoi

 

I can only mirror what's been said already. Fantastic chapter, packed with everything. Amazing.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks for the comments, it's always pleasing to know people are enjoying the story.

 

Date: 05/08/2009 04:20 PM

 

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Title: Revelations Reviewer: Phoenix

 

Now that was a truly amazing chapter!!

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks for the review! This was my favourite to write so far, so I'm glad you enjoyed it.

 

Date: 05/08/2009 04:04 PM

 

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Title: Revelations Reviewer: Sir Galahad

 

Wow, where did that come from & I’m not talking about the cliffhanger! Lol. Great chapter and a little more of the mystery solved, but even more created.

 

You’ve created great interaction between Matt & Gary, and I totally got Gary’s anger at the end of the chapter, but didn’t see the result coming at all. His frustration has been subtly building up since chapter 2, and what a way to let it go! I wonder if that’s one of the talents that have been hinted at. Be certainly interesting to find out. Grrr, so many questions

 

I also liked the way you handled his first feeding, where he was so hungry he didn’t see a person, only food. I wonder if he’s lost his humanity as well; poses an interesting question.

 

Can’t wait for chapter 4 now.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks for the review Galahad. I'm pleased you liked this chapter, because this has been my favourite to write so far. I see you picked up Gary's building angst; but it was bound to come to a head sooner or later. As for what exactly happened, well that answer is in chapter 4. ) The first feeding was something I worried about, so a lot of thought went into it. It was like any starving man, they don't care what they eat, as long as the hunger is sated. The same principle applied here.

 

Date: 05/08/2009 01:26 PM

 

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Title: Initiation Reviewer: David McLeod

 

There's a lot of exposition; but, there's also a lot of information the reader needs to know. Normally, I'd suggest stretching it out, but this story is moving too fast to do that, and I don't want to be left in the dust wondering. Having an innocent, "ordinary and plain" begin the protagonist's education in the somewhat macabre situation in which he finds himself is pure brilliance. I felt his confusion, disbelief, fear, lust, and hunger. That's a lot for one chapter!

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thank-you David for your comments. There was an awful lot to cram in, and by all accounts, a lot more has yet to come. But hopefully the reader can catch a breather after Chapter 4!! ) Having the kid do his induction as it were, seemed the most plausible in my head at the time, so I'm glad that's worked out.

 

Date: 05/08/2009 06:47 AM

 

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Title: The Beginning Reviewer: taina1959

 

Yep, I agree with everyone, a Vampire with a twist! The suspense, love and caring speak volumes! And what a cliffhanger!! Those must be Katrina's people coming for Gary! Impatiently waiting for more! Bring on Chapter 3!

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks for the review! I think you'll find there are a few more twists in this story yet to come, so prepare to be surprised. As for the cliffhangers, I know you love them!! )

 

Date: 04/26/2009 02:23 PM

 

Title: Initiation Reviewer: Sir Galahad

 

What I like about this story, especially after this chapter, is how you have totally thrown the vampire handbook out the window. I never guessed the light walker ability at all, with the extras attached. Now the title makes sense.

 

I like the soul bonded element, rather than boy meets boy & falls instantly in love, very well done. I was worried for a second it was going to be stereotypical.

 

Katrina has me intrigued I have to say, you keep teasing us with that side, but still I'm hanging on wanting more.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

I wanted to do something totally different to what was already out there. Sometimes I got frustrated at stories which re-hashed the same thing over and over again. That's where the idea for this came from. Don't get me wrong, there are truly exceptional vampire stories out there, GFD to name just one. But I hope that I've brought something a little different to the table.

 

Date: 04/26/2009 11:48 AM

 

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Title: Initiation Reviewer: DavyBoi

 

I for one am really enjoying this story. Your not repeating the same vampire thing over again, for which I am thankful. I feel from the hints you subtly drop, there are a few more surprises to come. Really am looking forward to them. Bring on chapter 3.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thank you. The whole point of writing this story was to get away from the stereotypes as it were, to maybe put a new twist on things. It's not going to please purists I know, but I hope the folks out there are enjoying it so far. Yeah, the surprises aren't over with just yet, have a few more up my sleeve.

 

Date: 04/26/2009 04:11 AM

 

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Title: Initiation Reviewer: Phoenix

 

He seems to be accepting it far too well.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Believe me, I did toy with the whole angst thing & even put in a large segment that dealt with it. But, it didn't fit & certainly didn't feel right to me, hence it was deleted. He's soul bonded with this guy, everything else is secondary. That's why he feels so comfortable around him, why he doesn't run & if you remember, why he didn't reject him in the first chapter! He subconsciously chose to accept this and to give up freely his mortality. So given that, any reluctance, I feel, wouldn’t have made sense.

 

 

Date: 04/25/2009 10:24 PM

 

Title: The Beginning Reviewer: Phoenix

 

Wow. That was such an amazing story! I so cannot wait for chapter 2. The ending was just so.... intriguing. I'm wondering who they all were now. I think it'd be cool if Gary showed up with his new bf to make the ex jealous.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Thanks, though I feel you were disappointed with chapter 2!

 

Michael does turn up in CH3, and let’s just say....it's an interesting encounter. )

 

Date: 04/21/2009 10:19 PM

 

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Title: The Beginning Reviewer: DavyBoi

 

Great start, especially for your first attempt. Defiantly want chapter 2.

 

Date: 04/10/2009 05:39 PM [Respond]

 

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Title: The Beginning Reviewer: David McLeod

 

For a first attempt at writing for an online audience, you're off to a good start. The story arc is solid. While the characters are still a bit transparent, they're also off to a good start. The cliché of a failing relationship that begins Chapter 1 is rescued by the mystery and suspense in the last few lines. By all means, bring on Chapter 2!

 

Date: 04/09/2009 08:16 AM [Respond]

 

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Title: The Beginning Reviewer: taina1959

 

I had a feeling when I read the title but wasn't sure until the end,,, I really like where you're going with your story!!! Definitely want chapter 2! Let me know if you need it edited.

 

 

Author's Response:

 

Yeah, am getting that a lot with the title, but there is more to it as you will see in forthcoming chapters. If your serious about the editing, could you e-mail me & let me know. Tnx.

 

Thanks again for the positive comments.

 

Date: 04/08/2009 09:26 PM