Comicality Posted February 25, 2012 Posted February 25, 2012 And read the beginning of the story at the link below! Enjoy, and as always let me know what you think!http://www.gayauthor...mlover-extended
Mikelaing74 Posted March 1, 2012 Posted March 1, 2012 I've got to say it's a bit hard going reading through this. I like the development you've put into Donnie and the rest of the gang. But the first chapter was a killer, 20,000+ words ! I think it could have been split slightly, perhaps making it a bit more diary style ? But I'll stick with it and see how I feel at the end
Comicality Posted March 4, 2012 Author Posted March 4, 2012 mmm, interesting. Now when you say you a bit more 'diary style', do you mean like "Billy Chase"? Just curious. Did it seem long or slow paced to you?
Mikelaing74 Posted March 4, 2012 Posted March 4, 2012 You laid an awful lot down in the first chapter, I know it's necessary but it nearly killed me reading it. It was very long and yeah it was slow paced. I've not read Billy Chase, so I can't comment on that. But I think in the first chapter you covered too much.
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