Comicality Posted February 25, 2012 Share Posted February 25, 2012 And read the beginning of the story at the link below! Enjoy, and as always let me know what you think!http://www.gayauthor...mlover-extended Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mikelaing74 Posted March 1, 2012 Share Posted March 1, 2012 I've got to say it's a bit hard going reading through this. I like the development you've put into Donnie and the rest of the gang. But the first chapter was a killer, 20,000+ words ! I think it could have been split slightly, perhaps making it a bit more diary style ? But I'll stick with it and see how I feel at the end Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Comicality Posted March 4, 2012 Author Share Posted March 4, 2012 mmm, interesting. Now when you say you a bit more 'diary style', do you mean like "Billy Chase"? Just curious. Did it seem long or slow paced to you? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mikelaing74 Posted March 4, 2012 Share Posted March 4, 2012 You laid an awful lot down in the first chapter, I know it's necessary but it nearly killed me reading it. It was very long and yeah it was slow paced. I've not read Billy Chase, so I can't comment on that. But I think in the first chapter you covered too much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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