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Yoru... The names sound like they look for the most part. It's a challenge to completely make them up. As I don't really base them on anything. Some of them I do like Adar Dyriad. It all ties together with what his magical abilities are, and I bet some of you can guess what it relates to. Lava and flames?.... heh not so much but I hope it'll be just as interesting. Thanks for reading Mark. I'll write as fast as I can inbetween school work.

The gays were here longer than that too I would bet. It's a natural thing I would say. But the world would never accept such a thing (as of right now).

It's nice to know that there are those who will speak up for those too afriad to do so or cannot. Thanks! And go you!

Heh well thanks for your understanding. Plus where are the thoughts of my other readers!!!?!?!?!? Ricky and Cia couldn't be upping my read numbers alone... I'd be very sad.

Yes! Someone (though I know there are others, probs most of my voiceless readers who can't type but can seem to be able to read and navigate the net.... ) understands. Or least is saying something. I like stories where it is hard to like the main character but you stick it out to learn something in the end. Whether it be a understanding from the main character or the consqeunce of the character's actions. Now I won't comment how the story ends but that's my frame of thought behind stories like these.

Did I use the word toon? Ah if I did it was a mistake. It was not an anime reference. It was a reference to the online game City of Heroes/Villians. We call the characters we create a toon. I use to play it a lot but quit and the lingo stills sticks with me. Toon = character. Can mean the character of a person or the someone themself. Heh well if I only cared about the mulah I wouldn't even be on here right? I still care about my readers. The reality is the school work. I'm being swamped with homework. Loads and loads of projects and analytical readings. All due the next meeting day and getting assigned a new one. It's overwhelming but I guess that's what happens when you have two more semesters to go. I write Mages and Get There as a means to escape my reality, so I am sharing it with you guys. Thanks for reading them and caring about them as I do.

Ricky- Heh I will try my best. But I am also writing novel that I hoped I can get an agent for... to be published. And I got school work... loads of it. (Already). So yes I will update as fast as I can. Cia- Heh thanks for telling me you enjoyed the story and eluding to the "talent" that I have. I try and it's good to hear that my attempts are making grounds, even if it is small. Heh yeah I thought I shouldn't keep my readers too much in the dark. Yoru's road has just began. Ryon is creepy, I know, he's one of those guys . As for the good or bad guy, you'll find out later. Muahahahaha. -everyone- You guys should leave comments or thoughts. I'd love to hear them. Hopefully you guys are enjoying the story. The characters are coming along together. You still have more characters to meet and explanations to others as to why they are at the Academy and how they will affect the outcomes of the fate of the Academy. Happy readings!

And we get the premise of the story, but where are the details? So any more thoughts? Comments? Questions? Let me know.

OH! Someone finally quote me... guess I'm not invisible after all. Dang.

Fail? I think over 4 million copies sold for each book is not failure. Somehow that series had captivated the mass. I have to admit I read all 4 books and I concur as I fail to see how people can obsess over these books. Harry Potter I can understand. The Percy Jackson series I feel should recieve more attention and the Maxium Ride books I see the last two books as failures... Twilight is an anomaly. Though truthfully I would hope to have the success of Twilight when my "mainstream" book gets out (if ever). The toy part is just ridiculous but I can see many older women imagining the SUPER hot AND underage Jacob thrust his hips into them.

As Americans we do NOT care about the proper way of saying something. Our way of saying something IS the proper way.

This story is a coming of age story and so I'll let you take that as you will. But I do hope people do get a sense of understanding. The fact is, it IS life. Someone's life. The position Kan finds himself, many people I know have been in. And for Kan and those people I know, to make a seemingly simple decision has either torn the person apart (ie family shunned them, ignoring them completely... or worst) or they find that they have understanding people in their lives. I'm in that position and I have not made that choice that Kan faces. I guess what I am trying to say is... it's easy for someone to read or watch someone in Kan's position and get irratated or angry or annoyed but place yourself in his position and try to imagine what he's going through. He doesn't know how'll people will react and he has to decide whether or not to take that chance. It's a big decision because it's going to change his life drastically and when a decision that's seems small can cause such a huge wave in one's life, it's not an easy decision to make. That is what I'm trying to portray and if it annoys you then great, that's the story's job, but if you stop reading the story then I can only ask that you pick it back up and read (if you liked it to begin with) because like Joey said it's life and a life cannot be taken for granted.

Your concern is noted with me. I have two stories currently in efiction and I post them about the same time but now that my life has gotten busy, my posts will stagger. Though I agree with what is said before. As I find it very hard the one month that I have been here (just about) it's hard to get people to read your work. As everyone likes different things. I find that people like modern stories more than fantasy here. At least of my stories as my modern story gets more hits than my fantasy although my fantasy is slowly being built as I have to carefully keep track on what is going on, attention to the details in that story also takes a lot of time. I have made two forum discussion page, one for each story and people still don't use it. I encourage it as a chapter end note for people to use it but my efforts seems wasted. But I can't lose hope. Just be active and continue to do what you do, write and post. It's the only way to be read anywhere really. With more writing, you get better at it. And if you get better, people will want to read your stuff. Also I think a stories description is very important. I am a student taking 18 credits and working a full time job who also writes, I find very little time to read the stories here on efiction (along side with the published books I also read) and so the way I find a story to read on efiction is reading the description. If it interests me than I'll read it. If not I'll skip it. I'll be honest here also, your first chapter better be captivating in some sense or else I'll be on my way to find a new story. Decently written, I know some of us don't have editors so I let small to medium grammatical errors or mistypes go, but if the story lacks written cohesion I skip it. In terms of captivating, I mean I have to like something about the story. Is the plot (or in a better terms... my understanding or belief of the premise of the story) interesting? Do I like one of the characters? Or do one of the characters rub me the wrong way (that will actually keep me interested) so I can keep reading so I can see the bitchin' payback with pleasure? Is there a unique perspective that I haven't thought of or heard referenced to a lot? All these things I take into consideration and I admit it, I am a little harsh but as writers we have to realize that people are in fact people. They may be just as busy as we are, so as writers we have to do things correctly in our work to keep their interests. If this is what you want to do with your life (be a writer) then efiction here is perfect as it reflects the business world of publishing. When you scout for an agent you have a query letter and that's it. You have to make your story interesting, sell your story. Be to the point. Don't add in your personal thoughts of the story... I think this is or this story will... of course you'll think that way, it's your work (and side note you better feel that way about your work... nothing is more obvious than a writer who doesn't care about their work... and it makes for a crappy reading). State what the story is about in a few sentences don't give me paragraphs. I'll decide for myself. But that is how I read and scroll through efiction and I'm sure I am not the only one, so again like everyone says be active. It'll help.

Oh you have to tell me how that book is. I want to read that book but am having reservations about it for soem reason. You should leave a comment on my profile. Both are excellant recommendations. The Road is written with elegance. Neil Gaiman is a great author. I love his quirky novels. I am reading: Flyboys: A True Story of Courage by James Bradley (a historical novel) First Lord's Fury by Jim Butcher (fantasy novel based on ancient roman era) On my read list: The Uglies Series by Scott Westerfield The Maze Runners by James Dashner

Kan is many ways like me. I have a very strong need for privacy and though my friends opinions differ as to why I have that strong need I believe it is partially due to my cultural background. We don't involve others in our personal turmoils. It's not polite for someone to carry your burden and in a way if you tell others about your troubles you are in a sense giving them a part to carry (as they may have concerns for you). Though I believe Kan attitude does concern a bit of that, he has a lot to deal with and has been dealing with them by himself at a young age, it in a sense for him it's normal. Of course that's what I think. Who knows? As I am 5 or 6 chapters form the end we will find out when the times comes, or make our own opinions. The characters are writing their own story not me.

It's good to hear that what I am trying to get aross is there. I was worried. As to the comment. I'm not sure the reader felt that way, but I am sure there is a reason. He hasn't reached me about it and he'll probabaly (if he didn't already) stopped reading the story. Kan does have a lot on his plate. Because of that that's why he isn't as kind to Beau as he should be. I know if I was in that situation I would be Kan. It's selfish. Yeah but when you are in the dump like that it happens. Plus I also beleive a part of you don't realize that you are acting selfish in some ways. Then culturally, dealing with personal problems are personal. It's rude to let others hear about your issues because you're imposing your life, feelings, emotions, etc on others which is then making their burden heavier (why suicide is high in Asia, like Japan). That's also an important detail that I haven't let shown upon in the story yet. Feel free to join in anytime guys. State what you will. Ask about what other post, including me, or even challenge them. Make your own assesments and put it on the forum. Let us know. Let's talk about things.

"You have to realize you are not the only one in this world that is suffering." - I dont remember who... "Yes, by the end of Grease, Sandy had become your basic 1958 model ho: the girl who, after suffering months of rejection for being a party pooper prude who didn't drink or smoke, has finally realized that you do have to pet to be popular, you do have to put out to get the guy, and it's not the blondes who have more fun - it's the sluts"- Bitch- by Elizabeth Wurtzel "All things with a form eventually perishes, but these feelings inside <us> won't." - Can't remember this one either...

heh where do you even find all these things... haha

These are amusing. I think I'm going to write a story filled with these for my writing class this upcoming semester. Already starting...

Heh, people are strange. What I wanna know is.... WHERE THE HELL IS THAT THEATRE IN THE PICTURE!?! The guy on the right is like digging in a damn pizza. There isn't pizza at any of the theatres I have been in. And I been to many in 8 different states. A whole pizza in a movie in a theatre would be nice for some movies.

Hey guys. Welcome to this forum. Here you can talk about anything about my story Get There. We can have a discussion and yeah just basically talk and go over the topics, characters, and relationships in my story. Voice your opinion and we'll expand on them. Be constructive and be honest. Thanks guys. Oh and I got my first negative review and I am hoping to see why that reader thinks my story is manipulative. Anyone else feels so?

Heya, here's the link to Chapter 1. Or click on my signature leading to my stories and then to the story.

Oops my mistake. I meant to edit and then somehow ended up quoting... my bad folks.

Haha...well crap then I just can't add random crap in now and I have to keep my facts straight. Oddly enough I an experencing a toon take over story telling mode. Initially I wanted one of the relationships to be abusive but not becuase the characters have taken a life of their own I don't see that road likely. Though it's going to be more of a subtle relationship. Hmmm. I'm beginning to think this is gonna be more focused on the fantasy element than what I originally intended. Originally I want a gay fantasy story but now I am finding that the plot is much more interesting and thus focusing my efforts there. So I guess what I am trying to say is I do hope you all continue to read but this story is (hopefully) an epic tale of good versus evil, Academy style. With hints to a few gay characters. Haha.