Andrew Q Gordon

Huh? As one of your more loyal readers, I'm highly offensive - errr offended. Why wouldn't I like it? Cause Kynan gotten beaten to a pulp? Goes to his room and pouts. You for got this: Very cool - I won't get to read this just yet, but will do it when I get my next fix oh and just make sure posting these doesn't hold up the regularly scheduled posting. Andy

No thank you for reading and for letting me know what you think. I appreciate both Andy

Took me a second to recognize the line - thank you Cyhort the Barbarian.

I made the mistake of wondering over and reading this thread - I said mistake because I read the part about 100 chapters and two years - I started a thread in my forum tangentially about this - i.e. wait for the final story or read as you go. Two years is a LONG time to read chapter to chapter. I might need to wait a bit for more to get posted, otherwise I'll forget what happened in chapter 1 and 2 that you touch on again in chapter 84. Really 100 chapters over two years? No way to tweak that - okay bludgeon it really - to make it be here quicker?? Just wondering. It's a great read either way. Andy

Youser, do they pay those folks to help or make things worse? We have judges who deal with this stuff so that before anything like this could be done someone who isn't out to make a name for themselves listens to both sides. Not that my experience in this area is vast but it is extensive enough to know this would get tossed out almost from the get go after a hearing where River had a lawyer who was merely awake - the atty didn't need to be competent even. LOL. If this is what Soc Services is like, keep em away from me and mine. I think I need to stop and read something a bit lighter, like War and Peace or Apocalypse Now.

So the boys get to play while the men talk about weighty issues. Why does it feel River is 53 not 23? I suppose his 'life' experiences are a bit more than one his age would have. Being a carer, I mean his career as one left us with the impression he is older than he is. But the little bitch who came over. Hmm either she is taking money from Cruella Henson or she has decided that this case is going to be her stepping stone to a promotion. Or then again, maybe she is just like Cruella Henson and disapproves of what is happening. As I said last chapter, you didn't let things be good for long now did you?

SO things seem to be settling slightly - though Silver has had a set back. Now is the perfect Nephy moment to cause problems. The idea that Ben is a little River seems right and wrong. It's hard to imagine he was not tainted by the evil things Sophy got his parents to accept. Perhaps that is why he and Silver get on so well. Both managed not to let the evil around then corrupt their true nature. I click to the next chapter with a twinge of fear. You are never this good for long.

HAPPY BIRTHDAY RAMON!!!! Hope it's a good one!

Do they have licenses for people like Ms. Ward? I mean, doesn't gross incompetence lead to dismissal? It doesn't here in the US but I had high hopes things were better over on that side of the pond. It seems that - as dirty as you plan to make this, River - and Silver - have an extensive net work of people, important people, who know and care about them. Their contacts all speak well of them. Can't you just line them up in two parallel lines, give each as stick or a pipe, and make Sophy and Ray run the gauntlet. If they can make it to the other side they can have been. My guess is they won't make it past 1/4 of River's friends an supporters. But that's just my idea. I'm sure you have worse.

Silver has never encountered anyone like Sophy it seems. Even the Master and the others were not hateful, evil yes, but not hateful for the sake of being so. It is hard to see him so hurt because he can't process the thing in the way other can. He has no ability - at least not yet - to filter out things people like Sophy say. He is, as you portray him, a child. Thankfully they tossed Cruella and her henchman out on their bums. You'd think Ben was the key to unlocking Midas's treasure the way they are after him. As strong as Silver is, as strong as River believe him to be, River is by far the stronger of the two. he is not allowed to break down, show his fears or emotions. Silver and Ben both depend on him too much for that. Why do I worry you are going to do something so awful to River that I will never forgive you?

Oh Nephy, bad, wicked, awful, Nephy. You just have to torture the boys don't you? Any chance we can resurrect Faith, convince him Ray and Sophy are River and Silver[ they have the same initials after all] and tell him those two are to blame for his predicament? Please???

Soccer is a small piece of the story. Yes there are a few games, but for the most part they are short. Not southeast PA, south Central - Harrisburg is the nearest city. BUT the place is totally made up. It was easier to make it up as I went then try to keep it true to some real place and school

Thanks Matt, hopefully it will grow on you, it was/is a tad on the long side I am learning. But at least it is complete so you won't have to wait for the 'next chapter' like some people did as I was writing and posting

Wow, the Dark Prince really is quite the charmer eh? Don't see why Kynan isn't falling all over himself to be with that Suave Demon. Not entirely sure what is going on with Alan in this chapter - does this follow chronologically the last one or is this just before the last chapter ends? And who knew that you could get spooge on you from dream lovin. Obviously Kynan didn't LOL. Thanks for my weekly fix

Point of clarification - is there something wrong with a title that is a bit explainy. Because it actually could refer to lots of things with Gar Shorter won't work. You know what time it is - has specific meaning OTHER than the obvious which is spelled out in the chapter - so it can't be shortened without obliterating the mean Meh - still got nothing - and surprise surprise - I like mine best still LOL. yes I know I am narcissistic author wanna be.

PK's review is accurate it is horribly sad to see the innocent suffer - but isn't that the emotion you sought to evoke? One innocent also suffering is Bashta. How bad was it to watch his clan die the first time, including his own father as he scrawled go away on a tree, then to have to reopen that wound. You did well, it hurt - now make us happy soon.

Uffff! Much worse than my guess that the Master had found them. Poor River and Ben. Auntie Cruella Deville and hubs sound like ... well Cruella Deville and hubs. If River ever doubted the depth of Silver's love he should be past that now. I thought the part where he explains - patiently I might add - to River that when you love someone this is what you do for them. Like Duh!! At least this one was cliff free. Whew.

See oh dark one, you scared me off with the talk of guns and stuff - so I stopped reading and you posted 18 more chapters in the mean time - lordy I am behind. So Exhibition went well, River and Silver are happy - time for Nephy to twist the knife. And there you go - leaving us on a cliff at the end of chapter 5. Shame, shame, shame. But then why am I not surprised to be left on a cliff waiting to hear the master found them and they are going to be on the run again. Hopefully my guesses are not very good.

I think I kinda like memories but well saying why I might not want to use this chapter just yet might give away too much. What do you think about Emotions of a Different Life? And for 3 what about 'You know what time it is." That is what thugs say to their victims just before they Rob them. Since that was used in the chapter, maybe that? The problem with the Rescue is it is so descriptive. That and it tells what is going to happen before you read the chapter. Come on people help the Queen of Andyland out here

HAPPY BIRTHDAY JWOLF!!!!!! Make sure to do something fun. Just not too fun, we don't want to see you in jail or added to someone's 'list'

:o Your tricksy... remind me not to mess with the Bee. But I find it best that one not lie to the hubby - or in your case the wife [when you get there]. After 16 years the - don't lie to Mike - policy has served me well. And clearly you can see he subscribes to it as well - he told me after 1 page - meh, not liking it already. LOL.

Not sure I am going to use either BUT Memories alone might work. Appreciate the help - especially since I am feeling so lazy

Chapter Three is up: Purpose Chaper 3. Thanks to all who've commented, much appreciated. Those who read but haven't, toss me a bone and say hello. I think the I would like to ask for a bit of help. I haven't been give chapter titles, so how about those who are reading suggest some and I'll probably use them. But Chapter 1 is a Journal entry so it is simple Journal Entry 39-24. Thus only Chapters two and three need names. Thanks

Cute, but don't you think he'll figure it out fairly quickly??? :wacko:

Geez that was some funky lovin going on in da dreamscape baby. Kynan is way more complicated that he first let on. And much less sure of himself as well. Alan wouldn't hate him. He wanted Kynan as much if not more. Scared off? Doubtful too. Kynan might feel he has more experience than Alan but truth be told Kynan's ability to connect on an intimate level that was more than sexual is not better if not worse than young Alan. Now if we can get Kynan away from the big bad demon prince. Dark, get your ass connected and keep posting.