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Intriguing start, I’m looking forward to reading more.
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Chloe Bends Sebastian's Ear
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Chloe Bends Sebastian's Ear
Ha ha, this line is funny - ‘Have you never heard of multitasking, Sebastian? Women can be simultaneously ecstatically happy and inconsolably sad.' -
I am sad about Reginald’s passing, but I suppose I’ll forgive you because it sets us up for an extremely interesting tête-à-tête between Jarek and Sebastian. Looking forward to exploring the sadness and possibility/hope which is hinted at in their lingering handshake. If I read this right, Rex Trovert has replaced Mr. Noall as the principal of Sebastian’s old school. Congrats to him.
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Chloe Bends Sebastian's Ear
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Chloe Bends Sebastian's Ear
Yes, I am all for people beyond two parents taking responsibility for the support and guidance of children and adolescents. I agree parents cannot and should not be excepted to be everything at all times to/for their child. -
Chloe Bends Sebastian's Ear
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Chloe Bends Sebastian's Ear
Oh dear, we’ve lost Reginald... 😥 -
Jarek & Leon; Bindi, Irma & Violet.
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Jarek & Leon; Bindi, Irma & Violet.
I like the description of Jarek and Leon’s weekend adventures. Do they mirror any of your own adventures in the bush? -
Leon has a wise and supportive Grandfather, a new friend in Hank, and is able to spend his weekends unwinding in the forest like a feral animal with Jarek. A perfect trifecta of supportive people, life is looking up. His parents story could have been taken from the headlines (or rather a corner article on a back page of the newspaper [if such news is printed at all]) any day in this country... I hope we will see a little more of Jarek and Leon’s friendship and adventuring.
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Crime, Punishment & Another Successful Week
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Crime, Punishment & Another Successful Week
Ha ha - I’ve heard of having a stick up your ass, and even your head up your ass, but a knife is new. This is a novel side of Jarek, stealth and deadly. I hope Jarek’s friendship match will be successful for Hank and Leon. -
Ah, I see Saki has a character named Reginald. Any influence on the naming of this Reginald? I agree, from a reader perspective, that short stories take a very special touch. This one is just right! I like Sebastian’s portrayal as free spirited. I think the silk cloth is hilarious. Those kind of devices are usually only reserved for promiscuous female characters. It’s nice to see the excessive and dramatic language used to celebrate sexuality (in this case our handsome young hero), instead of set up a scheming female character for a later fall from grace.
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Ha ha- "A tiny wisp of silk covering his groin, fluttered in the light breeze like a turquoise butterfly impatient to escape. As an ornament to accentuate the golden hue of Sebastian’s satiny skin it was perfect. As a garment to conceal his manhood it failed exquisitely." I like this story, your writing seems more dramatic than usual. It feels like it should be a stage production.
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I have not yet read Spreading the Word. I’m glad we’ll see Seb and Reggie again, they are thoroughly enjoyable.
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Ha, I like this description- ‘his chest filled with such a feeling of gratitude and happiness he wondered if a heart attack was imminent.’ Rex and Fee did very well to take out mortgages on the properties instead of trying to sell them. And I think they are right, dealing with this mess will be much worse for Farzdbuk than a quick death. Sebastian and Reginald have a lot of potential happiness to look forward to, and I’m sure they will come up with something useful to do with the money. Will Seb want to stop after one dance at ‘Hole in One’ or is he going to catch performance bug?
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Ha ha, the fire alarm is clever.
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Innocent mutually pleasurable activity... someone should put you in charge of Sex Ed curriculums👍
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Ah, I just saw the above comment. Yes, I did reread it, but I don't read your chapters on here anyway. I've found downloading the ebook is more convenient and allows me to highlight things. Your writing is richly packed, and deserves to be reread. Fee's statement is a good and necessary one, and an attitude gaining popularity. You were perhaps ahead of your time. I would also suggest that the necessary undercurrents to Fee’s statement are mutual respect and functional communication. Without them, libertine attitudes toward sexual inhibition and freedom cannot guarantee physically and psychologically healthy sex for all participants.
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Lots of well earned sexual (and emotional) release in this chapter. Everyone has become quite comfortable with one another.
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Winding Up - Winding Down
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Winding Up - Winding Down
Here we are, in the heart of the action. The harrowing rescue was successful. Some body parts were hacked off, and a kidney dislodged, but the young men and their daring rescuers have escaped and conquered. You are very skilled at managing a large cast of characters and creating interpersonal interactions that are fresh, insightful, and deeply felt. -
Performance, Stake-Out, Abduction
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Performance, Stake-Out, Abduction
Dear me, the young innocents have been unconsciously dragged into the dark undercurrent of Fardzbuk's dealings. Rex, Fee, and Con better be prepared for action. This is amusing and accurate, "Inside the noise was heart-stopping rather than merely loud. The bass turned up enough to bring down the walls of Jericho." The warming relationship between Reginald and his father is nice. I also enjoyed the description of Rodney's dance, he is a capable artist and athlete. You have a flair for choreographing your characters' performances. Now the question is, will Sebastian and Reginald keep all their organs intact and follow through with their performance at 'Hole in One' on Wednesday? -
Ah ha, I hadn’t thought to initial the first name. How clever. Your young innocents always attract a lot of trouble. Should I count on Con, Fee, and Rex to make sure they don’t get themselves killed?😟
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Ha ha - "The selection was wide; from hard-core heterosexual couplings with extreme violence to vanilla gay and lesbian." Sounds about right. Arnold S. Semble, Arnold it seems? This hospital setup is distressing. I hope Reginald and Sebastian will be well equipped for their meeting with Fardzbuck on Monday...
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Fee Approaches the Problem Rationally
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Fee Approaches the Problem Rationally
I find your humour extremely amusing. I suppose it's not suited to everyone. Yes, there is a seriousness to many of your views, but given half your characters run around in the buff attracting one ludicrous adventure after another, your fiction is hardly susceptible to a mood of Weltschmerz. -
Fee Approaches the Problem Rationally
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Fee Approaches the Problem Rationally
This was a very enjoyable chapter. The advancements of many of the interpersonal relationships were deftly, sensitively, and humorously portrayed. I'm happy to learn more about Reginald. Ha ha- ‘“I stormed out with only my school books.’ ‘No worries, you can have my clothes and we’d already decided you’d be staying with me.’ ‘You haven't got any clothes,’ Reginald said with a sad, wry smile. and ‘How does she cope with your father’s job? Aren’t performing artists and strippers sinners?’ ‘Not if Dad can make money out of them. Fee's talents are an invaluable addition to the team, but I have to agree with Sebastian's premonition "it was all too good. Something was going to go wrong." -
Ha, genteel set of genitalia. I’m sure they’re lovely, and fresh air is both refreshing and healthy, but unfortunately it seems to be causing trouble with the locals. The pressure is on Desolé, and it’s not looking good for her offspring. Hoping the dinner at Rex’s goes well🤞.
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Constantine & Guapo, Rex & Fee, Desolé & herself
sef commented on Rigby Taylor's story chapter in Constantine & Guapo, Rex & Fee, Desolé & herself
Another lovely romance consummated. I am interested in Reginald's commitment to action in the last paragraph. I think his concern for Sebastian's safety is not misplaced given Desolé's actions and her nefarious business associates; however, I wonder if his protective streak will go to far and encounter some pushback from Sebastian. They need to work together, not make decisions for the other about what is safe and appropriate and what isn't.
