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Chapter 7 is presently in the hands of my editor. Once he makes sure I haven't screwed it up the chapter, it will go up for my fans. In the meantime I have begun work on chapter 8. That is all on the updates for the moment.

Yeah, someone read it. Glad you liked it. Wasn't sure if I should have continued now that 8 is human and all. But glad you thought it was good.

Okay I'm writing this again. I think this was a hard story to read in the beginning. I dislike anyone who can abuse someone. I forgive his father at the end. Lord talk about large tools. Well we know someone is going to be getting a sore hole. lol. But I don't think he will mind. For their sake i hope the farm does well and they have a decent life together.

Okay I so need for you to finish this. I want to know what happens to Tad. His mother is a smart woman and Joy is just that, a joy. More please.

I'm glad he had to pay for not listening. Do I sound vindictive? I hate it when someone has a love and doesn't trust it like they should. I loved your whole story. I am glad I found it and it was a great treat. I am glad I didn't give up when I suspected of him cheating and then seeing how he lied to spend time with Kyle. Of course now I really wonder what Sophia did to Kyle. I know it had to be something worth writing home about.

I've read the whole story till here. I am to say disappointed would be an understatement. Here he had been warned and instead he lied and is now cheating. Truthfully if he can't commit and be honest I hope he dropped and never taken back. I like him as a character but this isn't just a minor character flaw. I feel like I have been attacked by someone I trusted. He has others lying for him. God help him when Sophia discovers he is cheating on her son with Kyle.

Rats, Frosty beat me to the first review. Oh well. 1) You handled the sex very well. I was glad to see that at least one of them was a bit panicked over the sex. Dan still is such a sweetheart. I really like him a lot. 2) I like that we are learning about this world as Dan does. It allows us to be taken along the ride. I don't need it spelled out for me if I am discovering along with Dan. I like he has made friends with the family. It gives him another tie to this world besides Matt so when the war comes, and yes we know it is coming, he has more than one reason to fight. 3) You have been teasing us with Hquaio for a while now. Miniatures in one chapter, his name again and again. Finally we here his voice. So next we get an answer. 4) Only one more question .... how soon till the next one.

Stu you are driving me nuts here. okay I kept reading, sue me. This story gets better as you go along. I liked how each one keeps offering up parts of himself for the other. I agree with Frosty - Don't need the details but the aftermath is going to be necessary so we know how both deal with this major step in their relationship. Just pretend you are teasing Mark. lol. But honestly great story and can't wait for more. Write, soon, please. Realize you are now on my need the next chapter soon list.

Okay I'm reading this in pretty much one sitting. Just did the first 12 Chapters. So happy with the story so far. Glad to see the format straightened out. It was taking me out of the story. Just a couple of quick comments. 1. Matt seems to still be growing into his powers. Was scared as hell seeing him shoot out the energy early in the story but glad to see he seems totally at home now that he and Dan are together. This new power of vision is going to be interesting to see what you do with it. 2. Dan is growing to be a true sweet heart here. I am glad he got past Owen and has forgiven himself. I like how he is fighting for his own position in this coming battle. I do hope he isn't killed off. I still want to know why such a powerful spirit found him so suitable. She hasn't told him yet and I think that is something you hopefully will explain to us. 3. Finally could you give us some sort of idea what the lovers of the Lords and Mistress are suppose to be doing. You have shown servants and made references to the various lovers as we meet them but what is their job? They sit just below their Lord/Mistress in meetings but are they just toys, partners, fighters, or is there a particular thing they are suppose to do. I just feel they haven't had their place fully explained. Great story and will finish it after I get home from work later today.

Happy Birthday JWOLF, Happy Birthday to you. I'd do a Marilyn impression but I don't hate you. Hope your day is a good one and enjoy.

Well considering where they are knitting I guess the socks they make would be funky. Hmmm. I wonder if I really want a pair or not. Magic pocket elves who make socks? I'm just not sure. oh well why the hell not.

Why did you feel him up?

Oops. I forgot to tell you mine A good book and my ipod.

Thank you for the save. Zaniest

Just so everyone knows - I found myself an editor. Thank you to both Frosty and Cia who noted mistakes. Feeling that I didn't want to take my readers out of my stories due to silly mistakes, amazing how I can catch others but fail to spot my own , I have managed to secure Voltaire to edit this story. So any mistakes up to now are mine and mine alone. Voltaire will be working his magic to edit my first six chapters and then going forward he will be correcting my screw ups so Charlie's story can be enjoyed. Thank you all for reading and hopefully now your reading pleasure will actually be a pleasure. In the meantime my gratitude to Voltaire is undying.

Okay you know you are going away from home on vacation for a few months. What is the one or two things you know you can't be without?

How old are you?

I have my editor. More like if something seems so glaring it takes the reader out of my story I want to know about it. The thing I forgot to consider was the person who read my chapter also can't cook at all. Burns water. lol. So without stopping to think about who the reader was I just wanted to make sure Charlie and I weren't the only ones who ran to our coping responses when things went wrong.

From your lips to my future lover's ears. lol. But I agree with you whole heartedly.

The knit what? If they knit in your pockets that means they have knitting needles, and you let them get that close to your ......? Wow. No further comment just WOW!

almost

Fly because then I could go where i want and make those I'm so damn tired I just flew in from jokes. lol Would you rather be powerful or Would you rather be loved

Why do you speak like that in a library?

For your sake I don't ever want to hear of an accident or worse something done on purpose. Your soul is too good to be hurt that way.

It rings a little too close to home. Your life is bleeding into your poetry. I hope you realize that the end you see is most likely the true one. For why would he say you are to go to hell for loving and being true?